VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Second Half [v0.2.5] [OlecramID]

[olecramid]

I thoroughly enjoyed the game, thank you! I left a detailed review that I hope you feel is fair.

I look forward to future content! Keep up the great work!

Hi Spectre,
First, I'm really glad that you enjoy the game so far. May I ask you how long it took you to finish it? So I can have an honest answer when someone else ask me.
Second, thanks a lot for the review. Not only for the 5 stars but for the detail one.
I would like to answer to some of your Cons if you don't mind. Please, don't take it the wrong way, I have no problem with them, I think they make sense, I just want to develop them a little more.

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It was a bit long but I think that if you took the time to make a nice and detailed review, I should also repay you in the same way. Please keep in mind that none of my answers were to try to change your mind or change your review. I think all your points are logical and I just wanted to express my point of view on each one.
Beyond all, thank you so much for playing my game, taking the time to give me feedback and especially a review!
I hope to keep seeing you around

 

[Blernblern]

Also got to finally finish the game and I can say that I enjoyed it very much even though I earlier said that the MC is a tad too pessimistic for my liking.

He's actually quite a likeable chap in the end and the story definitely has a lot of room for personal growth in several directions. I'm honestly liking the setting of the RV and I'm also enjoying how the models don't look like they've been copypasted from other games.

Honestly keep up the good work Olecramid, you're definitely on to something very good here.

 

[olecramid]

Also got to finally finish the game and I can say that I enjoyed it very much even though I earlier said that the MC is a tad too pessimistic for my liking.

He's actually quite a likeable chap in the end and the story definitely has a lot of room for personal growth in several directions. I'm honestly liking the setting of the RV and I'm also enjoying how the models don't look like they've been copypasted from other games.

Honestly keep up the good work Olecramid, you're definitely on to something very good here.

Hi Blernblern,
Great to know that you enjoyed the game!
I know that MC was a bit pessimistic but it had its logic. He was at the worst point of his life, just realizing that he wasted half of it. Don't worry, he will get better, he will have a lot of reasons for!
All characters are custom made, of course that I used some models for the bases but I personalize most of it.

 

[Deleted member 216358]

Hi Spectre,
First, I'm really glad that you enjoy the game so far. May I ask you how long it took you to finish it? So I can have an honest answer when someone else ask me.
Second, thanks a lot for the review. Not only for the 5 stars but for the detail one.
I would like to answer to some of your Cons if you don't mind. Please, don't take it the wrong way, I have no problem with them, I think they make sense, I just want to develop them a little more.

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It was a bit long but I think that if you took the time to make a nice and detailed review, I should also repay you in the same way. Please keep in mind that none of my answers were to try to change your mind or change your review. I think all your points are logical and I just wanted to express my point of view on each one.
Beyond all, thank you so much for playing my game, taking the time to give me feedback and especially a review!
I hope to keep seeing you around

It took me roughly 5 hours to complete the game. I read every word and didn't speed through it. The game is very solid overall and the writing really sets the game apart from many others.

Thank you for the information on some of the points I brought up. I may make a couple of adjustments to my review. The RV has three storage places for firearms. I would turn the compartment under the driver's seat to be a semi-automatic handgun, perhaps a 9mm or a .45. Three shotguns seem out of place. A handgun is much more maneuverable inside the RV than the shotguns are by far. The shotguns are more for outside. Sure, they can be stuck out the windows or the main door but maneuverability is a huge problem inside the RV. For example, say you pick up a wanderer or a hitchhiker and they pull a knife on you. The shotgun is far too clumsy to grab quickly and use, especially while driving. A handgun on the other hand is perfect (as long as you can distract the person for a second or two).

One thing I'll probably add to the review is the 'Back/Return' button and 'Quit/Exit' buttons are too close together. In most Ren'Py games, they are far apart and the 'Back/Return' button is at the bottom. In your game the 'Quit/Exit' button is at the bottom which made me click it out of habit too often. I finally just used the right mouse button to go in and out of the menu because I was too used to the standard button placement.

