Hi! found some typos in this update and thought I'd mention them
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Ben: Those guys me wanted me to distract
should be "you wanted me"
MC's thoughts: or maybe i'm just not used in having someone else cook for me.
should be used to having someone cook for me
Alice: we can't move until my uncle isn't recovered
double negatives should be but we cant move until my uncle has recovered
When you choose to spend time with tiffanny
mc: sorry. there's cops outside. I don't really know if they're looking for me to, but we can't take that risk
missing another o in to
When you meet jessica after meeting tiffany
During sex: ANHGHH~! F~!
ANHGHH~! FUCK! or ANHGHH~! FuuuuCK~!
Scene at night with sergeant nathan and the rookie
Sergeant Nathan:So, you're off duty tommorow, am I right?
Luna:yes sir
Sergeant: Better get used to it *chuckle*
Luna: Don't you have days off, too?
... blah blah ...
Sergeant: In a span of five years, he's almost rooted out every syndicate and corrupt cops in the force.
I think it should be In a span of five years,
he'd or he almost rooted out every syndicate and corrupt
cop in the force.
When Luna comes to hear alice's story
Mayor and police chief. They were the one who would gain the most from my father's death.
Should be: The Mayor and police chief, They were the ones who would...
Also I have some suggestions for rewording some sentences if you don't mind
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Also after going to visit jessica in the previous branches it seems that I can't go visit sydney after spending time with either bailey or tiffany. I was under the notion that I could choose her or jessica in the previous scenes dialogue when the mc was thinking of someone to call? Did I go too far into her route or is it supposed to lock us into one of the two when we choose? Or am I reading too much into that event ? I probably am haha
Anyway, wow you seem to push out updates pretty fast nice to see another update Crispy!