VN Unity Abandoned Star Maidens [Ch. 2 v0.2] [Banana Juice]

[Banana Juice]

Glad to see you are still working on this, and I am satisfied with where its going. I understand a work in progress, so i will wait a little while before posting a review.

First off, thank you for fixing the text speed. Huge improvement.
2nd, Don'st worry about what some have said about the speed of the game. Completely in line for Jack to not have sex on day one. Even more true considering where he is at in his experience.
3rd, while I personally loved the look of the girls in their gym clothing. No woman would wearer those outfits knowing the teacher was such a perv.

For a fist chapter I personally feel there is enough sexy content, even if it is not with the MC.

I saw that you had included saves for chapters, and I may decide to go back to the basketball game, just to see all the options, and outcome, but no idea if that was intended to be included.

I do not personally see a problem with the tattoo that are shown, once again, and not suggesting that any are removed, just would not be that common at the the age of the girls, with any sort of decent home life.

Extra points for X files music for "Mulder and Scully" moment.

Keep up the good work, and looking forward to seeing more.

Thank you for your support! We are glad that you liked the game. As for the saves, we've included them intentionally so you can go back at any time. About tattoos and sports uniforms. Today's Schoolgirls are much frivolous than before. We think so. And Yes, we are happy that at least someone appreciated the scene with the agents!

 

[NamelessKnight]

Banana Juice, do you plan to put a skip button later? This function is important when you want to test other options to see different outcomes, and you don't want to read the same dialogues again.

 

[jack brisen]

walktrough ready?

 

[Fantabaldu]

walktrough ready?

We will compile a complete walkthrough and publish it soon!

Just 3 post above yours ... The magical answer in the " scroll up " powers...

 

[Banana Juice]

@Banana Juice, do you plan to put a skip button later? This function is important when you want to test other options to see different outcomes, and you don't want to read the same dialogues again.

Many players have asked us to do this. And of course we will do it! We will also add a message log, a way to hide the interface, we will speed up the animation, remove all delays and make the flash optional. We will also separate automatic and manual saves. And of course add the ability to quickly pass the scene with basketball. And also we will add a gallery.

 

[Synnerai]

The game is awesome except for the grammatical errors that confuse the shit out of me, and occasionally weirdly structured text. But you are most likely working on that aspect. It's really important to me, because sometimes I have to read the messages multiple times to understand what's going on (which is important to not miss anything without rollback or log), and it's also immersion breaking. But yeah, it's not that hard to fix, so not a huge problem... just probably the only gripe I have with it... and that you can't hide interface and no rollback/log, but you already addressed it.

 

[Canto Forte]

Thank you my friend!

I know what you're talking about. The thing is that the package for visual novels for Unity is rather primitive. We had to add it very much ourselves to implement even the current functionality. We will consider how to fulfill your request. But there is a simple way - to make a log of messages, as in RPG games. What do you think about it? Of course, if this is not good, we can try to make a full rollback. But of course it will take much longer.

Make the book - like in any other arkham / witcher / bethesda grinder game - > you can call on it and see where u are at. Make special saves and call on them to replay some of the scenes that are the most important - because the casual player will miss a lot and without the roll back on the mouse and the saves on same mouse (the roller for back and forth and the right click for saves UI) the exploration becomes a whack a mole shenanigans.

Also, it should be mentioned that no Arkham / witcher / bethesda game would dare put some cringe text box over half of the screen and cover that tight and yummy witcher / batman / cat woman / princess / sorceress bossom
Happy dev .. ing!

 

[NamelessKnight]

Many players have asked us to do this. And of course we will do it! We will also add a message log, a way to hide the interface, we will speed up the animation, remove all delays and make the flash optional. We will also separate automatic and manual saves. And of course add the ability to quickly pass the scene with basketball. And also we will add a gallery.

This is great! I usually like to explore the whole game

 

[Banana Juice]

The game is awesome except for the grammatical errors that confuse the shit out of me, and occasionally weirdly structured text. But you are most likely working on that aspect.

English is not our native language and we are very worried about the fact that English-speaking players can not completely immerse themselves in the atmosphere of our game. Of course we will take all measures to fix it as soon as possible!

Make the book - like in any other arkham / witcher / bethesda grinder game

Yes, we thought about this option, thank you

 

[TS2016]

Trying it out. Right now one thing annoying me is timer before continue button on lower right.

 

[MrMax]

Renders are nice, story is interesting - not being able to skip, rewind or fast forward is reaaly bad, save system needs work and so does the translation.
All in all this has potential if the dev is willing to put in the effort

 

[Evil Dr Porkchop]

good voice acting nice renders Interface is good,just starting off atm but it's enjoyable so far

 

[dacris69]

Great game so far but unity is a pain in the ass. Good looking girls and i loved the basketball event, easy and entertaining.

