Okay, review time.
1st of all, why is this a f*cking kinetic novel? No choices besides naming & skipping. But I don't like to just complain, so I'll give some suggestions.
At first I was worried about the FMC plan, like you don't gain control by sleeping with everyone, but when I saw the word femdom, I was relieved.
Some people didn't like the female MC scene cause she went too far, others suggested sex wasn't necessary for story reasons, & I read your answer which made sense.
Personally I think both are right. Yes she is inexperienced & needed to do it, but she also kinda went too far for an inexperienced 1st time. I thought using the mouth at that stage was too much. So here's my suggestion: after the foot scene is over, you give 3 choices: hand mouth & breast. Then after using any options to edge him 3 times, move on to the foot orgasm scene.
This way, you allow the player to choose how far to go, & it isn't a kinetic novel anymore. Players feel like they have a say, can choose how far to go(less complaints), & the outcome remains the same. (3 times & he will submit, mouth/hand/breast doesn't matter, poor guy just wants release)
Next the Male MC scene (not much except the sex scenes in ep 1)
Again, some choices would make the scene feel better with more player involvement & less kinetic novel. Allow the player to choose the acts, like in the beginning you get choice to play with her nipples by pinching or twisting or licking (ofc you need to control the choices the player gets) or move on, then choice to lick her or move on. Then in the BJ choice you can allow the MC to give in (followed by redemption by being ready for round 2 faster than Ella ever could imagine) or tough it out to win. These choices would make the player feel a lot more involved.
Also, many people view oral sex through a Dom/sub lens on who gives & who recieves. I know that's not really accurate, so no need for a lecture, but with how this game has a lot of Dom & control focus it'd be nice if there was more player choice regarding oral.
Actually, since this seems to have lot of D/s content, it'd be nice if players got more choices on what they do during the sex scenes overall. Since this seems to have a lot of MCdom scenes (where both f & m mc dom others) in the future, more control over what the MC does in those scenes would make it feel more... dominating/involved/enjoyable imo. Like whether you go down or not, how far you tease them, whether you let them cum or not, and what other actions you perform.
I understand that sometimes the plot will dictate that (like 1st scene the guy needed to be allowed to orgasm to seal his loyalty). But please try to see how much freedom you can give the player within the constraints of the plot. For example: only edging & release is necessary in the 1st scene, the mouth & breast scenes can be optional depending on player choice.
Multiple Protagonists already make people feel less involved. Giving more choices would go a long way in making players feel more involved
