VN Ren'Py Rick and Morty: Another Way Home [r4.0] [Night Mirror]

[MobileGrunt]

"It's nothing fancy, just sunny-side up eggs and well done bacon, just the way she likes it. Another run-on. Should be fine putting a period in place of either comma, though to me it fits better at the end of 'bacon'. 'well done' should have a hyphen.

"Holy shit, we can have as much sex as we want!" This line and the next both sound like inner thoughts, though both Mort and Morticia are thinking it at the same time. If that was your intention, you'll want the () around them.

During the shower with Mort and Morticia they both are obviously not talking but thinking the same thing. Probably want more parentheses there.

"Do you like that, Big bro?" 'Big" should be lower-case.

"...th-UURP-ey keep finding the plasma throwing it..." Needs 'and' after 'plasma'.

"If the universe want's to kill you, then it want's to fuck her." No apostrophes for both words.

"...any mission again unless I say so, go it?" Should be 'got it?'

Morty mentions The Citadel to female Rick and she replies with "The citadel?!" Needs a capital 'C'.

"Vip pass?" And it was 'VIP' in the sentences before and after that.

 

[Toxic_Tripod0]

"The Talk" scene doesn't seem to affect beth's dialogue towards you at any point after that, not just at the pool sex scene but in scenes like the sun lotion scene external and internal dialogue and just overall general dialogue. This is particularly evident with her internal thoughts during the sun lotion scene where she is still berating herself as if the talk scene hadn't happened and when she loses her top in the pool.

I guess in the end all the beth dialogue and situations after the talk scene need to be reevaluated to deal with that situation, in addition to if you chose no birth control still as well.

 

[aaronminus]

"The Talk" scene doesn't seem to affect beth's dialogue towards you at any point after that, not just at the pool sex scene but in scenes like the sun lotion scene external and internal dialogue and just overall general dialogue. This is particularly evident with her internal thoughts during the sun lotion scene where she is still berating herself as if the talk scene hadn't happened and when she loses her top in the pool.

I guess in the end all the beth dialogue and situations after the talk scene need to be reevaluated to deal with that situation, in addition to if you chose no birth control still as well.

It’s being worked on.

 

[Night Mirror]

"It's nothing fancy, just sunny-side up eggs and well done bacon, just the way she likes it. Another run-on. Should be fine putting a period in place of either comma, though to me it fits better at the end of 'bacon'. 'well done' should have a hyphen.

"Holy shit, we can have as much sex as we want!" This line and the next both sound like inner thoughts, though both Mort and Morticia are thinking it at the same time. If that was your intention, you'll want the () around them.

During the shower with Mort and Morticia they both are obviously not talking but thinking the same thing. Probably want more parentheses there.

"Do you like that, Big bro?" 'Big" should be lower-case.

"...th-UURP-ey keep finding the plasma throwing it..." Needs 'and' after 'plasma'.

"If the universe want's to kill you, then it want's to fuck her." No apostrophes for both words.

"...any mission again unless I say so, go it?" Should be 'got it?'

Morty mentions The Citadel to female Rick and she replies with "The citadel?!" Needs a capital 'C'.

"Vip pass?" And it was 'VIP' in the sentences before and after that.

Corrected! Thanks!

 

[MobileGrunt]

"*ahem* test, test..." First 'test' should be capitalized.

"Like all Morty's she is unspoiled!" No apostrophe.

It goes too fast to get a picture, but while Sleazy Morty is talking and the view is of our Morty face-on, when he blinks you can still see the iris and even a white spot that appears on the right side of the eye. Doesn't matter which way he's looking. The iris reflects his current viewpoint through his eyelids.

"All of em are fapping..." Can add an apostrophe at the front of 'em' or change it to 'them'.

"...Rick popping a zit from his ass!" Change 'from' to 'on'.

"Hey it's big dick Morty!" I believe a comma should appear after 'Hey' and 'big dick' should be capitalized as they're using it as a name. This was done a bit before by Sleazy Morty.

"If it weren't for Rick I probably never have found you." Needs a 'would' before 'never'.

"Well, well, well, if it isn't Morty, I thought you..." Feels to me that a period should replace that comma after 'Morty'.

"...if there is pizza it's italian and fancy." 'Italian' should be capitalized.

"...anything about my sexlife." Space between 'sex' and 'life'.

"*sulp* Yeah?" Think you meant '*gulp*'.

"I feel like a fantasy..." Usually this is said as "It feels like".

"I guess that I don't really have a choice here" Needs a period.