 

[UncleFredo]

It took me roughly 5 hours to complete the game. I read every word and didn't speed through it. The game is very solid overall and the writing really sets the game apart from many others.

Thank you for the information on some of the points I brought up. I may make a couple of adjustments to my review. The RV has three storage places for firearms. I would turn the compartment under the driver's seat to be a semi-automatic handgun, perhaps a 9mm or a .45. Three shotguns seem out of place. A handgun is much more maneuverable inside the RV than the shotguns are by far. The shotguns are more for outside. Sure, they can be stuck out the windows or the main door but maneuverability is a huge problem inside the RV. For example, say you pick up a wanderer or a hitchhiker and they pull a knife on you. The shotgun is far too clumsy to grab quickly and use, especially while driving. A handgun on the other hand is perfect (as long as you can distract the person for a second or two).

One thing I'll probably add to the review is the 'Back/Return' button and 'Quit/Exit' buttons are too close together. In most Ren'Py games, they are far apart and the 'Back/Return' button is at the bottom. In your game the 'Quit/Exit' button is at the bottom which made me click it out of habit too often. I finally just used the right mouse button to go in and out of the menu because I was too used to the standard button placement.

Not to dump us into a caliber/handgun debate, There are a number of bullpup shotguns that have an overall length under 30 inches. Not as maneuverable as a handgun, but compact enough to use effectively inside and if necessary fire one handed.

I completely agree that for close in personal defense a handgun stored in close proximity makes more sense than any other firearm, but depending on the training of the person a revolver often makes more sense that a semiautomatic pistol. There are 8 round .38/.357 double action revolvers on the market. No jamming. No training to clear a jam. No safety to forget. Point and pull the trigger. If for some reason it doesn't go boom, just pull the trigger again.

 

[Deleted member 216358]

Not to dump us into a caliber/handgun debate, There are a number of bullpup shotguns that have an overall length under 30 inches. Not as maneuverable as a handgun, but compact enough to use effectively inside and if necessary fire one handed.

I completely agree that for close in personal defense a handgun stored in close proximity makes more sense than any other firearm, but depending on the training of the person a revolver often makes more sense that a semiautomatic pistol. There are 8 round .38/.357 double action revolvers on the market. No jamming. No training to clear a jam. No safety to forget. Point and pull the trigger. If for some reason it doesn't go boom, just pull the trigger again.

There is no debate here and please let's not start one! I had a bunch of text typed out but I deleted it because this forum is for the game, not firearms. There are advantages and disadvantage to both.

 

[Vleder]

Hello everyone,
I had the time to go through this update and I have to say that the it lived up to the excellent impressions of the first episode. I went through the whole two episodes again just to feel it was fluid and everything fit together (took me over 5 hours but I like to read everything and appreciate the renders and settings). I had planned to leave a more detailed feed back but I have to say that spectre1viper review covered almost everything I wanted to say almost the same way.
I like detailed and elaborate adult stories stories with mature writing and, having crossed the second half threshold myself, I find it even more interesting.
One thing I would add to spectre's review, even from experience, is that a successful businessman doesn't have to be ruthless but very determined. I met a few that had a "corporate personality" doing business and a whole complementary personality "outside". I have a few friends like that, so the MC's behavior doesn't strike as odd that much. And he wanted to change his ways...
So, good writing, good setting, beautiful models (even if Emily is a bit doll-shaped, she's lovely that way) and endless story progression possibilities down the road (pun intended).
I also feel olecramid's excellent work could do with some more support, so I'm going to do something about that.
Looking forward for the next updates!

 

[Havik79]

Meh, thank god for skip unseen text, just ended up losing interest in every chick except Rachel, which sucks as I love gingers and just lost interest when one was super slutty and the other just gave up on the whole abusive father, I know why it was done, but just went on far too long for me, animations were ok, nothing to write home about, English wasn't too bad, I have seen worse.

