"I-I'm so Sorry..." Lowercase 's'.
"Wow, your a chronic little" 'you're'.
"you catch her sneaking peaks at your dick" 'peeks'.
"I wan't to clean myself," 'want'.
"YOU FUCKED HER TOO! DIDN'T YOU!" Should add a '?' to the second '!'.
"In any case, you go find Summer , and I'll" There's an unneeded space before the comma.
"Dieing if I had to.' "Dying'.
"Summer , I understand-" Another extra space.
I'll go take a Shower." Lowercase 's'.
"Jerry blissfully hums the tune to titanic while washing" Capitalized 'Titanic'.
Not sure if there's good artwork for the scene, but it shows Jerry already off the bed covering himself with the pillow as New Summer is trying to seduce him before the text says he does that. The next artwork is New Summer holding his dick, then back to him off the bed covering himself.
"You just got here?" This isn't a question.
"It's Jerry's three breasted alien girlfriend," I believe 'three breasted' should have a hyphen.
"But a quick glance around puts your heart at ease, you're safe, back in your room." Feels like we could replace the first comma with a period.
""
SIGH" fine." It's weird seeing an expression surrounded by quotes instead of asterisks. And I don't think it needs to be bolded.
"the house ready to host Mr. Nimbus, while I'm doing that, I need you" I think we can replace the first comma with a period.
Don't know if 'Cronenberg' is supposed to be upper- or lowercase, but there's a lot of both versions.
One of the choices with Kiara "Be Hunted" probably doesn't need 'hunted' capitalized. All other choices I've seen use standard grammar.
"It is becoming... Uncomfortable." Lowercase 'u'.
"But if she's only doing this to get fix her fertility" 'get' needs to get out of there.
"You spounding your daughter's" The 's' needs removed.
"Fucking She's my daughter! It wouldn't be right. in the same room as her Mother has you harder than diamonds." Several things wrong with this whole box. The obvious of course, but it seems the 'Fucking' should be over with 'in the same room'. Mother should be lowercase in this instance. And this also seems like half Morty's inner dialogue and a narration. There is no name above the text box. I'll let you sort it out from here.
"Your daughter drenched pussy" Should be 'daughter's'.
"as you fertilize your little girl" One space too many.
"(Wow, tcompared to other" Needs the 't' removed.
"against the well toned ass she worked" Should have a hyphen for 'well-toned'.
"tightens around your cock, you can tell you're" Both sides of the comma seem completely unrelated, except for the situation they're in, so it sounds weird. It doesn't mesh well, but I think if you replace the comma with 'and'.
"Or the Summer s?" Missing an apostrophe.
"Ah geez!" Usually it's 'Aw'.
And again, I can't express how creepy Jessica's open-mouthed smile is. Is there anyway to fix that?