"Yeah... maybe don't say things like that" Another period needed.

"I should be weirded out but that..." I'm guessing you wanted 'by' instead of 'but'.

"R-really? Cuze it feels like... Should be 'Cuz' with an apostrophe at the front to replace the missing letters.

"I know you like me better that way" Needs a period and 'that' should be 'this' as they're talking about it now.

"Yes! He totally just came just from watching me." The second 'just' should be removed.

"...you spying on us?!" Should be 'you're'.

"...and pretend it's ice-cream." 'Ice cream' doesn't need a hyphen. There is a place for it, but not by itself.

"Tricia's eyes roll back and squeezes Summer's head..." Should make it 'she squeezes' because right now it sounds like her eyes have legs and are squeezing Summer's head.

"...covered in my wet juice." 'Wet juice' is a weird term, could just say 'juices'.

 

[Night Mirror]

"*ahem* test, test..." First 'test' should be capitalized.

"Like all Morty's she is unspoiled!" No apostrophe.

It goes too fast to get a picture, but while Sleazy Morty is talking and the view is of our Morty face-on, when he blinks you can still see the iris and even a white spot that appears on the right side of the eye. Doesn't matter which way he's looking. The iris reflects his current viewpoint through his eyelids.

"All of em are fapping..." Can add an apostrophe at the front of 'em' or change it to 'them'.

"...Rick popping a zit from his ass!" Change 'from' to 'on'.

"Hey it's big dick Morty!" I believe a comma should appear after 'Hey' and 'big dick' should be capitalized as they're using it as a name. This was done a bit before by Sleazy Morty.

"If it weren't for Rick I probably never have found you." Needs a 'would' before 'never'.

"Well, well, well, if it isn't Morty, I thought you..." Feels to me that a period should replace that comma after 'Morty'.

"...if there is pizza it's italian and fancy." 'Italian' should be capitalized.

"...anything about my sexlife." Space between 'sex' and 'life'.

"*sulp* Yeah?" Think you meant '*gulp*'.

"I feel like a fantasy..." Usually this is said as "It feels like".

"I guess that I don't really have a choice here" Needs a period.

"Yeah... maybe don't say things like that" Another period needed.

"I should be weirded out but that..." I'm guessing you wanted 'by' instead of 'but'.

"R-really? Cuze it feels like... Should be 'Cuz' with an apostrophe at the front to replace the missing letters.

"I know you like me better that way" Needs a period and 'that' should be 'this' as they're talking about it now.

"Yes! He totally just came just from watching me." The second 'just' should be removed.

"...you spying on us?!" Should be 'you're'.

"...and pretend it's ice-cream." 'Ice cream' doesn't need a hyphen. There is a place for it, but not by itself.

"Tricia's eyes roll back and squeezes Summer's head..." Should make it 'she squeezes' because right now it sounds like her eyes have legs and are squeezing Summer's head.

"...covered in my wet juice." 'Wet juice' is a weird term, could just say 'juices'.

Corrected! Thanks!

 

[Devilrv]

If anyone had any doubts that the showmakers are watching/playing this game

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should have resolved it.

Like i don't think they are even trying to hide it anymore.

 

[kenta16807]

....showmakers are watching/playing this game....

Because only F can have perverted ideas in the Rick and Morty universe ?

There's only so many iterations on the concept...and F has got the general vibe of the show down pretty good.

What we have here are the classic 'chicken and egg' conundrum

There's been more than one nod to the R34 'community' in the show, perceived or real - who knows...

 

[Devilrv]

Because only F can have perverted ideas in the Rick and Morty universe ?

There's only so many iterations on the concept...and F has got the general vibe of the show down pretty good.

What we have here are the classic 'chicken and egg' conundrum

There's been more than one nod to the R34 'community' in the show, perceived or real - who knows...

Are you saying there is more MortyxBeth content out there and I just haven't seen it yet?!?!?!?!?!?!

 

[Night Mirror]

If anyone had any doubts that the showmakers are watching/playing this game

I highly doubt anyone working on the show is playing this game (Unity or Renpy). Viewing and taking inspiration from fan work (especially of the phonographic nature) is STRONGLY discouraged in the entertainment industry. As a big company, this is inviting lawsuits, some companies go so far as to destroy fan mail without even opening it. It doesn't mean people don't, but I think it is very unlikely to be the case here. This game is fun and enjoyable, but a master class in writing it is not.

