RPGM Sword Art Online: The Trap of Breath Concealed Magic [Part 2 v0.45] [Fujino]

[oozaru2023]

Im fine with an extrem NTR ending but they way you pitched it is super unrefined and at most a bare concept.
Just the idea "Kirito should be in a wheelchair whiles Asuna and Indoa have sex" is just a scene and not an acutal story idea.
Lets take the one time you actually made this idea a bit more realized.



Kirito ending up in a wheelchair because of a server problem means that it would be just dumb luck and not even Inodas doing, meaning some of the crulty is lost.
Inoda showing any signs of sympathy by saying things like "we will take good care of you" is also a bizzarly backwards thing of him to do.
It also completely neglects any concept for FOG by having the only cruel thing be something that happens in the real world.

They are all in school together, they already spend most of their time in close proximity to eachother. Inoda lives literally next door to Kirito, it would be so easy to just have him be tourmented every night by always hearing Asuna the next room over and maybe constantly sending messages to Kiritos or have Kirito check Inodas blog with videos of them fucking.

your idea is good but what I say more like a really bad ending or a really bad closing since according to fujino's plans it seems that it will have more than one ending.

 

[MeepMoop123]

your idea is good but what I say more like a really bad ending or a really bad closing since according to fujino's plans it seems that it will have more than one ending.

I mean what i was trying to get at wasn't an "idea" perse, more just a statement on what the setting of the game is.
I do think there should be a really bad ending aswell, but it should happen due to Inodas influence and manipulation rather than it just happening by chance. A more forced approach like Asuna tricking Kirito into BDSM play and tying Kirito to a chair and then just fucking Inoda infront of him or something, sorta like the Secazz "the legend of zelda" animation.
Again, im not saying that is 100% what it should be 1/1 just that it should happen due to Inodas influence. Hell if you want the "wheelchair" ending so bad it should be because Asuna "accidentally" breaks Kiritos hip or something.

 

[AlterInfernalAllius]

your idea is good but what I say more like a really bad ending or a really bad closing since according to fujino's plans it seems that it will have more than one ending.

I'm pretty sure the 'more than one ending' thing is just because Fujino decided to implement the "Kirito likes being cucked" route, not that he will make a bunch of very different endings, so depending on the bars we will get either the unaware normal NTR ending or one where Kirito is aware of it but gets off it.

 

[MeepMoop123]

I'm pretty sure the 'more than one ending' thing is just because Fujino decided to implement the "Kirito likes being cucked" route, not that he will make a bunch of very different endings, so depending on the bars we will get either the unaware normal NTR ending or one where Kirito is aware of it but gets off it.

I actually think that there might be a third ending because of the different meters. One where Kirito stays ignorant, one where Kirito finds out and hates it and one where it becomes netorase.
Thats just a feeling tho and not based on anything Fujino has said, so it might aswell not be true at all.

 

[AlterInfernalAllius]

I actually think that there might be a third ending because of the different meters. One where Kirito stays ignorant, one where Kirito finds out and hates it and one where it becomes netorase.
Thats just a feeling tho and not based on anything Fujino has said, so it might aswell not be true at all.

I mean, it COULD be, but as mentioned there is nothing either in the game or from Fujino suggesting it (Plus, the fact he has been constantly tying up Kirito suddenly starting to suspect with moments he gets hard from it, like the 'nightmare', seem as if he was already implying it). Also I wouldn't want people to start thinking they can ask for Fujino to make a bunch of different endings, he already has a track record of not finishing games, is having a lot of issues in his life to continue this one already and is more susceptive to pressure from the fans...

 

[MeepMoop123]

I mean, it COULD be, but as mentioned there is nothing either in the game or from Fujino suggesting it (Plus, the fact he has been constantly tying up Kirito suddenly starting to suspect with moments he gets hard from it, like the 'nightmare', seem as if he was already implying it). Also I wouldn't want people to start thinking they can ask for Fujino to make a bunch of different endings, he already has a track record of not finishing games, is having a lot of issues in his life to continue this one already and is more susceptive to pressure from the fans...

I wasn't really trying to pitch an ending, just trying to highlight how bad his pitch for an ending really is.
Maybe it would finally make him stop posting about it.

I just got a bit agitated when there was a newcomer here and said to his idea. "Fuck that is amazing I would play any game you make or any story you write."
I don't want there to be a church of people that think this idea is great and annoy Fujino about it.

 

[Rokin]

Maybe there are new pictures of the upcoming update?

 

[Kazuto123]

Nie wiem, człowieku. Ci ludzie muszą dotknąć trawy. Są tak zafiksowani na czymś, co powinno naśladować rzeczywistość i zdrowy rozsądek w grze porno.

