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So, as I've said in the past, I really like this game, but I have to agree with the guys in the review section that the grammar sometimes takes you out of the story. I pushed through it the first time I played by simply reading in my mind the correct way the sentence I was reading should go, but I recently saw that version 0.9b was released and it said it had "bug and spelling fixes", so I downloaded it and ran it to see if the one audio bug I've been having a hard time ignoring and the typos I remember were fixed. They were not.

So I decided to take a different approach, I took my saves out of the renpy folder and started a brand new game, but this time I did so with the script open by my side, so that any time I saw a typo I could fix it and have my own little proofread version, or at least proofread enoguh for me since I am not a native english speaker either nor am I a master of the language. I've been going through both routes at the same time jumping from two different saves, one full seduction and one full corruption so I see most text in game. I have played for almost 4 hours and I still haven't finished day 1.... and there are 8 of them.... Now I see why proofreading took last place in your priority list baibai, what a fucking headache, and that's coming from someone who is not an expert in english and is only fixing the typos he sees. And only fixing the bare minimum, changing dialog as little as possible to not mess with the narration nor the way the characters present themselves. Although I have to say, I am just at the part where MC is explaining to emily what a magic wand is and I have already changed 17 things in the script, of which at least 15 are true typos that needed fixing. and that's considering that earlier chapters have better grammar, so yeah, this game really needs a good proofreader (Someone better than me at least because I'm sure I must have missed some typos that I didn't notice).

Considering that there are still typos on day 1 even after some years of development, I don't expect the game to have that fixed in the next couple of updates, so I'm keeping my own little changelog with most of the changes I made in case something happens in the next update that forces me to change it all again. At least it's a good exercise for learning English.

For any charitable soul who is a native english speaker or is very good at english, I would like to ask for guidance in two cases where I am unsure if changes are required.

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This will all prove useless when baibai releases a proper proofread version but meanwhile it will be my own little english exercise.
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I found a bug, at first I though it was my fault and that I broke the phone function when rewriting the script (even though I was only fixing typos and I didn't touch the code) but no, it wasn't me, I manage to trigger the bug with a fresh game and all saves deleted (obviously including the renpy folder in appdata). So, here is how this bug happens.

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¿How hard does a dick have to be in order to stretch your pants like that, instead of the fabric pushing it along one of your legs :unsure:? At that point, it would be considered a blunt weapon.

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I love the fact that a lot of things in this game are pretty well grounded, but every time MC's dick gets hard the laws of physics go on vacation :ROFLMAO:. The game even jokes about this when Lola asks the MC if he faints every time his penis gets hard, since there shouldn't be much blood left to reach his brain. When Baibai made the MC taller, he unintentionally made it make a little more sense since he now has a little more blood in him.

If I ever have enough money and figure out a way to support Baibai that isn't blocked where I live, I'm gonna request a render of the MC beating the shit out of Aden with his dick. But leave the pants on, I don't want it to go the yaoi way.
Physics like the women being able to walk upright with 50 lbs of tits hanging off their chests?
 

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Alright, these last few scenes do take some time indeed. I only got one of the bigger ones done and the start of the next one. That said, I also did a few other things this week, mostly tinkering with the new phone system I want to integrate which also took away some time. The code for that one is working pretty smoothly, though I'm still working on some UI elements for it.

At this point it is pretty much certain that I won't get done with the renders this month, but I shouldn't overshoot it by that much. As you might have noticed I also added "translation" to the progress graphic since it is one of the bigger steps and I really just forgot to add it when I first made the graphic.

Anyway, here are the teasers for this months showcase, plus one teaser of Mrs. Clements from earlier in the update since its been asked for. I also added on all the new profile pictures for the new phone system, mostly because there won't be all too many opportunity's to see them in better resolution than 100x100 pixels in game.
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Alright, I actually managed to get done with rendering, or rather, I would have gotten done with it but I realized that I made kind of a stupid mistake and will have to rerender a bigger segment of one scene. It isn't as bad as it sounds though since I still have all the scene data (poses, cameras and such) saves, as well as all the animations so I'll only have to go through those and swap the outfit, plus maybe do a few adjustments here and there. All in all it shouldn't take long at all, the biggest part of it will probably be the recording time of the animations.

Apart from that I can tell you that the update definitely turned out quite a lot bigger than I had initially intended it to but I guess that isn't too surprising at this point. While v0.10 won't have much of the big emotional peaks as the last two updates I can assure you that this one puts the "porn" into the "porn-game" and it isn't even as if there was not character development either, just nothing as drastic.

