VN Ren'Py Straight!? [Revamp v0.11.1] [Aaryn]

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Aaryn

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Only I say don't bother with voices/music as I really don't feel like they add anything to the games. They always come off like the worst kind of porn music
I'm thinking you might be disappointed. I will be very bad as critic, coz of the fact that I already love the characters and their stories. I don't see how will it be possible to be objective on this.

Yeah, that is what I said, I feel like the story suffered to get fast to nudity. But then again, stories in adult games are virtually non-existent, and even this amount of storytelling if it stays as it is, is already much, much, much more than expected. Take Milfy City for example, awesome start aaaaaand here we go, do this twice, find this, click that aaaand BINGO. Here's the money shot!

On another note, this is an adult game, it is supposed to get to nudity. Even for a bloke like me, there are moments of:" Oh for the fuck sake kiss him already". Can't tell you how relieved I was that after 4 chapters there was a hug, a meaningful one, without the choice to squeeze the ass/ bite the neck like in other games.

Unfortunately I still didn't get the time to play this again, to mess with the choices, and to see all the outcomes, but I will be doing it after the weekend.

There is absolutely no advice or complaint, that I could address to you. Fantastic work so far, and I am sure that you will deliver a fantastic story with as many Jupiter-hangers as humanly possible :)

Edit: PS. Oh, about the music and voices, if you do decide to add it, please don't half-ass it, there is nothing worse than retarded music during a meaningful conversation. Usually, it's better to leave something out if you're adding it just for the sake of having it in the game. Just my 2 cents
Both of these posts address music so I'll just say I wouldn't half-ass the music. I feel like it should compliment the game or just be nonexistent BB style. I have no intention of just throwing music in for no other reason than to check the "music" box and say it has music. My problem is that I would legit want a soundtrack rather than goofy music. So I would either have to steal a bunch of music and risk getting suded, write my own soundtract and try and figure out how to produce it, or pay someone to write a soundtrack and try and convince them of what my vision is without raping their creativity as an artist. #Dilemas. However, it's something I think about from time to time. Especially during key moments...one in particular that I wanted music during a scene I have planned for v0.12 but that will be much later in the polishing phase--if I ever get to it.

So this is a retarded example coming off @Krokodil comment about "just kiss him already." So I used to watch the American version of The Office and felt the same way with the relationship between Jim and Pam. I know--stupid example but whatever. For season after season there was this awkward relationship tension and I found myself seriously longing for those two to just get together. However, when I thought about it--I liked that tension because it was real. In the real world, it's easy to see people belong together when you're the external party. But people have feelings, apprehensions, and fears--relationships are hard and rejections sucks. So sometimes things move slower. Very unlike the porn games you reference. I agree with you on Milfy City. I was stoked how that started and even considered starting my game originally in a therapist office-- (hence the 1st person narrative) but ended up changing my mind. Then within seconds, there's dicks out and jizz is flying. Yet another reason I've stuck to my vision for this. I wanted something different and I figured why the fuck can't porn games have a plot? Well, I'll be frankly honest here, too. Another big reason I went the adult route was because I've never done this before. If the plot is bad--I figured the porn community would be more forgiving.
 

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Oh great. Well that's just fantastic... Now I'm imagining V0.12 as something devious with Imperial Darth Vader song in background.

I wonder who's gonna tell Braden he is a bit short for a stormtrooper xD

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Oh great. Well that's just fantastic... Now I'm imagining V0.12 as something devious with Imperial Darth Vader song in background.

I wonder who's gonna tell Braden he is a bit short for a stormtrooper XD

Mojo Jojo evil meme goes here
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Traban16

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You sir, are going to be an interesting critic. If you continue to follow the game, I'm going to be really interested to see your take on things, particularly when you said you felt gay people had it easier. Don't worry; I'm not offended. I feel like I understood exactly what you were saying--dudes are always down to go horizontal. That being said, this has almost begun to turn into a gay simulator more than a dating sim with all the the ups and downs that go along with a coming-of-age story like this. I'm particularly interested how you feel after the next two updates. No pressure to stick around. I'm just intrigued by a straight guy playing the game and value your input because of that.

Heh, The Dark Ones...yep. I feel ya. I actually considered a dark ending for this but I'm pretty much ruling that out now. I feel like it'll be "appropriate."

And I feel like I owe ya a pack of smokes now :p



Heh, so I've noticed that my storytelling is really misleading. Seems like every time I get either nudity or closeness I always drop something tragic right after it. I feel like nudity in this game is like foreshadowing failure.

I have no idea how I would do voices on this. That would be crazy. I'm already feeling shitty because I haven't done music yet...ugh...I can't imagine juggling voice actors, though.

I'm working on the next update now...trying to. We all need closure after v0.10

thanks for the luv, though Traban. I appreciate the support
Don't fret over any of that. Personally, I like the fact that there is no music. It makes things more intense as it leaves everything to the imagination of just how intense or drama a moment is supposed to be. If there was some cheesy "DUN DUN DUH!" track playing, I think I would have laughed instead of gasping at the ending. You are doing great work already, and it shows as I see you have an increased following since even a few days ago.

