VN Ren'Py Project Myriam - Life and Explorations [Ch. 5.02+p] [Zorlun]

[Zorlun]

I think that the game is mostly excellent, and does a good job establishing the dynamics between the various characters. Language was a bit rough in a few places, but better than most games, including some written by native-English speakers. Some of the characters are a bit "lumpy" (big muscles don't look like that) but there are no freaks. People look their ages, which is refreshing. Tits are big but not torpedo-sized, also refreshing.

One of the things you should avoid is using the word "moan" as part of the MC's involuntary dialogue during sex. No one says "moan" when they moan. Just have her go "mmmmm" or "ooooow" or something to simulate the sound of a moan.

The game jumped into sex and kinks pretty quickly, but that didn't seem awkward. The attempted rape seemed a bit out of the blue, and the teenage kids were definitely not acting like teenagers around each other in the shower (they are no way going to take a shower at the same time as that, both being too insecure to let the other see them naked), but that's probably not a concern in a game like this.

This shows a lot of promise. My congratulations to the dev. If I were to have a voice in this, though, I'd tell you to generally stay away from the whole incest angle. That's been done to death and I think your story would be better if the sexual tension between family members was centered around shame rather than lust. There's plenty of other sources for lust here, and having a realistic family dynamic would make your game stand out.

Thank you for this.

Yes, my language is a bit rough, as it is not my native tongue I am not ashamed of my level, but it clearly need work, so please do not hesitate to correct me when you see something.
On that register I have a problem with onomatopoeia, each language has its own set, and I am quite lost for the english ones, the english I use in life is very conversational, not much occasion to see some written, and the "moan" one is one I was not happy about, I will change that.

For the incest part I hide the answer for those who do not wish to see spoilers.
On the incest part, it will be a possible path for the main character, but it will be far from being the only one, there is multiple strings of events that I have in mind with the son and daughter, some about love, other about lust, and there will be some just as mother and son or daughter.

I want to offer the player a lot of possibilities in the game so there will be a lot of possibles paths, that will intermingle, that you can follow or not.

 

[nional]

I really like the first sensation in the game, the feeling of control the destiny of the main character and the vibe in général. I just don't like the design, face of the two main female character but still wait to see the next update. Keep doing the game like you whant to go

 

[leon02457]

Best game with Milf ever can't wait to see next one

 

[xJuanzitox]

Thank you.

As stated in the header, it is my first game, first time programming, using daz3d and developing, so the quality will probably not be up to the level for now, but I hope it will pick your interest and give you a good time. ^^

It's perfect dude, very good quality and original history, the beginning just got me at first sight! Keep up with this work. None complaints about now and I believe u won't make any too lol

 

[dumtumdum]

Good game.

 

[xJuanzitox]

Thank you for the enthusiasm and support. ^^
And thank you for noticing the little "hommage" to slasher movies, notably to the Texas Chainsaw Massacre. ^^
There will be a string of events in the game that will follow that up, classified in the weird event she will cross path with, but not all the game will be with this flavor.

UUUUUUH, I just got goosebumps reading they will come back, I imagine they would when u introduced them. Don't worry about keeping the game just in this theme, the little u put, it's the right measure. It's been a while since a game got me like this and will wait anxiously with every update.

 

[Deleted member 2030943]

This is a great start seeing as it's your first VN. I did notice your GPU has an issue with shaders. Renders in normal lighting look crisp and clear while shaded objects look very grainy. Either an older GPU, a driver issue or an actual issue with the GPU itself if it's a newer GPU. I would definitely take care of that as soon as possible. Would definitely upgrade the quality of an already really good start. And was that a Steinbeck nod?

 

[xJuanzitox]

Answer hidden to not spoil those who do not wish to.
I have a string of events in mind with alien type monster, old school roswell in spirit with events around weird experiment like the old movies with their alien phobia and probing. ^^

As a big time lover of Lovecraft, I will definitely work also on a weird string of events around dark magic, cults and monster with tentacles. ^^

After that, as my inspiration will guide me.

For those weirded by this type of events, do not worry, they will be avoidable.

