You will literally never get back the chance for your first post on this website dedicated to smut, lewds, and debauchery..
he is from vanilla team
not really, people like to have strawberry on cake does not mean they like the whole cake full of strawberry.
Finally you make some sense man.
That's fine. But I'd say the game has already established its identity, and that's to have a mix of the romantic AND over-the-top excess in terms of both the prose and the lewds. Asking it to be something different than what it is seems pointless. Still, you do you!
If you like to have strawberry on a cake, then choose a cake that mirror your preference. It's pointless and even idiotic to eat a cake full of strawberries and then complain to the baker about how he made the cake instead of....idk...finding another cake that's not full of strawberries.
This is stupid then, you can't buy a cake full of strawberries and ask the baker to remove the strawberries, go look for another cake, or make one that suits your needs, or even order one, don't buy one already made then complain
It looks like an ad of LA LECHERA®.
In the romantic route he doesn't seem particularly obsessed with getting LIs pregnant. Although maybe it's a matter of perception.Stories with Romance can be nice but for this VN I'm all for more corruption and turning all the woman into your personal sluts. The only thing that maybe could be turned down a little bit, is the MCs obsession with getting everyone pregnant as quickly as possible. But I guess the dev and a lot of people here are into that. Probably wouldn't have much luck with such a suggestion
This is one of the biggest complaints about this VN though. You can have your winding prosaic musings; but its implementation here is amateurish, repetitive, and needless bombastic. I don't have a problem reading long texts. I can read through Hugo, de Balzac, Milton, the Greek epics, etc. just fine. The problem with BaiBai's writing is that he's attempting soaring rhetoric and it's just bad a lot of the time.
Meh, I just like analyzing people's writing skills, I just do it incidentally, sometimes I share my thoughts. Doesn't mean I'm up my ass. Not looking for anything except for incest and non-con smut that's well done, thanks for your concern though!
Gosh, I just do not feel the same.
Maybe. But in that case I think he'd say "one of my biggest complaints." If I'm wrong then of course, disregard half my post.
Was gonna say it could be confirmation bias on my part as well lol, but I've been active only for the last 50 pages or so, so maybe I missed a lot of the earlier criticism as I haven't been super engaged until recently. I am not critiquing the "content" per se; I'm perfectly fine with the story, the reasoning, the motivations of the characters, the pacing, etc. I'm just personally super attuned to the technical aspects of writing, so when I see a lot of repetition, poor implementation of rhetoric, imprecisely used words, poor syntax, among other things, from someone who is clearly trying to do those things well, I want to provide feedback.
It's always hard making references to classical literature without appearing like you're up your own ass, even more so when you do it while commenting on the writing of a porn game. Doesn't mean the criticism can't be valid though.
I've read your other posts about the bombast and I have been tempted to respond before but I didn't because I don't feel like I'm in a good position to judge these things. Not only because judging my own writing skills feels kind of weird, but also because I have barely read anything worthwhile in English so I don't have many references to draw from (that aren't porn).
You're right, "content" wasn't quite the right word for me to use. But you are talking about word choice and sentence composition, and see, I just think that's something this VN actually excels at (if you can look past some of the quirky syntax). He comes up with ways of putting things that I would simply never think of, and I mean that in the best way.