The show itself has prominently featured reference to incest across its run (as well as many other taboo themes) and it is easy to "find" connections when you are looking specifically for them. This is amplified by Ferdafs attention to show detail, making this game feel authentically Rick and Morty. That is a big reason I was drawn to it in the first place, and why I have put so much effort into remaking it in a more accessible format (in my opinion) for more people (fans) to be able to experience what this game has to offer. Because despite the many, many, many, many, flaws of the Unity implementation, the idea underneath is pretty damn good.

I don't see how Jerry in Morty's clothing is at all a reference to the game, since nothing like it has happened in the game. Yeah, Morty is a main character in the game and he is having sex with Beth, but that is hardly a unique dynamic on the erotic end of the fandom (and is not explored AT ALL in the show (yet)). Jerry's action makes sense for the character in the show. It is something he would think fixes the issue of what he has to do. Taking control of the situation in the only way he knows how.

(this might feel off topic but I am going somewhere with it) It is important to remember that all the current writers on the show have also changed, and while Harm and Roil are still there, they aren't the ones writing the episodes (approving/contributing, but not really writing). What we have is new writes, effectively fanfic writers who didn't write the original show, but have been brought on to continue it. They use what has come before to write something new.

That is why (in my opinion) season 4, 5 (especially 5), and even 6 feel more like fanficiton, because they literally are. The difference being the writers are paid to write it and blessed by the creator, but still not the original authors. As a fan writer myself (literally working on fanfic of a fanfic in this case), I see a lot of the things used in the show, that I would use as a fan writer. Things like, re-using past show ideas to give new ones legitimacy.

Incest was done in the past (usually oddly paired with cannibalism), so use it again to tie into past episodes, to give the show a feeling of consistency. It is by no means the only reused thing, but it is the example here. At it's core this is mostly a family dynamic show, how they cope with each other, and the crazy shit Rick brings down upon them (and I think the show is at it's best when exploring the family dynamic). Want something shocking and ranchy, incest is the easy go to when it is mostly about family.

Does that mean no one on the show has ever looked at porn of Rick and Morty, I would be shocked if that was the case. But my main point is I doubt anyone on the show would (or should) take inspiration from this game. In fact, using things from the fan base often leads to ruining a show, so I really hope they aren't doing it.

 

[RandyTyr]

The second episode of the first season already had Dream Summer proposing a threesome to Rick and Morty. And the pilot had a discussion about anal cavities that feels kinda inappropriate between grandfather and 14 year old grandson by RL standards. I think we can take that as conclusive evidence that the show writers don't need Ferdafs or Nightmirrors help to comeup with perverted stuff.

 

[MobileGrunt]

"Thanks... ?" Don't need the space.

"Doesn't sound Like nothing..." Lower-case on the 'like'.

"Oh, I see. no I understand. I'm sure..." 'No' needs to be capitalized.

"...take, so I rather not." 'I'd' is needed.

"...once It's all over." Lower-case for 'it's'.

"...herself with the tv remote." 'TV' should be capitalized.

"Okay then, I'll do it then!" One 'then' needs to go. Either way works fine.

"Kea-, I mean..." I've seen her name spelled as Kiara earlier in the game.

"Stay quiet, as soon as your dad falls asleep, try to sneak out." I would make the first comma a period.

"sweetie, I can't, I'm gonna-" Might just be because of the small text indicating they're whispering, but 'sweetie' looks lower-cased. Should be upper, if it isn't.

"You said I can do it any way I want to, Mommy..." Should be lower case 'mommy'.

".. Fine, just the tip..." Needs an extra period at the start there for an ellipsis.

There's some weird hitching in the animation between scenes of Beth cumming from Morty fucking her ass.

"It was awesome, Mom..." Lower-case 'mom'.

"...that title seems to be sort of cleaver?" You want 'clever'.

"Actually, I think, it would be best..." Don't need the second comma.

"... I may need explain parts of what..." Add 'to' after 'need'.

"...has made Morty too self reliant." This requires a hyphen 'self-reliant'.

"What you're asking me is a bit much..." Usually written as 'asking of me'.

"Oh, hey, bro, there you are, I've been looking for you all morning." A period instead of a comma after 'there you are' would flow better.

"...on the teachers desk?" An apostrophe for 'teacher's'.

"...I finally see what's the issue here." Should read "I finally see what the issue is here."

"The more the guys who think..." Can remove the second 'the'.

"Talk to a random strange, no way, that..." Make that first comma a question mark.

"I really rather not talk about it." Change it to "I'd really rather..."

