Yay time to butcher some quotes! Let's see... Meant as in chopping the quotes in a more manageable size.
That kind of sums up every hero in media, written, movies, etc. since forever? But it is valid criticism overall.
Conflict is either internal or external, so for the lack of better term failure points. We aren't at the point where the external failure points come in, but the problem with the external failure points in this type of story will lead easily to the main character's death and game over. The partial solution is to give the player a choice, now that brings another set of issues. But the non-lethal failure points could easily if used too often, lead to portraying that main character as a bumbling fool, which is irritating to me personally. Occasional mess up is fine, but continuous isn't.
I don't know what choices you made regarding Susan. Did you tell her about magic being real when you two were watching the TV? If not, you get another chance to do so in the 0.9.0 update. If you do tell her this time you will see something different, in other words, a point of failure for the MC, nothing drastic but it still there. If you told her about magic to her earlier, you don't get to see that. So occasionally, the points of failure are negated by the choices that the player has made previously. And if you decide not to tell her about it this time... well, that would be a spoiler.
As for internal conflicts. The typical "hero's journey" often starts with a young main character. This is usually done so that the "mistakes" are easier to write as the lack of life experience for the main character, and thanks to that you easily see the "spiritual growth" of the main character. Here the MC is 37 years old, so he has had events that have shaped his point of view, both failures and success. And his upbringing has shaped his views and behavior. A lot of those events aren't exposed to the reader until there are a need and natural way to do it.
And partially that accumulated life experience negates the typical internal struggle that you see in the younger MC's. Again, to illustrate the point, when the inquisitors attack the old apartment depending on the choice you get a short scene where he laments a bit about needing to kill them, he knows there is no real alternative to the killing so he does it because he needs to, not because he wants to. Maybe I should have expanded that a bit, but there is time for me to do so later on as well, so note taken that is all I can say.
And eventually, this will come up,
the MC has had the faerie dragon since birth, she has been there for his whole life, invisible, or ethereal if you wish. She is the MC's "6th sense", she is the reason that he knows when there is trouble behind the corner, she is the reason why he can point his gun at someone who is out of the line of sight. And what has been her subconscious influence on him? And there is something about this coming later on.
Just to illustrate the point really, no other reason to use and mangle the quote. >.>
The upbringing again, raised in a catholic orphanage or ran by nuns. Certain values are reinforced from a young age. Spend time from early on to aid veterans, homeless people, and those who are in a more vulnerable state, this is some you could see nuns easily doing (and they do), so it leaves an imprint that will carry one way or the other through your life. In his case, this is shown as a willingness to help others in need, and not to exploit those who are in a vulnerable state. And this is still leaving out Abigail, and her relationship with Tamara
(who will show on Day 11 just to let you know). What Abigail knows, and how she influenced Alexander as he grew up isn't exposed as there hasn't been a need for it. And you never wondered why Alexander isn't religious despite raised by nuns... hmmm...
As for showing the emotions, this is a bit of a two-fold issue. On one hand, lack of male role models when growing up, so the model for males comes from media of the '80s and '90s, and other authority figures he saw. And from my experience priests in that era were a bit stoic, and the general attitude was that "real men don't show emotions", as flawed as that might be. So, that is sort of what he is used to. Then on other hand... It's Daz, occasionally there is this really thin line of decent expression vs creepy rape face in the render. And unfortunately when the creepy rape face happens and you tone down the expression to be somewhat humane looking it can come too subtle. I'll try to bring it out more as we go, but it's the personal preference on how it looks. There are few moments where I wanted the MC to look more amused, but good gods that "smile" if you want to call it that, wouldn't want to run into that in a dark alley.
So yeah there is a lot in the background information of the characters that aren't exactly obvious, needed, or exposed, yet. And it isn't just the MC either. It is ALL of them that have longer interactions with him, with their own motivations and needs. Some have their own short stories that I wrote, such as the detectives Cross and Graves, although they only appear only once in this story
And yeah, I like writing...
