I can understand that. The English itself isn't bad at all. It's the story telling that needs work. And I would be more than happy to help with that. Cause I like the idea of the game, the story just needs an overhaul to slow it down.
Tested it for you, it's better than before. A little easier to read on the lighter backgrounds. But tell me why does it have to be white? Is there any significance to the color of the text being white? Why not just make the text pink, or blue, or red, or any color other than black or white, or yellow cause usually that can become hard to read too. Honestly I would just go with either red or pink, both of which will pop out from the backgrounds. Oh and yes 90% transparency is likely too much. I wouldn't go above 80%.
Way too much for me.
If you haven't, try some colours in the 50-70% saturation range. I find pure colours incredibly off-putting and tacky, but dropping the saturation tends to do the trick.
Also worth mentioning that you should never have to do that for the images to look right, when making the images you should leave space at the bottom for the text so the main focus of the image is visible over the box. Hiding the box should be just if people want to see something that isn't the main focus of the image, like checking out a girl's legs when the focus of the image is her body.
You enjoy looking at men's butts when they fuck women? That's gay bruh. xD
The reason for that is, I'm taking a lot of time to make the renders and not a lot of time to write down a decent story. I have a lot going on. This is a hobby for me not something I do professionally. I wish I had the time to refine the story over and over but I really can't for the time being. But, I'm currently taking storytelling classes to improve. So, bear with me.
I just finished playing this the other day and I have to say you're doing great so far. Are there times where I'd like you to slow down and let a scene breathe, last a little longer? Yes. But what's there is good. I like the art, I like the story, and I'm excited to see more. My only request would be to see more growth scenes for the MC, because those are hot and the idea of her becoming a muscular mini giantess with a giant cock is super hot. Keep it up.The reason for that is, I'm taking a lot of time to make the renders and not a lot of time to write down a decent story. I have a lot going on. This is a hobby for me not something I do professionally. I wish I had the time to refine the story over and over but I really can't for the time being. But, I'm currently taking storytelling classes to improve. So, bear with me.