The story idea is certainly nice and different, curious to see how things go, but really only here for Rachel.
Although I hope the internal monologue will ease up in future.

 

[Dude505]

MC: " I don't care about money" "sell below market value".
I just started playing but I have to ask... is this a horror game? Cause that shit's scary!

 

[Canto Forte]

You should just play the game .. babes fall into your lap as you are.
Knowing bands usually use large trailers and your target is rail roaded babes,
your luck is on the rise ...rise .. people rising!

 

[v1900]

There is no debate here and please let's not start one! I had a bunch of text typed out but I deleted it because this forum is for the game, not firearms. There are advantages and disadvantage to both.

While I don't intend to start a debate I would like to share what I rationalized at the time I saw that scene. As he was hell bent on leaving so fast it was like well lets give this impatient dude the only small arm that he can get off the shelf right now (well that or a hunting rifle).

As a side note, I fully expect the MC to blow a toe the first time he uses it.

 

[Mpkstroff]

So... is there any news on the game?
Hope Olecramid is alright, but it seems like he has not come here in some time...

 

[Vleder]

So... is there any news on the game?
Hope Olecramid is alright, but it seems like he has not come here in some time...

He's dealing with serious health issues. Shared that with his patrons a month ago. I guess he'll need his time and we can hope he comes back soon. You can stop by his patreon and leave a friendly word.

 

[Canto Forte]

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Meet Rachel, smarter than beautiful, which is saying a lot!

 

[Canto Forte]

Meet Jennifer! Emily's best friend​

 

[Hahn1900]

Really really good so far... its just a "start" but one of the best i ever saw around here.

Really interesting characters not just made up girls for the sex. Real storys that are drawing you in.

The MC is not the average porn guy, its a humble man in his 40ties (and is looking like that too) who decided to let the miodlife crisis pass and try to turn his life around... only thing i dont like, its of course again a guy without any money issues, but i get it... it makes it easier to get him like that "on the road"

Hopefully not every girl in the story will be a very young girl... could do with a lady about his age too i think.

Overall i like the dialogues (the english is not perfect but good enough, and i wont judge if its like that cause mine is worse) only thing about the writing i dont like... there are a little bit to many inner monologues about obvious things. If you have pictures, dont write about things that can be seen obviously. And try to avoid to write the same things and thoughts over and over again... there are many things that are reapting itself. It gets sometimes a little tiresome to read this way i admit.

I thaught the "free version" is without animations, but there are some... and overall, they are not good. And like this not needed i think. But at least they are not annoying. I dont like short loops which are going on forever, in this game the animations are very short, so they cant be annoying, but they arent a real plus either.

I really want to know how this is going on, want to see how the MC will meet the other girls and what it will be like.

But iam a little bit concernded if this will not be little bit to "big" to get everything together in a decent amount of time, 5 girls with very different and big stries for each and everyone. its a lot to pull off. This one can easily be grown over the head without a good storyboard and a plan in your head how to finish things and when.

I will watch this project closely, and if the next update will be a good one in a acceptable amount of time, i consider to pledge... cause this as potential to be one of my abolute favorites, right now i will wait for the next update and hope you can deliver

*edit* wrote this as a rewview aswell, now i could read that the DEV is not well and the future for the next update is uncertain... i hope everything works out just fine, cause this game could be a HIT.

 

[Canto Forte]

You do not have ta hide, dear!
You are gorgeous!
You look phenomenal in all the right places!
Lemme be with you! Scooch on over!​

 

[hatefuldisplay]

Off to a very nice start! I'm definitely looking forward to the MC meeting up with Emily and having more adventures with Rachel. Not that I'm against the other three ladies on the cover, they just haven't peeked my interest as much as those two.

 

[JustPeekin]

Just hope devs okay, and can soon continue this game. Nothing from them since Oct 31st.

 

[hatefuldisplay]

Just hope devs okay, and can soon continue this game. Nothing from them since Oct 31st.

That really isn't a huge amount of time in development. It takes a lot of folks a number of months for each update.