"I wish I had a huge cocked brother I..." Add a hyphen for 'huge-cocked'.

"...little brother's huge hard cock?" A comma after 'huge'.

"Your little Brother is a creepy little voyeur isn't he?" Lower-case 'brother' and I believe a comma needs to go after voyeur.

"Her warm wet throat..." A comma after warm.

"Can you feel that!" Needs to be changed to a question mark.

 

[Night Mirror]

"Thanks... ?" Don't need the space.

"Doesn't sound Like nothing..." Lower-case on the 'like'.

"Oh, I see. no I understand. I'm sure..." 'No' needs to be capitalized.

"...take, so I rather not." 'I'd' is needed.

"...once It's all over." Lower-case for 'it's'.

"...herself with the tv remote." 'TV' should be capitalized.

"Okay then, I'll do it then!" One 'then' needs to go. Either way works fine.

"Kea-, I mean..." I've seen her name spelled as Kiara earlier in the game.

"Stay quiet, as soon as your dad falls asleep, try to sneak out." I would make the first comma a period.

"sweetie, I can't, I'm gonna-" Might just be because of the small text indicating they're whispering, but 'sweetie' looks lower-cased. Should be upper, if it isn't.

"You said I can do it any way I want to, Mommy..." Should be lower case 'mommy'.

".. Fine, just the tip..." Needs an extra period at the start there for an ellipsis.

There's some weird hitching in the animation between scenes of Beth cumming from Morty fucking her ass.

"It was awesome, Mom..." Lower-case 'mom'.

"...that title seems to be sort of cleaver?" You want 'clever'.

"Actually, I think, it would be best..." Don't need the second comma.

"... I may need explain parts of what..." Add 'to' after 'need'.

"...has made Morty too self reliant." This requires a hyphen 'self-reliant'.

"What you're asking me is a bit much..." Usually written as 'asking of me'.

"Oh, hey, bro, there you are, I've been looking for you all morning." A period instead of a comma after 'there you are' would flow better.

"...on the teachers desk?" An apostrophe for 'teacher's'.

"...I finally see what's the issue here." Should read "I finally see what the issue is here."

"The more the guys who think..." Can remove the second 'the'.

"Talk to a random strange, no way, that..." Make that first comma a question mark.

"I really rather not talk about it." Change it to "I'd really rather..."

"I wish I had a huge cocked brother I..." Add a hyphen for 'huge-cocked'.

"...little brother's huge hard cock?" A comma after 'huge'.

"Your little Brother is a creepy little voyeur isn't he?" Lower-case 'brother' and I believe a comma needs to go after voyeur.

"Her warm wet throat..." A comma after warm.

"Can you feel that!" Needs to be changed to a question mark.

Fixed. Can't do anything about the animation, that is the way it is in the original.

 

[AlphaOmega9365]

When trying to extract the archive, using winrar, I get these 2 errors:
C:\Users\Owner\Downloads\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc.zip: Checksum error in C:\Users\Owner\Downloads\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc\game\movies.rpa. The file is corrupt
C:\Users\Owner\Downloads\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc.zip: The archive is corrupt

And when playing the game most scenes are black with just the text appearing then just the end image of the scene.
For example: Summer's locker room scene look completely like this.

Nothing but text. And it is the same in both the main game and in the mind blowers gallery, for just about every scene in the game.

 

[Night Mirror]

When trying to extract the archive, using winrar, i get these 2 errors:
C:\Users\Owner\Downloads\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc.zip: Checksum error in C:\Users\Owner\Downloads\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc\game\movies.rpa. The file is corrupt
C:\Users\Owner\Downloads\RMAWH-r3.6J-pc.zip: The archive is corrupt

And when playing the game most scenes are black with just the text appearing then just the end image of the scene.
For example: Summer's locker room scene look completely like this.

Nothing but text.

Sounds like your download is corrupt, try redownloading it from a different link.

 

[wibbled]

Here's a wee gripe I have with the dialogue text. As far as I know, when using three dots in a row, there should be spaces at either side, such as " ... " or in a text example "I sighed ... but carried on."

Grammerly agrees with me ...

"The AP Stylebook says to treat the ellipsis as a three-letter word, with spaces on either side of the ellipsis but no spaces between the dots."

I have been changing it myself, when I do edits.

 

[aaronminus]

"Thanks... ?" Don't need the space.

"Doesn't sound Like nothing..." Lower-case on the 'like'.

"Oh, I see. no I understand. I'm sure..." 'No' needs to be capitalized.

