Writer's block truly sucks! Feeling your pain. My advice is walk completely away for 24-48 hours. Sometimes works for me...Still having dialogue flow issues. Trying to fit and mix several short events into one game day ( or afternoon ) is really proving to be a headache.....The scene setting is the easy part at the moment, but the dialogue is slowing to a near vapor lock.
Yea I have done that twice already. Not just a block. Trying to put several events that happened at different times into a single set of scenes that play time is in a single afternoon is tough, and make it seem like a single event is near impossible.
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That's not a writer's block problem. that's a pacing problem.
Thought I would through out a buns shot just for grins. Nothing wrong wit this view.....
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MC - Here ya go. You did say something with lot's of girls.
Brenda - This looks like it well be fun.
MC - Oh yea Red Heads, I'm in, and twins too.
Becky - Pervert. Just be sure to watch the screen and not Brenda's ass.
Brenda - This looks like it well be fun.
MC - Oh yea Red Heads, I'm in, and twins too.
Becky - Pervert. Just be sure to watch the screen and not Brenda's ass.
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Poor Becky would lose her mind if they where dropped in the middle of Severed realms and Lily started in hahahahaha.MC - Here ya go. You did say something with lot's of girls.
Brenda - This looks like it well be fun.
MC - Oh yea Red Heads, I'm in, and twins too.
Becky - Pervert. Just be sure to watch the screen and not Brenda's ass.
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Se would defiantly turn Becky around real quick.She is coming around, but it is a hard row to hoe.
I'm getting closer to an update, but still having dialog flow and pacing issues with this part. If I can get this all together so that it seems something on the order of in line and not so much scattered.. Working around the conflict is of course the hardest part,,, Ya know throw out the bad then make the little bit of good seem normal In other words 'Life'
Sort of makes me wonder why I chose an actual events type of story over a total fantasy story.... I think it would have been easer to rewrite Gone with the wind, but not shorter
If I can get this all together so that it seems something on the order of in line and not so much scattered.. Working around the conflict is of course the hardest part,,, Ya know throw out the bad then make the little bit of good seem normal In other words 'Life' Sort of makes me wonder why I chose an actual events type of story over a total fantasy story....
I think it would have been easer to rewrite Gone with the wind, but not shortertripod70
Playing your game now. Everything's good, story, renders, but only one thing - English. When I saw a mistake for the first time ('an' with next word beginning with consonant letter) I thought it was just mistype. Then another one and the next one... Especially 'knifes'. It's like I am in my 5th grade again (when I was 11) and my English teacher explains my first mistakes. And between these mistakes it's good text, it's pleasant to read.
I'm not native English speaker, that's my second language. I may not notice part of mistakes, especially ones I make myself, but that rookie-level stuff is seriously messing with game immersion. Maybe it's worth to use a proofreader? Your game has a good story flow and it will be good to not break my immersion in your game.
Playing your game now. Everything's good, story, renders, but only one thing - English. When I saw a mistake for the first time ('an' with next word beginning with consonant letter) I thought it was just mistype. Then another one and the next one... Especially 'knifes'. It's like I am in my 5th grade again (when I was 11) and my English teacher explains my first mistakes. And between these mistakes it's good text, it's pleasant to read.
I'm not native English speaker, that's my second language. I may not notice part of mistakes, especially ones I make myself, but that rookie-level stuff is seriously messing with game immersion. Maybe it's worth to use a proofreader? Your game has a good story flow and it will be good to not break my immersion in your game.
Update should be out here in a little while (I hope)......
I know there is and will be grammatical errors as well as spelling. I am like the Scarecrow.... "If I only had a brain" Update notes and graphics will be updated when it hits.
This update is wordy and maybe even redundant a little. So what else is new
I know there is and will be grammatical errors as well as spelling. I am like the Scarecrow.... "If I only had a brain" Update notes and graphics will be updated when it hits.
This update is wordy and maybe even redundant a little. So what else is new
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I downloaded game from here, last version on a time of my comment. There was knifes. And what about punctuation? Is it so hard to end a question with a question mark?
You see, I like to read. Pictures are a fine bonus. And when I read... I guess you don't know how it feels to read a foreign language written with many mistakes. Please, believe me, it's really hard and unpleasant.
That is correct. I didn't put that one in a moderator did.....
Possibly there will be a Harem tag, still thinking on that one.......
Sorry!
I do that I know quite often. I will try to find and correct that, or some of it at least. I got hung up on the "an" thing I think. Grammar is not a strong thing with me as you have noticed and I still think that shitt has two "t's" Doing this totally alone and as a sort of hobby to keep myself busy. Well it is doing just that keeping me busy.
Any suggestions are greatly appreciated (Except going back to school. at 70+ age I don't see that happening. )