VN Ren'Py Abandoned Sin City [v1.2a] [SPARK]

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gtz-god

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ok it say harem so do that mean the girlfriend will be ok for a open relationship
 
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meigame

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hmm. game always crashes for me right around the peek at bathing girl scene...
maybe try another day.
 
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* It's never a good sign when the text speed isn't cranked to the max, but we'll see.

* It's spelled 'business'

* Copping a feel on his aunt in front of her husband? Nice.

* I'm a little confused by the relationships here. How can Mia be MC's step-sister and not his cousin?

* MC needs a little tact

* I'm not a fan of these side-plots with the missing father...I've rarely seen them work in games like this and usually they just make the game overly complicated and keep the player from getting to the content they actually want to see.

* Oh yay, bullies.

Okay, I've had enough. The game is generic, the visuals could use some work, and the missing father sub-plot tells me that this game will likely not be much fun. I'm giving this one a pass.
 
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Avaron1974 said:
Awesome, I love playing as the main character, such a radical idea.
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Avaron1974 said:
No ... it's Honey Select, there isn't a great deal you can do with it.

Guys look shit so they tend to all look alike as that's close to adequate as HS allows for male models.

Their are HS games that try and be different but most just go with what's easiest like this, WA, Ecchi Sensei and Solvalley. All pretty similar.
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DarkSithLord47 said:
Last pic in the thumbnail :that girl is fucking gorgeous and hot,downloading just to see if there's any actual content with her! Edit : played through the introduction so far and wow,story makes 0 sense,needs a patch badly : some ''engrish'' is there,first he calls his aunt ''my mom's sister then aunt then calls his cousin-step-sister??? wtf?? really confusing,anyway back to it and see if i can find my hottie 2nd Edit : played through it and i admit i skipped a lot of it casue its kinda boring,found the hottie and i'm gonna be really pissed if the game forces you to set her up with the beta looser classmate cause choices atm dont seem to really matter. The animations are nice and i'll keep a look out for this game only if it gets a patch to keep the story from being so confusing and only if the choices you make will matter and you're not forced to set up the hottie with the loser classmate
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Don't worry, I'll try my best for the next update and will also seek for some proof reader for helping me through the dialogues.
And as for the typos, I correcting that right now.
Thanks you for your feedback.
 
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geenius3ab said:
Kind of wary about thinking about starting with a scale of 60 characters, when good stories usually center around like 4-5 different characters, with more characters becoming either completely blank sex dolls, or just a complete stereotypes (Which kind of seem to be most of the characters here).

I played through the prologue, but it honestly felt like the info dump was out of this world. The models look pretty good, but the pacing feels way too fast and the set-ups for certain character traits weren't well thought out. You literally had to go through character sheets for over 20+ characters (I think) with their basic "quirks".Sure it's a prologue, but interactions should be a bit better written for the family, and also more time spent on them. The school is just filled with new character appearances, which I felt was overwhelming for a porn game. For example the character you talk to during class, you left a good impression on her, so there is no reason why she wouldn't show you around the school (She could easily be a class rep, considering that she's supposed to be a nerd, and you could get to know her)? You didn't need to use different characters for that. The character cards you were shown were also too much information. Same with the geek group you met in school (No reason the interaction needed to happen there, at that point and time, when instead you could've been shown different class rooms and again, getting to know the 1 girl). 1 of the "nieces" friends being into you from the start made for an OK scene for a prologue, but again too many characters and a sudden BJ from one of them, with almost no proper set up other than the peeping (I'd say it went too fast).

Though I do wonder why you chose to go with the "Aunt" thing, when the story would've been exactly the same if you made it a "mom" and that she has just married a new guy (Who would be your step-father)? I guess this is the most personal point, but as I just see the exact same story in other games, it feels strange to have her being an aunt now (The tabooness of a mother character is just far stronger imho).

Waifu Academy is quite good about the character balance (Though even that is pretty overwhelming in terms of the pace of the story), it works at most with 2-3 characters at once, you get to know them and their story, you get a few glimpses of other characters, but they're mostly in the background in terms of the interactions. I can understand that WA seems to be one of your inspirations here, but you should start with a focus on less characters, try to give the player some time at home before going to school, a bit of a more focused introduction to the school and 1-2 other characters that go to the school, maybe set up interactions with other characters when you start having a need for those characters (Maybe a bit before the character is necessary in the plot in some way, or if there's a side story you want to tell).
Your story seems to be really frontloaded currently.


A proof reader would also be a great help for you, but that's a non-issue for the time being.

Your models and foundation gets a strong 4/5 (Pretty much as good as a HS game could get, maybe could be slightly improved considering that WA does look better for me, but still this isn't an issue).
Your story, characters and pacing are 2/5 or 1/5. You just started off, so it should be easy to fix.
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Hey! Thanks for the feedback, I'll definitely consider your feedback while making the next version.
 
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vegitex said:
Wooah!! Goin' to try it right now!!!!
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Finished the game for now....
Nice characters and animations...
Main story is quite unclear right now as it is the 1st version of the game but going good as for now.
Developer should try maintaining a good pace for the story.
There are some typos right now, should be fixed soon.

Atlast, I personally liked it and I'll recommend others to give it a try!!
 
Mormont

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Well, this feels vaguely familiar think I've played the same type of game a few dozen times :p I do like the look of some of the girls though so that's certainly enough to keep me interested.
 
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Not sure about this one. I read and click through conversation about 30 times and the game freezes.
I havent encountered this with any other renpy game. (i play a lot of renpy)
I have to save after every 5 dialogues, kill the game with task manager, restart the game, load the save, and save after every 5 dialogues again, and keep repeating.
 
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Avaron1974 said:
Awesome, I love playing as the main character, such a radical idea.



No ... it's Honey Select, there isn't a great deal you can do with it.

Guys look shit so they tend to all look alike as that's close to adequate as HS allows for male models.

Their are HS games that try and be different but most just go with what's easiest like this, WA, Ecchi Sensei and Solvalley. All pretty similar.
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Thanks for the info; I don't have any knowledge of the systems they use to create these games, so I appreciate the background!
 
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My aunt's daughter is my step sister? O_O Mind blown!!

Either the aunt is a mother (then the introduction needs alot more detail - not seeing your only living relative after you've been orphaned is strange enough but if it was you mother, I feel it needs more than "oh you've grown"), or the step daughter is a cousin.
 
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