Ok instead of leaving a bad review I'll just comment here what i thought of the story so far. Because to me it would not be fair to review at this point because not much is there to review.
thank you for not leaving bad review, giving me a chance and commenting
Ok here goes. I like the art work the women so far are hot except Wendy.
Yeah i haven't seen any positive comment about her in both art except
Ph4r40h but mc and her are not lucky in genetics, i don't plan to change her new design, they have an appearance related events from childhood that need them ugly lol
but you will meet more hotties, even non love interest ones
The Engrish is not so good.
If you played the one here, it is non proofreaded version. I get help from bamachine now. If you say this about patreon version, I think maybe proofreader forgot something since they are also working on their game etc,
Not sold on the dog idea I'm sure there's a reason for the dog but not sure i like the idea of talking to a dog all the time. I'm not sure how much you've done so far but i would go back and lose the dog and make the women less of a bitch to MC. Also not sure what tags you have planned but i would go in a more Vanilla type story. I would focus on romance of the story and the main Li should be the family also make Wendy more attractive.
I also love dogs. My house hold often had more dogs than people in it lol. I have a dog named jack i've had for 12 years. But back to what i was saying about Sabir is maybe not take him out of the story because like you said it is a tie to the brother that died. But i don't like that he is so involved in the story that MC talks to him like he is another character in the story. I mean him being there and what he represents is a nice touch but acting though he is another character to talk to in the story i'm not to fond of. Off subject I hope this story will be more of a Vanilla romance theme. Also hope MC won't be a kind of a dick lol Like his inner dialog was when Mary took him home and asked him what he thought of the place lol.
The girls are mean but I think the MC has a chance of making them like him. Maybe they're mean because they secretly like him? Sandy was a nice addition to offset the others.
So far MC has met 3 women and a female store clerk and so far they are all bitches except Mary.
I totally understand you about your comment about sibir, it is normal to like animals but not enjoy its presence -especially heavily- in an adult game. Sibir will be mainly present when he is at home or park so in story arcs like sport events, puppytuber girl etc he wont be present. However there will be even more animal like sibir and bonbon lol, mc wont talk to all of them of course but i like their content)
dont worry guys bonbon wont steal all girls and ntr you
My game will definitely have romance,I love romance. The current chapters we are getting to know the cast, but the chapters after that(if things go as planned chapter 5 will be final intro chapter) will be more eventful and in this events you will get deeper relationship with girls.
MC is a bratty person and he has some prejudice about some characters before but his behavior can be changed in game. For example
if it was a kinetic game with mc's personality- you would automatically humiliate wendy when she falls Actually to progress further with some girls you have to change in personality, some girls wont tolerate rude behavior.
well about girls personalities
i dont think cashier is bitchy, just seemed cold to me (not very suitable for her job but who does her job perfectly anyway) could you guys explain why you think that way so I can improve it?
mary is holy mary, she gentle mama
lets say wendy has her own reasons-i wont spoil more plz-, she doesn't hate mc just because he exists, but yeah she really hates mc not just teasing like some other characters)
blonde is bitchy
yeah
not gonna pretend she is not
and have you guys ever thought what color was the light actually is
