VN Ren'Py Completed Through Spacetime [Final] [Empiric]

[Empiric]

I didn't mean the amount of renders, but descriptive text. I tend to click through images without text pretty quickly after I grasped the situation. To me at least, it feels like descriptions do more to spur the imagination and get you into the scene than images alone.
I'm not trying to discourage you or anything, I just think you could get more mileage out of the number of images you render with a bit more text.

In any case, I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Personally, I think you're doing a great job. I appreciate your hard work; please don't get discouraged.

constructive criticism is fine.. I'm trying to improve that part of the sex scenes. It's mostly that I never really read the text in sex scene, I'm more of a look at the picture and imagine what's being said type of guy, so when I was writing them at first, I didn't really try to put much of dialogue in the sex scenes. Then someone pointed that out, so I've been trying to put it in, but a lot of times it just feels forced to me and kinda awkward..

 

[oidex]

constructive criticism is fine.. I'm trying to improve that part of the sex scenes. It's mostly that I never really read the text in sex scene, I'm more of a look at the picture and imagine what's being said type of guy, so when I was writing them at first, I didn't really try to put much of dialogue in the sex scenes. Then someone pointed that out, so I've been trying to put it in, but a lot of times it just feels forced to me and kinda awkward..

Ah yes, the classic reader versus watcher argument.
If you don't feel comfortable with putting in more text then definitely keep it that way. Less is more if more is awkward.
It was just meant as a suggestion to get more content out of the number of renders.

 

[VN..reader]

little bummed wolf girl not on banner.... but the 'chicks' that Capt Wonderpants encounters here are ALL hotties. Lily's mom.. Prime MILF. fun little romp. ty

 

[kajidiablo]

not a bad start but that's what id call it, a start. it feels like something around 1/10 of the way completed so like i said a good start kind of a lame cliffhanger to fuck or not to fuck is about the oldest one in the book at this point might as well go back to anime kick in the nuts cliché trope lol. its interesting so ill probably check back in like a year for the next decent amount of content but keep up the good work its interesting at the very least

 

[Empiric]

not a bad start but that's what id call it, a start. it feels like something around 1/10 of the way completed so like i said a good start kind of a lame cliffhanger to fuck or not to fuck is about the oldest one in the book at this point might as well go back to anime kick in the nuts cliché trope lol. its interesting so ill probably check back in like a year for the next decent amount of content but keep up the good work its interesting at the very least

Wait.. what.. 1/10? There are almost 2000 renders already, I'd burn my gpu before I made 10 times that..

 

[Empiric]

little bummed wolf girl not on banner.... but the 'chicks' that Capt Wonderpants encounters here are ALL hotties. Lily's mom.. Prime MILF. fun little romp. ty

Yeah I made the banner with first episode, she wasn't even created back then. I should probably update it eventually.

 

[Mr. Harper]

Well I don't know how long the game will be, I could probably finish the main plot in 10 more updates with similar amount of content as each update so far and then I'll have to decide if just end it with that or continue. So far it looks like it's going to be the end and I'll just start new project then, since the game isn't very popular.

The game is good, the girls all so beautiful honestly... i don't know why this game not popular like you say.
The story from this game makes sense to have a harem.. i mean because only the MC is the Human Man in the universe. Not like other game when there are some men besides MC but the girls suddenly open their leg to MC.

I just hope you don't abandon this game and not rush the ending :|

 

[kajidiablo]

Empiric i say 1/10 because you have a good plot but you rushed over half the things you should of stretched out making something that could of been longer into an extended into because of how rushed it is, granted this is porn in the end but if you want an actual story not just fuckery along the lines of a cheezie pizza man offering "extra sausage" things need a little length lol you got the easiest plot ever with a decent spin on the basic "last man alive" using a black hole with time dilation as a good start to what is over used as a fantasy you even added a giant sperm bank to offset the issues with inbreeding you have the foundation for something good but if your thinking this is halfway over or more your rushing to the finish line way too soon to give your story any kind of traction, ignoring the rushed start you've laid the groundwork for everything needed really evil plot, crazy sex cult, last man alive to save the male sex you just need to stretch what you can without massive padding and you will have something truly epic in the end give more time to developing characters and some "home life" beyond the main plot and your all set really you have something that can basically write it self don't sell yourself short

