I agree with Satoshi's part but with reservations, because really Satoshi's POV's can seem a bit silly, however, it is in these scenes that we receive sneaky sex from the classic netorare. Knowing this, I'd rather Satoshi's POV's just continue, but with improvements, especially since Mary and Uncle are having real sex and it would be great to see a scene of curtains or something about Satoshi's eyes thinking they are other people, like i said, netorare classic.
I agree with this sentiment. I personally like my Netorare protags being a bit dense, simply for the fun scenes it allows, even if it breaks narrative-realism. That being said, I don't self-insert as an netorare protag, so I can understand why those that do may feel differently about that.
On the other hand, I often find people disparaging netorare protags for "not seeing the obvious", when it is, in fact, not obvious, or there is good reason for the protag to want to deny what is right in front of their face. "The obvious" is easy to point out when you are in god mode and fully genre aware, but much harder to do if you were in the character's shoes (anyone who has ever missed "obvious" hints in life, only to look back on them in hindsight and cringe should be aware of this). Same thing goes for denying what is right in front of your face; the internet is filled with groups that will continue to stick to their believes in the face of unsurmountable evidence, or even plain ol' reality. It's a very human thing to do, especially in relationships, where people tend to look past all sorts of things just to see the significant other that they want to see, rather than the SO they are (self-gaslighting is definitely a thing). Particularly true in the case where an NTR protag enjoys the idea of being cucked; it's easy to see how the protag would believe they are projecting there kink onto the real world and making stuff up in their head.
There's an observation that I've deemed the Shinji paradox, where folks yell at Shinji to just "get in the damn robot" while they themselves struggle to just get out of bed in the morning (I've been there, I get it). I often see the same paradox in NTR, where people expect character's to do and see things they wouldn't even be able to do and see themselves.
This is also a bit of a hot take, but I often find the NTR genre to be a quite silly genre at its core (similar to harem games). When you strip away all the fear of loss, angst, and self-doubt that lies at the surface of the genre, you are often left with some very silly tropes and views on sex and relationships. This is why I'm not too worried about realism and prefer games that lean into the silly to create fun and hot scenes, even at realism's expense (though I recognize that at a certain point a lack of realism can take people out of the story. It's a balancing act).
Thanks for the feedback all of you.
I agree that the weakest point right now is Satoshi and certain scenes in his PoV. Frankly, those haven't sit well with me either, and I'm planning on revamping a few of those scenes a tad to make it all a bit less silly, and make Satoshi a bit less of a dick. It'll be a gradual process, though, as I still need to focus on producing all the new content.
Glad most of you are enjoying this silly little story. As for the ones who aren't, well, can't please everybody. I'll just keep doing my thing in any case.
That all being said, I'm looking forward to some of the improvements here, and have a lot of faith in your writing (Satoshi being a dick could certainly be toned down, though it can be fun cheering for a guy to get cucked as well) I just hope you don't sacrifice great scenes/concepts in the name of realism (e.g. the Satoshi stalk BJ scene, that scene is peak! Even if it does tiptoe into superbly dense territory).