P.S: I became a Patreon member to show my support. NOW SHUT UP AND TAKE MY MONEY!! :eazyHype::winkytongue:

Edit: A thought just struck me. You could make a WAY simpler and easy web comic from Braden's point of view of the story. I would love to see how processes everything that has been happening since Day 1.
 

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Don't fret over any of that. Personally, I like the fact that there is no music. It makes things more intense as it leaves everything to the imagination of just how intense or drama a moment is supposed to be. If there was some cheesy "DUN DUN DUH!" track playing, I think I would have laughed instead of gasping at the ending. You are doing great work already, and it shows as I see you have an increased following since even a few days ago.

P.S: I became a Patreon member to show my support. NOW SHUT UP AND TAKE MY MONEY!! :eazyHype::winkytongue:

Edit: A thought just struck me. You could make a WAY simpler and easy web comic from Braden's point of view of the story. I would love to see how processes everything that has been happening since Day 1.
I sooo almost made this entire thing a 3D web comic rather than a game. Reason I went with a game was basically due to this site. I liked the format, and VN read along of a lot of the straight games here and they pulled me in. Otherwise, I probably would have went with several pages per month like Y3DF does with their comics. Really glad I went the gaming route now.

And thanks for the support, Travan. Hopefully, I don't let ya down.

Music, if it ever happens---I don't know--will be much much later. It would really have to fit for me to add it.
 

SimbaThePup

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I love the game, now I am impatiently downloading the new version. Would it be possible to reduce the size under 1 GB (some compression)?
 
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I love the game, now I am impatiently downloading the new version. Would it be possible to reduce the size under 1 GB (some compression)?
Hey Simba,
Yep, theres a compressed version on page 1 of the forums here on the OP for both PC and MAC.
 

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I've to be honest... I loved that there were these kind of games for a certain kind of population, and I enjoyed it... What I enjoyed less was, if I may call it that way, was the "grinding"... For the first time we have a Game/VN with a Gay/Homo/Homosexual/Fag (Yeah fuck you homophobes) theme and fuck me, it has to be so boring. No I do not want to click for hours for the same thing happening again and again, give me something or give me a reason for it, but I don't want to read the same fucking text all over again.
 

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I have no idea what are you talking about. There is no grind here, only story progression with choices here and there. There are no points or scores to grind.

If you are referring to slow progression of the story, well that is intended, and there is a warning about it in the first post.
 
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I've to be honest... I loved that there were these kind of games for a certain kind of population, and I enjoyed it... What I enjoyed less was, if I may call it that way, was the "grinding"... For the first time we have a Game/VN with a Gay/Homo/Homosexual/Fag (Yeah fuck you homophobes) theme and fuck me, it has to be so boring. No I do not want to click for hours for the same thing happening again and again, give me something or give me a reason for it, but I don't want to read the same fucking text all over again.
Heya,
Little confused by what you meant on "grind." My assumption is the first part of the game that is more repetitious with the random events coded in. If that's not what you're talking about, I'm about to give a really long answer for no freaking reason...

So basically when I began writing this game, the entire adult game theme was grind-based. Basically, that's the model I used because it's what most other games used. However, I'll admit that I was little butt-hurt in the beginning because the giant games in the field were using grind and my game was completely torn apart for having the same format. I ended up scrapping that and did a random code for the first part of the game near v0.4 or so. It was a fix and I was ok with it. In time, given that I haven't done this before, I sorta figured out my groove and scrapped the random events all together in Part 2 of the story. However, I'm still sorta ok with them because they simulate the beginning of school and mundane daily grind of college to some degree.

This entire version you are seeing now is a rough draft. I plan to go back and redo the majority of it, upgrading graphics and probably fixing the writing. I have contemplated eliminating the early random events and just trying to rewrite the entire thing as a VN rather than a "game." But I haven't made a decision and I like keeping things open.

However, if you're referring to the "boredom" of the game being very dialogue-based with a ton of reading, that will never change. That is the entire point of the game and it was my vision, I probably wouldn't change that if there was a huge outcry. The game is a slow burn and I understand that some people can see that as boring. If that's what you're referring to, you should probably steer clear of this one.

Regardless, I appreciate the feedback. If you have other questions or what to clarify things, I'm completely open :)
 
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So, the last update I played I think was two updates ago. I just remember the end being Braden's smirk and I thought, "Omg, Aaryn, you freakin' a-hole!" (lol may have said it out loud too).

I have to say, Aaryn has a way of hitting me right in the feels with the twists and "Omg, Aaryn, that last scene in the new update... you freakin' a-hole!"

I kid, of course, but I just have to put it out here on the forums. You have a great talent for story-crafting Aaryn and the game has been doing better and better. Hard to imagine how much attention it's still going to receive in the future (no pressure ).

