- Jan 3, 2020
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The MC is trash, and it could get some better story like:
Instead of "life happened and we grew apart"... Explain what is "life happned" exactly. Maybe she was taking more care of other stuff and he took better care of his studies so he ended up having good grades and earning opportunities she couldnt get. This is not entirely his fault, maybe its her caring personality, i dont know.
Maybe he had to go elsewhere cause they were living in a trashy place. Maybe she was ok with him having to leave, but since we are selfish, she still expected him to stay by her side as he promised, even when they were kids when that promise was made.
This still leaves room for grudges, cause in the end he did the same as his father did, leave her.
And he can still have the option to be in contact with her, and maybe he is aware that he is a piece of trash and feels guilty and that can make you not face the person who makes you feel that, and in the end it makes the problem worst. The result can still be that he stopped "caring" about her but not because he doesnt care, but because he cares and feels guilty, but still he has to be selfish and look for himself.
ITs jsut an improvised background based on the story already set up, ther has to be more, that give thre same result and make more sense and create a more relatable MC, instead of a piece of trash who find his "stepsister" stealing and he is thinking about how hot is the mother of his girlfriend. Cmon!
For a child who has suffered trauma and is under Esatte protection is pretty normal to be provided with a Therapyst, so it would be some excuse to throw this exposition, or just talking to the girlfriend. Gilfriend are girls and gilrs are perceptive, and talking about your life with them i would say its normal if its a somewhow serious relationship.
Instead of "life happened and we grew apart"... Explain what is "life happned" exactly. Maybe she was taking more care of other stuff and he took better care of his studies so he ended up having good grades and earning opportunities she couldnt get. This is not entirely his fault, maybe its her caring personality, i dont know.
Maybe he had to go elsewhere cause they were living in a trashy place. Maybe she was ok with him having to leave, but since we are selfish, she still expected him to stay by her side as he promised, even when they were kids when that promise was made.
This still leaves room for grudges, cause in the end he did the same as his father did, leave her.
And he can still have the option to be in contact with her, and maybe he is aware that he is a piece of trash and feels guilty and that can make you not face the person who makes you feel that, and in the end it makes the problem worst. The result can still be that he stopped "caring" about her but not because he doesnt care, but because he cares and feels guilty, but still he has to be selfish and look for himself.
ITs jsut an improvised background based on the story already set up, ther has to be more, that give thre same result and make more sense and create a more relatable MC, instead of a piece of trash who find his "stepsister" stealing and he is thinking about how hot is the mother of his girlfriend. Cmon!
For a child who has suffered trauma and is under Esatte protection is pretty normal to be provided with a Therapyst, so it would be some excuse to throw this exposition, or just talking to the girlfriend. Gilfriend are girls and gilrs are perceptive, and talking about your life with them i would say its normal if its a somewhow serious relationship.
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