Edit: almost forgot the princess of the oldest race in the universe i mean really you got an epic start but at this rate your making virgin porn thats going to be sadly forgotten with other better things out there, thats all

edit2: one bit of advice ill give regarding steam is if they dont like it your rating will bomb so sorting this stuff out now will help ive been on steam for years and can say you have a nice start but thats all id call it a start not to be the asshole but you got a nice foundation you just need to do more work on the character development beyond major plot
edit3: i know i may sound like the smart ass but considering the 1k or so games ive played porn and non porn plot and story is one thing id say i am good at and if i thought this was just fap trash i wouldn't even bother commenting this is just some baseless advice for what you can do is all i suppose

 

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[Osamabeenfappin]

Another quality update. Theres a reason this is my current favorite game. The Story is fun,and the girls are gorgeous.

 

[Empiric]

The game is good, the girls all so beautiful honestly... i don't know why this game not popular like you say.
The story from this game makes sense to have a harem.. i mean because only the MC is the Human Man in the universe. Not like other game when there are some men besides MC but the girls suddenly open their leg to MC.

I just hope you don't abandon this game and not rush the ending :|

Thanks and don't worry I wont. I already have certain amount of story I have on mind I won't go under.

 

[Empiric]

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Thanks, would you mind if I posted it on itch.io alongside your discord and site information?

 

[jhustrue]

Personally, if I had to choose between static renders but very well described sex scenes or animations but no flavor text, I'd pick the former. I'll forgive bad animations if the flavor text and/or dialogue is decent enough. I really, really hate when animations are just a basic loop and the descriptive text is just something stupid like "oooh"

 

[VN..reader]

Personally, if I had to choose between static renders but very well described sex scenes or animations but no flavor text, I'd pick the former. I'll forgive bad animations if the flavor text is decent enough. I really, really hate when animations are just a basic loop and the descriptive text is just something stupid like "oooh"

the mind is the best erotic organ. make me believe the sex is great and 'real' and i don't need animated renders... at least thats the scientific answer. and the easy way for the gpu. but you need to have a good writer.

 

[caxhub]

Thanks, would you mind if I posted it on itch.io alongside your discord and site information?

Okay! Of course

 

[VN..reader]

the mind is the best erotic organ. make me believe the sex is great and 'real' and i don't need animated renders... at least thats the scientific answer. and the easy way for the gpu. but you need to have a good writer.

i will ref. 'freeloading family' (since i just went thru ch 14.) not much animation, good but static renders and wonderful text.

 

[Empiric]

lol seems like you want to ignore my comment but w/e i said what i wanted too but the facepalms can speak if they got a good point ive had more sex then most played more games then most too, only trying to give a bit of advice and although i haven't worked on this kind of game i do get the basics in terms of work and time required based on other projects ive done lol one tip largest voice is typically the idiots listen to the outliers not the horde unless you want something extremely simple xD or just wanna milk idiots i can at least understand that i guess

I just genuinely didn't know how to answer you.. it's my first game, I'd say it's pretty understandable that it's gonna be a shitshow in lot of ways, but for me it's foremost a learning process. It's not as important to perfect this game, as to realize all the mistakes and take them together with all what I've learned into the next one.

 

[jhustrue]

"Be a creep a little" -proceeds to jack off onto her tits while she's sleeping.-

What part of that is only creeping a little?

 

[kajidiablo]

I just genuinely didn't know how to answer you.. it's my first game, I'd say it's pretty understandable that it's gonna be a shitshow in lot of ways, but for me it's foremost a learning process. It's not as important to perfect this game, as to realize all the mistakes and take them together with all what I've learned into the next one.

to keep it simple just add more character development via hang out scenes the main plot your making works well as it is, just needs that simple character development to make you give a fuck about them basically youve done that to some extent just think of life even if shit was crazy someone would crack some jokes or try and lift your spirits just add shit like that movie nights impromptu dates i mean men havent existed in their life times and all they have are old romance movies not hard to get creative

 

[jhustrue]

to keep it simple just add more character development via hang out scenes the main plot your making works well as it is, just needs that simple character development to make you give a fuck about them basically youve done that to some extent just think of life even if shit was crazy someone would crack some jokes or try and lift your spirits just add shit like that movie nights impromptu dates i mean men havent existed in their life times and all they have are old romance movies not hard to get creative

Bro, you need to learn how to use punctuation. Your walls of text are annoying as hell to read without it.