Hey, thanks for the reply. Another point of clarification, bombast doesn't always refer to word choice--in this particular case, I don't mean it in terms of the particular words you're opting to use; but, again, in a structural sense. At this point my critique would probably be best served by taking a section of your writing and reformulating it to indicate where I think the issues lie.
I've been hesitant to do something like that because I'm not sure it would be well received (not by the forum, I mean you personally), and also frankly, I usually charge a lot for it. If you're open to it though, I'll try to whip something up to see if you think it's useful in conveying what I'm trying to get across, and can be helpful as you plan your writing in the future.
To further clarify yet again, I think your work is good--otherwise I wouldn't be taking the time to drop these walls-of-text. If you look at some of my other posts I've defended it against critiques of the pacing/logic--both of which I think are great and internally consistent. That's why I've tried to make sure my critique is as narrow and precise as possible, but I guess some people are getting the wrong message from it all the same (that I think the whole thing is dogshit, which it's very much not).
