It is a novel, which I am converting to a game. Right now the levels to which the kingdom get developed will mostly impact the endings and open up or limit some options.
Instead of white try using gray.
Not sure how easy it is to do, but I've seen twine multiple games that offer light mode, dark mode, and sometimes other options. Just having a settings menu with a toggle for that could help alleviate people's complaints, since white on black and black on white cover will cover most people's general preferences.
I like this combo, just a minimal change, but better on the eyes, maybe a darker gray background could be even better.
Gotta disagree. I prefer to read the adventures of a hot girl (i.e first or third person), I'm not interested in imagining I am one (second person). Obviously this is something that is going to be dictated by who the target demographic is.
Maybe, but the whole story has already been written in third person and I'm not going back to change that now
Adding in the code to make the dialogue different colors is hair pulling enough.
The idea is good, but it isn't a game if the player can't fully interact with the story & immerse themselves in it. So far this is less of a game than even the noob-made storygames. Yes pictures could help, but the numerous meaningful choices are what turn a linear story into an actual game. For VNs the graphics are primary, but in Text-Based games the numerous meaningful choices are primary.
Ye are contradicting yourself- First Person & Second Person are pretty much the same (as ye are still supposed to imagine yourself as the person/gender), the difference between them is in the pronoun usage: First Person (I, me, my, mine, we, our, us) & Second Person (You, your).
The entire first novel is written, but only the first 6 chapters have been edited. I'm still not completely satisfied with the characterization of Marguerite and Jacqueline's relationship in the 7-10 chapter range so I want to rework that. There are 14 chapters total. Once I'm happy with that, and with how the game is formatted/structured, I'll begin working on the second book in the series. I have a rough plan for the trilogy, though obviously things are more uncertain the farther out I look.
Understandable, and it's something I've thought about. Sub content is my favorite so that's what I've written. There will be a stronger queen path which may end up becoming a Domme path if it proves popular enough. It will depend on if people would rather see me get started on part 2 of the story, or really expand and flesh out the game portion of part 1.
Considering the choices currently in the game, what meaningful differences would you like to see? I've considered adding in some early 'bad ends' like if you totally reject Prince Gailen, for example.
What novel If I may ask? Where can we read it?
Instead of just one choice that covers all of one particular segment, take out the automatic route of it & give more choices on what to do in each part of it instead of just having it flow in only one way with no extra input from the player. This way of giving one choice & then having the rest of the scene be automatic is pointless & it takes the interactivity away from the player. I understand this was first a novel, but it can't stay within the boundaries of a novel if it is supposed to be made into a game. Games & Interactive Stories (Storygames) have many choices to them & not just one random choice to cover an entire scene. Yes this will become more work, but it is needed to become a game.
Thanks for the advice. Right now only Chapters 1-5 of Queen's disGrace are published. You can read them either on Amazon or on my Patreon. I've also posted a draft of Chapter 6 on Patreon. I'll also be (slowly) posting the chapters on Literotica if you want to be patient.
It would be great if from the very beginning of the game could choose a path where the queen is a strong and dominant character who easily copes with all her enemies and does not succumb to blackmail. And accordingly, it would be great if on this path it was possible to avoid maledom and her humiliation.