Also, lotsa love to bossapplesauce for the compression treatment.
 

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So, the last update I played I think was two updates ago. I just remember the end being Braden's smirk and I thought, "Omg, Aaryn, you freakin' a-hole!" (lol may have said it out loud too).

I have to say, Aaryn has a way of hitting me right in the feels with the twists and "Omg, Aaryn, that last scene in the new update... you freakin' a-hole!"

I kid, of course, but I just have to put it out here on the forums. You have a great talent for story-crafting Aaryn and the game has been doing better and better. Hard to imagine how much attention it's still going to receive in the future (no pressure ).

Also, lotsa love to bossapplesauce for the compression treatment.
Heh, long time so see, Wookie. WB.

Sorry about being an a-hole :p

I'm with ya on the cliffhangers. I hate them when I'm watching shows or reading, too. But then somehow they're what keep me coming back for more story. I will say, that I enjoy writing them. It's kinda funny in writing this that I'm learning that I may be more of a closeted romantic than my stoic self would previously allow. It's funny that I write my own game with no one else to appease and I end up writing what appears to be more of a romance than anything else. I'm glad there's some feels, I really want there to be. It's hard to tell if they really hit or not.

And I"ll shyly say thanks for the kind compliments, too :)

And definitely thanks to @bossapplesauce for being a beast and doing the with the compression. I really don't notice any difference in the image quality.
 
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Finally got time to play the V0.10. Smooth storytelling as always and...Was Braden a little bit taller than before? hmmm, may be my memory tricked me.

PS:just finished Ch.5, the ending is sooooooooooooooo good!:eazyHype:
 
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Finally got time to play the V0.10. Smooth storytelling as always and...Was Braden a little bit taller than before? hmmm, may be my memory tricked me.

PS:just finished Ch.5, the ending is sooooooooooooooo good!:eazyHype:
Hey! Thanks a lot. I don't think I ever really get used to praise and compliments on this game. They mean a lot though that people are enjoying the project. I'm glad you enjoyed the ending, too. Definitely was nervous about v0.10 and how it would be received. I'm dropping v0.11 on the Patreon pretty quick and am even more nervous about it. We'll see how it goes, though. I drop some twists in it that I'm nervous about landing correctly so we'll see what things look like when the smoke clears. v.011 also answers a lot of questions and should theoretically give the most insight into a few of the characters we've seen yet. So most of that "what the fuck?" you got going on should clear up in a few weeks :)
 

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Was just traversing youtube when I found this. You're getting famous Aaryn lol
Lmao...yeah....about that...lol
Trigger overkill response:

So I legit about shit my pants about a month ago. So out of nowhere one day, people just started flooding in to the Patreon page and I couldn't figure out why. It was after v0.10 was released. To me, I thought v0.10 was really controversial and I honestly was expecting to lose more people than I gained just because the ending was so different. But I ran with it because it's the story I wanted and I was committed to it.

So I'm using the Patreon app and I keep getting people subscribing and I'm like wtf... so I ended up doing a poll online. Basically, I really suck at marketing so I was trying to figure out where people were coming from and why they were joining after the most controversial ending I had ever written. Then someone mentions this youtube video. Apparently, this guy did this video and had like like 13k views or some shit. One of my supporters was a follower of his and recommended it and things just took off. I ended up supporting Chriz Storm (the video creator) on his Patreon because he boosted my supporters by like 50% and I didn't even do anything! While the video speeds through the game at plaid speed (Spaceballs reference) it actually was interesting to watch someone play my game in real-time and see their reaction. Eventually both Chriz Storm's followers and mine linked us up and we talked several times. He's actually a nice dude and I don't mind supporting him.

But yeah, there's a whole series of the videos. I think there's 4 total now that take the game up through v0.10. While the video isn't everybody's thing, it really did help market me and got more word out on the game. Go check out his other ones if you enjoyed that one. It's nice to be able to read through a more mainstream site like YouTube and read feedback from people, too.

Famous? Nah. lol. Ugh...I'd be the worst celebrity ever :p
 
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Nah, the worst celebrity ever? I could easily see you as a B or C level celebrity. Somewhere between Bruce Campbell and Nichole Richey (i don't even know the spelling of her name).

It's cool to see that there's more visibility and interest in this thing you are creating. It makes me smile to know that there is a well-deserved following outside of us perverts here.

Cheers to you Aaryn! You deserve it.
 

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Nah, the worst celebrity ever? I could easily see you as a B or C level celebrity. Somewhere between Bruce Campbell and Nichole Richey (i don't even know the spelling of her name).

It's cool to see that there's more visibility and interest in this thing you are creating. It makes me smile to know that there is a well-deserved following outside of us perverts here.

Cheers to you Aaryn! You deserve it.
Lmao...Bruce Campbell...

Dude, there really is a growing interest and it's daunting. However, there's perverts everywhere...in fact, they're keeping me in business-- myself included since I'm behind this whole mess :p That YouTube video seriously like doubled my support.
 
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