- Jun 16, 2018
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I don't think it was that hard to follow. There were gramatical mistakes, of course, some threw off my immersion or made me read again a few times but from what I gather this story is trying to set up a mystery. Protag dies, goes to "heaven", gets ressurected, his memories that were lost also ressurect but in human form. I really like this, feels fresh and different. Also the style and humor are prety different from anything I've seen yet, not in a bad way.
I don't understand what people mean by characters being "bland"? If it's their looks, I wasnt expecting anything extreme from highschool people. If it's their personality...well how can you know if there's not enough content to know them better?
My point is that I think you have something pretty good here, dev. Maybe just get someone to proof-read for you to fix those grammar mistakes.
Just don't get demotivated mate!
I don't understand what people mean by characters being "bland"? If it's their looks, I wasnt expecting anything extreme from highschool people. If it's their personality...well how can you know if there's not enough content to know them better?
My point is that I think you have something pretty good here, dev. Maybe just get someone to proof-read for you to fix those grammar mistakes.
Just don't get demotivated mate!