"...take, so I rather not." 'I'd' is needed.

"...once It's all over." Lower-case for 'it's'.

"...herself with the tv remote." 'TV' should be capitalized.

"Okay then, I'll do it then!" One 'then' needs to go. Either way works fine.

"Kea-, I mean..." I've seen her name spelled as Kiara earlier in the game.

"Stay quiet, as soon as your dad falls asleep, try to sneak out." I would make the first comma a period.

"sweetie, I can't, I'm gonna-" Might just be because of the small text indicating they're whispering, but 'sweetie' looks lower-cased. Should be upper, if it isn't.

"You said I can do it any way I want to, Mommy..." Should be lower case 'mommy'.

".. Fine, just the tip..." Needs an extra period at the start there for an ellipsis.

There's some weird hitching in the animation between scenes of Beth cumming from Morty fucking her ass.

"It was awesome, Mom..." Lower-case 'mom'.

"...that title seems to be sort of cleaver?" You want 'clever'.

"Actually, I think, it would be best..." Don't need the second comma.

"... I may need explain parts of what..." Add 'to' after 'need'.

"...has made Morty too self reliant." This requires a hyphen 'self-reliant'.

"What you're asking me is a bit much..." Usually written as 'asking of me'.

"Oh, hey, bro, there you are, I've been looking for you all morning." A period instead of a comma after 'there you are' would flow better.

"...on the teachers desk?" An apostrophe for 'teacher's'.

"...I finally see what's the issue here." Should read "I finally see what the issue is here."

"The more the guys who think..." Can remove the second 'the'.

"Talk to a random strange, no way, that..." Make that first comma a question mark.

"I really rather not talk about it." Change it to "I'd really rather..."

"I wish I had a huge cocked brother I..." Add a hyphen for 'huge-cocked'.

"...little brother's huge hard cock?" A comma after 'huge'.

"Your little Brother is a creepy little voyeur isn't he?" Lower-case 'brother' and I believe a comma needs to go after voyeur.

"Her warm wet throat..." A comma after warm.

"Can you feel that!" Needs to be changed to a question mark.

Thanks for continuing to make my life easier, and the game better, with corrections!

 

[aaronminus]

Here's a wee gripe I have with the dialogue text. As far as I know, when using three dots in a row, there should be spaces at either side, such as " ... " or in a text example "I sighed ... but carried on."

Grammerly agrees with me ...

"The AP Stylebook says to treat the ellipsis as a three-letter word, with spaces on either side of the ellipsis but no spaces between the dots."

I have been changing it myself, when I do edits.

Ellipses are always the source of much debate. As far as AWH goes, it’s actually fairly conservative with its usage (rarely straying from three dots). I like the informal usage of putting them at the end or beginning, because it portrays subtly different pacing, but yes, you’d be correct in a professional setting. That said, this is commonly broken even in official translations.

 

[Night Mirror]

Here's a wee gripe I have with the dialogue text. As far as I know, when using three dots in a row, there should be spaces at either side, such as " ... " or in a text example "I sighed ... but carried on."

Grammerly agrees with me ...

"The AP Stylebook says to treat the ellipsis as a three-letter word, with spaces on either side of the ellipsis but no spaces between the dots."

I have been changing it myself, when I do edits.

By nature I am a descriptivist. As long as people understand the intent (not necessarily agree with it), and it isn't egregiously wrong or unreadable, then I'm fine. Personally, I think spaces around ellipsis make them less clear, acting like a word (which it isn't) instead of punctuation (and spaces between periods can fuck right off). Additionally, in the format of renpy, it can lead to strange edge cases where a line return on the last word will cause the ellipsis to appear alone on it is own line.

Also, on a personal note, I'm not a fan of Grammarly. Homogenizing writing dialogue is an atrocity. There is finding typos and then there is changing the intent of the writer to be "more correct" by someone elses standards.

 

[Night Mirror]

While some people are trying to glean insight out of the episodes, I am looking for all the game lore I can get. The really important takeaways from the recent episodes that no one is talking about is just how fucking wrong the house layout in the game is!

We can clearly see no bathroom door between Summer and Morty's room (also a hallway table missing from all the hallway backgrounds). This is not that surprising as there is no bathroom (in the house) ever shown in the show.


And we finally know for sure which door is Summer's real door, and which is the closet (or she has two doors into her room for some dumb reason).

Also, we also know where Rick's room is actually located (under the stairs, apparently) with Summer and Rick walking out of it:


This is the kind of stuff that keeps me up at night...