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Thank you very much I'm glad you liked it.You absolutely have every right to be proud of this. Finishing book 1 despite the real life challenges you're going through alone is worthy of praise, but, more importantly, it's good.
Let's start with your art. I think you've proven that you can create a compelling game with the artwork you draw. Yes, it's not as good as the professional's stuff you started with, but it is enjoyable. And you're going to continue to improve as you make more. I especially liked what you did with the panels on Surya's "date."
Also, very happy to hear that you found my art enjoyable. It is only thanks to the kind words of encouragement I've received (here and on patreon), that I was able to keep going on that regards.
I know I have a long way to go, but I will do my best to keep improving.
I totally get what you mean. I made it that way so that (when the Transition from 3dcg to 2d happens) there won't be any doubts on the audience's mind, whether that was chandra or not. But there must be other ways achieve that. I'll see if I can come up with something interesting.I understand the "why" of it, but I'm going to suggest one smallish change anyway.
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(Yeah, I definitely need to proofread/edit the whole script again. Now that book one is complete, I'll probably do a couple of dedicated sessions for it.)Story wise, you've got a unique setting, an interesting plot, good storytelling, and the beginnings of a great "voice." I hope you continue to make visual stories and that we get to see your inevitable growth. You're off to a great start.
Mechanically, I suggest doing an edit pass or two. Focus especially on verb tenses.
Tlaero
Once again, thank you for the kind words. It really helps a lot and allows me to keep moving forward.
I'll do my best to improve my skills and keep telling the best stories I can.