Well, you're mostly correct. The writing is tedious for even those who understand the references and jokes. I am a pretty well-versed guy in pop culture references so many times the joke is so funny that I burst out laughing. But those jokes are rare as is understandable. Then there are jokes which are funny but don't make me laugh out loud. Then there is clever word play which is very nice to read. But then there are jokes that are so forced (even the writer admits that in-game, super 'Meta') that I wonder what was the point of that joke here.
It seems like the writer sets a quota for jokes that every piece of dialogue must contain a joke whether it needs it or not. I am very familiar with this kind of writing. I have read a lot of it (and unsuccessfully wrote some too). I have a quick reading speed and great reading stamina. I used to average 120-150 pages a day of normal paperbacks with only a few hours of reading time that I could manage between work and going above 200 during the climax of the book. This game tires me out. I can't even finish a chapter in one sitting even though I know it is nowhere close to what I am actually capable of.
Don't get me wrong I like the jokes but there are only so many times that you can enjoy a funny way to describe a penis, or the times you compare ejaculation with vomiting. After that, it is just how quickly my brain can ignore the joke and read what is actually being said. There is no doubt in my mind that a huge amount of effort went into writing this dialogue but maybe that much effort wasn't needed in the first place. In the pursuit of a joke in every new line, all you have achieved is redundancy in your writing. Repeating a joke multiple times with slight variations. I don't know what to tell you. Keep doing what you do best but dail back the jokes. During proofreading, if a joke seems too forced or too off-topic just take it out, man. At the end of the day, this game is not going mainstream, it won't get the acclaim it deserves for its witty humor and clever wordplay. It will only be read by a couple of thousand low-life degenerates like us.