Holy fuck!!!!! U are becoming my favorite developer in porn games saying shit like this, the first paragraph I just imagined something like "fire in the sky". And if u put references to Lovecraft, this shit deserves an oscar lol. I'm a very passionate horror fan lmfao

 

[leon02457]

Dev when will next update coming can't wait to see

 

[88Michele88]

Any choise to make to play with?

 

[tulfo]

Andriod?

 

[Tragic Princess]

In games where the female protagonist is played, are there always weird muscular guys and ugly old men? I notice it's normal now.

Almost always lol

 

[EdPokol]

Many have said it already and I agree: Promising start, very promising indeed. So many choices and intriguing kinks already. Yeah, renders are grainy here and there but I'm sure this dev is a fast learner. Certainly looking forward to see what's next.
Zorlun Thanks and congrats

 

[Taker Fan]

I read FMC and I read what will later happen in this game. This is all I need to know. I will try it.

 

[DR_HOUSE]

good luck and many thanks for the game!

 

[Zorlun]

This is a great start seeing as it's your first VN. I did notice your GPU has an issue with shaders. Renders in normal lighting look crisp and clear while shaded objects look very grainy. Either an older GPU, a driver issue or an actual issue with the GPU itself if it's a newer GPU. I would definitely take care of that as soon as possible. Would definitely upgrade the quality of an already really good start. And was that a Steinbeck nod?

Yes, this is a problem I am on and want to solve, but it is not that simple when you are new to all this. For the hardware, I will not be able to update before long, I need some money for that.
Well I did not see the East of Eden de Steinbeck, so I can not say for sure, but as of the biblical reference, Myriam is not running away from a crappy situation to a land of peace and quiet, so not sure that the parallel with Cain searching for Nod is working here. Myriam is not also really wandering, she arrive in a new city and new life, but she is not endlessly searching for it, though it is true that once there she will be in a quest of soulsearching.

Dev when will next update coming can't wait to see

I think I will need at least one or two months, I am trying to solved my problem of noise in my renders, I already found a few solutions, but it need some tweaking. I want to solve this before attacking the renders of the first chapters, so I do not have to remake them in the future, for the renders of the intro, I will redo them little by little so I do not hold back my updates too long. I really wish that my game do not burn the eyes of my players with sand. ^^

Any choise to make to play with?

Sorry, I do not understand what you are asking. Can you reformulate please?

 

[88Michele88]

Sorry, I do not understand what you are asking. Can you reformulate please?

Any Choise to make in this game? Or this is KINETIC NOVELE = NO CHOISE (Only read)?

 

[Gamesstar]

I saw future genre tags.. female domination and footjob... I am in .
One question... will she dominate her male partners ?

 

[Philjd]

For the incest part I hide the answer for those who do not wish to see spoilers.

For this, if I may, rather than the MC being directly involved - depending on how her character develops - she could be reacting (only) to how father/uncle v's daughter, or aunt/cousin v's son. Instead of being instigator/recipient. A twist, but present.

 

[Zorlun]

Any Choise to make in this game? Or this is KINETIC NOVELE = NO CHOISE (Only read)?

Yes, choices are important to me, I explained this on my patreon page but not really here, I want the player to have the feeling of having some control over the story and the main character, some choices will have an impactful influence over the story, some will just serve to mold the character and other will just be cosmetic.

I saw future genre tags.. female domination and footjob... I am in .
One question... will she dominate her male partners ?

I hide the answer for those who do not wish to see spoilers.
There will be some scenes with Myriam dominating if the player make her go that way, and she will discover herself a little taste for it, but it will be more in her quest for independance, this is not how she is wired on the get go. Hope it does not disapoint you.

For this, if I may, rather than the MC being directly involved - depending on how her character develops - she could be reacting (only) to how father/uncle v's daughter, or aunt/cousin v's son. Instead of being instigator/recipient. A twist, but present.

I hide the answer for those who do not wish to see spoilers.
When the story advance to the point where she has a little trip home (to her family), she will discover some old family secrets.

Andriod?

If I find a way to do it, yes, but not for now, sorry.