Po pierwsze, nie chcę ich w prawdziwym życiu. Dlaczego miałbym traktować to ze zdrowym rozsądkiem, skoro w ogóle nie jest to realne.
[/CYTAT]

I don't know man. These people needs to touch grass. They're so fixated in something that should emulate reality and common sense on a porn game.

I for one dont want these in real life. Why would I treat it with common sense when it's not real in the first place.

I think people watch too much hentai ntr over and over again that they can't tell the difference between fiction and reality. In my opinion, such people should not read ntr doujinshi/manga and watch ntr movies.
I can distinguish fiction from reality, I write generally.

 

[AlterInfernalAllius]

I wasn't really trying to pitch an ending, just trying to highlight how bad his pitch for an ending really is.
Maybe it would finally make him stop posting about it.

I just got a bit agitated when there was a newcomer here and said to his idea. "Fuck that is amazing I would play any game you make or any story you write."
I don't want there to be a church of people that think this idea is great and annoy Fujino about it.

Yeah, same here, I wasn't talking about you specifically more other people in general.

 

[Animefan_09]

Yea. No one cares about a third tier jumpoff.

I actually am excited to see her, since she obviously is crucial tot he main plot with Asuna

 

[AlterInfernalAllius]

I actually am excited to see her, since she obviously is crucial tot he main plot with Asuna

Hadn't noticed that, but yeah, I mean, plot aside, I consider Liz hot and fun, I'm just here mainly for Hentai so my main focus was on Suguha and Asuna because of it XD

 

[Queen_Nothing]

I know it's beating a dead horse, but the only scene I want from V1 of that night with Inoda x Asuna is the early morning where Kirito knocks on Inoda's door to see how he's doing.

I want a scene where Inoda is still going at a semi-unconscious or cum drunk Asuna (doggy), then it ends, with her body slumping down on the bed with her pussy gaping, and Inoda's horse cock drapped across her ass/thigh, her toes curled and pissing herself.

Then I think most people would be happy with that closure.

While yes a continuation of that scene would be good, what I was missing is the rest of the day. It's such a point of tension at the end of Part 1, to be running around all the placews where you know Inoda and Asuna are not. And at the height of their relationship, on a 'special day' for him. Inoda somehow talks Asuna into spending all day with him on a date, and you just know he was wearing down her resistance with lewd acts through the day. Some groping. Maybe an emergency boner she needed to handjob in the toilets, etc.

 

[kinglionheart]

I actually am excited to see her, since she obviously is crucial tot he main plot with Asuna

Poor girl. People are excited to see her on their way to Asuna. The definition of a jumpoff

 

[kinglionheart]

While yes a continuation of that scene would be good, what I was missing is the rest of the day. It's such a point of tension at the end of Part 1, to be running around all the placews where you know Inoda and Asuna are not. And at the height of their relationship, on a 'special day' for him. Inoda somehow talks Asuna into spending all day with him on a date, and you just know he was wearing down her resistance with lewd acts through the day. Some groping. Maybe an emergency boner she needed to handjob in the toilets, etc.

Seriously I always wanted to see a date between Asuna and Inoda where they go to Arcade to get their pictures taken and then end with them in hotel. You know the date Inoda interrupted before. But this was so unsatisfying and Asuna's POV being a quick flashback sucked.

But I really hoped Fujino just moved on instead going back and trying to fix it. It is just depressing thinking about your failures.

 

[Queen_Nothing]

Seriously I always wanted to see a date between Asuna and Inoda where they go to Arcade to get their pictures taken and then end with them in hotel. You know the date Inoda interrupted before. But this was so unsatisfying and Asuna's POV being a quick flashback sucked.

But I really hoped Fujino just moved on instead going back and trying to fix it. It is just depressing thinking about your failures.

Oh yeah, this is all wishing. I don't expect he'll actually do it. Maybe we can come up with a fan head-canon of the birthday date.

 

[MeepMoop123]

Seriously I always wanted to see a date between Asuna and Inoda where they go to Arcade to get their pictures taken and then end with them in hotel. You know the date Inoda interrupted before. But this was so unsatisfying and Asuna's POV being a quick flashback sucked.

But I really hoped Fujino just moved on instead going back and trying to fix it. It is just depressing thinking about your failures.

But the whole thing would just be Asuna and Indoa walking around town with Inoda occasionally groping Asuna. Like the whole thing was that Asuna realized that Inodas hand already healed because he groped her so much.
Like what Fujinos said was:
"Many people still want some scenes for the end of Part I as well, but I can't do too much, since there is really no more contents for that night."
Which to me sounds like that in canon, not a whole lot happend during that day with the exception of the end and was more sort of a trust buildup by Inoda to get her to stay with him in his apartment.

