- Nov 5, 2018
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That's a good idea actually. I have an idea for chapter 7 but I may try something along those lines in chapter 8.Mmm, I like. The story is fairly minimal, but well written, and it's refreshing to see a guy who is both a strong dominant and a nice guy. There's some irony that the guy who finds the magic mind control book already has a pair of highly submissive girls in love with him, and it's a welcome change from the horny 18-year-old virgins who usually find those.
Also, I like the latest chapter, not having anyone new enslaved is different but it works well. There are quite a few ways to make adding new girls interesting (how about a girl with a fetish for mind control finding out about him and begging to be enslaved, for example), but being open to stories about a magic man with a harem doing things other than taking more girls opens up a lot of options.
BTW perhaps I was being too subtle in the early chapters. I tried to imply that the two girls were submissive and in love with him at least partially because of his power even before he found the book. I guess the flashback didn't get the job done.