I just tried this and...well I didn't like it. I played it for a total of 5 minutes. In those five minutes, there was a ton of typos, misplaced names (twice), and the scenes are...kinda difficult to describe. I can't speak of the story or anything, cus I can say I really didn't give it a chance. The renders are beautiful, but something needs to be done with a way to transition or something...like...you have the roommate go from door, to suddenly supporting you, the landlady is suddenly open bath robe sprawled out on floor, MC's first thought is "nice view" in this situation, and then more fast switching to CGs. I honestly am not even sure how to describe how to fix it, especially since I normally wouldn't say that its wrong, but for whatever reason is very jarring here.
I am just one of those people that gets really hung up on typos and such, and there was a lot (mostly have to add "s" to your plurals). I'll try looking at this again in the future, hopefully a proofreader or someone going over the story can help clean it up a bit. As for the jarring CGs...I dunno. It just snaps to completely different positions compared to what you've previously processed with no real transition to it. Rather than action, its like seeing everyone teleport into various positions, or watching a story while flipping through photographs.