 

[GrimCreeper3]

Whats the model assets for the girl with the pink glasses?

 

[Deleted member 323963]

As someone who likes to have good storylines, I really appreciate the developer to not only create the awesome 3D scenes, but also want to compliment him with his writing, which is astounding! Good work sir, I am watching how this game will develop!

 

[Banana Juice]

Renders are nice, story is interesting - not being able to skip, rewind or fast forward is reaaly bad, save system needs work and so does the translation.
All in all this has potential if the dev is willing to put in the effort

Thanks for your feedback! We will certainly improve the save system and add the ability to rewind in the next update =)

good voice acting nice renders Interface is good,just starting off atm but it's enjoyable so far

Thanks my friend

Great game so far but unity is a pain in the ass. Good looking girls and i loved the basketball event, easy and entertaining.

Yes unity was not so easy for the developer of novels. But we will try to do everything to make the game comfortable, as well as to use all the advantages of unity!

Whats the model assets for the girl with the pink glasses?

Most of our models are not standard. The model you're asking about is a mix of Natalie, Olimpia and Sienna. Plus a little more shaping for the face and figure.

As someone who likes to have good storylines, I really appreciate the developer to not only create the awesome 3D scenes, but also want to compliment him with his writing, which is astounding! Good work sir, I am watching how this game will develop!

Thank you very much for your words of support! We will try to please you further

 

[Synnerai]

hmmm, this game really does need the gallery mod... I wanted to look at some pics again (because they are amazing), so I tried to extract it, but wasn't successful... the only way now to do it is to play the scenes again thank god you guys are going to add it

 

[Cndyrvr4lf]

Is there some significance to the timed spinning circle before the continue button? I keep looking for hot spots or something but so far nothing. Just curious if I'm looking for something that isn't there or just not looking in the right spots.

 

[Thora]

This shows some potential. It's clear there is a story to tell, and that efforts were made in both character designs and their backstory.

Some feedback:
- Story pacing needs to be adjusted - it jumps around a lot and is difficult to follow. Perhaps it's trying too hard to introduce all of the main characters (stopped counting at 14) and their story arc inside of 30m of gameplay?
- Renders, lighting and designs are good. Adding particles to some of the scenes does add dimension to them.
- The English translation needs help - it's 'readable' but distracting.
- It's difficult to know which character is speaking - especially in group of people you meet for the first time. Using a mini-portrait or some visual clues would help.
- Being forced to watch random couples have sex isn't why I play games - there's real porn for that. Games allow you to live a fantasy and give the player a sense of control. For example, disrupting the BJ scene (taking photos for blackmail? scaring the couple?, etc.) could have been a great way to start/plot your revenge.

Bug:
- In the basketball game when you are facing Rob, you have three options. The 'right one' appears to be (3) Wait and deploy a full fledged attack. While Beth scores and Rob complains, the 3 points still goes to the other team.

I'll wait a few versions before taking a second look and see where this goes. Good luck!

-T-


P.s. basketball choices I used: [2,2,2], [1,3], [3,1], [2,1], [2,2], [2,2], [3,3], Smooth [3], [2,2], [2,3*], [3,1] and 3. Option 3* is the bug described above.

 

[Banana Juice]

Is there some significance to the timed spinning circle before the continue button? I keep looking for hot spots or something but so far nothing. Just curious if I'm looking for something that isn't there or just not looking in the right spots.

In the next update, we will make the animation of the circle faster, so it is not so annoying So we will add rewind, it will speed up the replay.

Spoiler: About hot spots.

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This shows some potential. It's clear there is a story to tell, and that efforts were made in both character designs and their backstory.

Some feedback:
- Story pacing needs to be adjusted - it jumps around a lot and is difficult to follow. Perhaps it's trying too hard to introduce all of the main characters (stopped counting at 14) and their story arc inside of 30m of gameplay?
- Renders, lighting and designs are good. Adding particles to some of the scenes does add dimension to them.
- The English translation needs help - it's 'readable' but distracting.
- It's difficult to know which character is speaking - especially in group of people you meet for the first time. Using a mini-portrait or some visual clues would help.
- Being forced to watch random couples have sex isn't why I play games - there's real porn for that. Games allow you to live a fantasy and give the player a sense of control. For example, disrupting the BJ scene (taking photos for blackmail? scaring the couple?, etc.) could have been a great way to start/plot your revenge.

Bug:
- In the basketball game when you are facing Rob, you have three options. The 'right one' appears to be (3) Wait and deploy a full fledged attack. While Beth scores and Rob complains, the 3 points still goes to the other team.

I'll wait a few versions before taking a second look and see where this goes. Good luck!

Thanks for your feedback! We'll be sure to include your comments in the list of fixes for future updates.
Especially thank you for the bug with the basketball
About forced sex scenes. Each of them will play a role in the story. As I said before, in the following chapters the story will focus on the actions of the main character.