I think the way Fujino started part 2 was perfect, the sharp contrast between Inoda and Kirito during the intro really makes you understand what has happend. She clearly wasn't fond of the idea of having sex with Inoda or helping him out since she realized that his hand has already healed.

I think you might be looking at beginning of part 2 as the end of part 1 which isn't really supposed to be the case.
Instead of looking at it as a good beginning to part 2 you are looking at it as a bad ending to part 1.
The end of part 1 isn't supposed to be the finaly, just an important plot point.

 

[AlterInfernalAllius]

But the whole thing would just be Asuna and Indoa walking around town with Inoda occasionally groping Asuna. Like the whole thing was that Asuna realized that Inodas hand already healed because he groped her so much.
Like what Fujinos said was:
"Many people still want some scenes for the end of Part I as well, but I can't do too much, since there is really no more contents for that night."
Which to me sounds like that in canon, not a whole lot happend during that day with the exception of the end and was more sort of a trust buildup by Inoda to get her to stay with him in his apartment.

I think the way Fujino started part 2 was perfect, the sharp contrast between Inoda and Kirito during the intro really makes you understand what has happend. She clearly wasn't fond of the idea of having sex with Inoda or helping him out since she realized that his hand has already healed.

I think you might be looking at beginning of part 2 as the end of part 1 which isn't really supposed to be the case.
Instead of looking at it as a good beginning to part 2 you are looking at it as a bad ending to part 1.
The end of part 1 isn't supposed to be the finaly, just an important plot point.

Honestly, I myself just figured Fujino specifically made that aspect of the end of Part 1 as he did because he couldn't figure a realistic way of writing the 'date' between Asuna and Inoda without it being forced as fuck given he had just written Asuna reaffirming her love for Kirito big time literally hours before it, so decided to leave it better for the players' imagination rather than writing Asuna being extra-annoyed at him and him being extra-pushy XP

Personally, while I know I'm like the only one who cares, I'm just sad we didn't get animated gifs for what looked like Hebishima fucking Suguha fully naked outside just behind the Cafe while Kirito walked there during his 'final day monologue' (Or at least I assume it was them since they were a bit out of view, unlike the rich ugly fatso having the threesome with that one girlfriend and his other sex slave that we could see as he used to be one of Asuna's neighbors who were all pretty easy to identify lol).

 

[MeepMoop123]

Honestly, I myself just figured Fujino specifically made that aspect of the end of Part 1 as he did because he couldn't figure a realistic way of writing the 'date' between Asuna and Inoda without it being forced as fuck given he had just written Asuna reaffirming her love for Kirito big time literally hours before it.

I think he just left it out because there isn't really anything to clarify there, it would just be Asuna and Inoda having a nice day out with Inoda groping her occasionally.
The beginning to part 2 would be Inoda groping Asuna in one of those photo-booths saying stuff like "hehe smile for the camera." It would be a really weird intro to part 2 that would feel more like an ending to part 1.

 

[Racoon_4]

Last time i checked you can also not literally go into a videogame that transmits some sensations to your actual body. What is it with you guys and realism in a fictional game?

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I prefer good ntr over sluttification/harem. Not more not less. So why are you bringing up "realism" and "fictional game" in this?
If Inoda has half a dozen girls he needs to fuck several each day. That would take a lot away from the Asuna-Kirito-Inoda relationship.

Asunas mum and Liz will play an importanat role. As for the other girls, let them have some quick scenes in between which don't need to much developing time with Hebishima or someone else.

It would be waaay more of a problem that Sinon is being added as yet another character in the game, but strangly people don't seem to care about that one.

She's not yet in the game, maybe that's why. As for me i agree on that. There are now so many girls in the story that it starts to get messy.
I'm afraid as the quantity of the girls involved gets more and more, the quality of the scenes and story will suffer.

 

[MeepMoop123]

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I prefer good ntr over sluttification/harem. Not more not less. So why are you bringing up "realism" and "fictional game" in this?
If Inoda has half a dozen girls he needs to fuck several each day. That would take a lot away from the Asuna-Kirito-Inoda relationship.

The initial problem you had was with the logistics of one character having sex with multiple girls in one day, acting like the game isn't a work of fiction anyways.

It doesn't matter if its Hebishima or Inoda fucking the girls, all the girls where going to get scenes anyways. The amount of content for each of them still stays the same.

The only issue that you have is personal preference.

Also just saying "I prefer good ntr" is probably one of the worst things i have read in a while, not even giving any specifics on what it is you would even be looking for, just complaining about the things you don't like.