Danson I'm replaying the intro (I'm up to the bus stop) and the rewrite of the first scene is much better imo.
You don't lust after your mom (who is isn't going to be romancable), and you don't take things passively about being forced to move. Neither do you have to act like a whiney child, either. It very much comes across as a shitty situation that the MC just has to deal with, but not be happy about.
And I went for the first gallery pic again and was disappointed again. You still have her keeping her legs closed... Shame.