Anyway, all of that said I'll still have to do some expectation management. I got about half a new testament worth of words ahead of me to translate and since this will be the last update of the first episode there are also a quite a few other things I still have to do to get this into the best possible position. I really would love to tell you an release date estimate at this point, but even though I feel like my current goal isn't too unrealistic I'm too scarred from the last few times so I'll keep it to myself for a while longer until I can be sure that I'm on track. What I can tell you however, and those of you who've been following the game for some time might have already guessed it, is that the update will still take a bit longer to finish.
 

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Alright, I actually managed to get done with rendering, or rather, I would have gotten done with it but I realized that I made kind of a stupid mistake and will have to rerender a bigger segment of one scene. It isn't as bad as it sounds though since I still have all the scene data (poses, cameras and such) saves, as well as all the animations so I'll only have to go through those and swap the outfit, plus maybe do a few adjustments here and there. All in all it shouldn't take long at all, the biggest part of it will probably be the recording time of the animations.

Apart from that I can tell you that the update definitely turned out quite a lot bigger than I had initially intended it to but I guess that isn't too surprising at this point. While v0.10 won't have much of the big emotional peaks as the last two updates I can assure you that this one puts the "porn" into the "porn-game" and it isn't even as if there was not character development either, just nothing as drastic.

Anyway, all of that said I'll still have to do some expectation management. I got about half a new testament worth of words ahead of me to translate and since this will be the last update of the first episode there are also a quite a few other things I still have to do to get this into the best possible position. I really would love to tell you an release date estimate at this point, but even though I feel like my current goal isn't too unrealistic I'm too scarred from the last few times so I'll keep it to myself for a while longer until I can be sure that I'm on track. What I can tell you however, and those of you who've been following the game for some time might have already guessed it, is that the update will still take a bit longer to finish.
1st episode? Will there be timeskip after this?
 
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Alright, I actually managed to get done with rendering, or rather, I would have gotten done with it but I realized that I made kind of a stupid mistake and will have to rerender a bigger segment of one scene. It isn't as bad as it sounds though since I still have all the scene data (poses, cameras and such) saves, as well as all the animations so I'll only have to go through those and swap the outfit, plus maybe do a few adjustments here and there. All in all it shouldn't take long at all, the biggest part of it will probably be the recording time of the animations.

Apart from that I can tell you that the update definitely turned out quite a lot bigger than I had initially intended it to but I guess that isn't too surprising at this point. While v0.10 won't have much of the big emotional peaks as the last two updates I can assure you that this one puts the "porn" into the "porn-game" and it isn't even as if there was not character development either, just nothing as drastic.

Anyway, all of that said I'll still have to do some expectation management. I got about half a new testament worth of words ahead of me to translate and since this will be the last update of the first episode there are also a quite a few other things I still have to do to get this into the best possible position. I really would love to tell you an release date estimate at this point, but even though I feel like my current goal isn't too unrealistic I'm too scarred from the last few times so I'll keep it to myself for a while longer until I can be sure that I'm on track. What I can tell you however, and those of you who've been following the game for some time might have already guessed it, is that the update will still take a bit longer to finish.
thx for the info.

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Ok, this could all be nothing or have a story behind it that I am not aware of, but is Gao's name misspelled in the sign of HIS shop?

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At first I thought that Guo might be Cain's father and Gao's son, but considering that Gao is the one who makes all the potions in the shop and that he calls the store HIS life's work, I doubt that that's the case. And if Guo was Gao's father, then I am surprised that they had modern signs that many decades ago or that they kept the name despite the changes in generations.

I think they misspelled Gao's name, though I have no proof, but if they really did, then I feel really sorry for Grampa here.
His grandson scares away any customer that enters the shop, the people perceive him as a scammer because a product as good as his cannot be real, and they even have his name misspelled in the sign of his store. Luckily for him, he just hired the right underage 40-something-year-old teenager to fix it all :LOL:. (I never thought that sentence to be possible, but I guess that's the magic of this game).
 

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Ok, this could all be nothing or have a story behind it that I am not aware of, but is Gao's name misspelled in the sign of HIS shop?

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At first I thought that Guo might be Cain's father and Gao's son, but considering that Gao is the one who makes all the potions in the shop and that he calls the store HIS life's work, I doubt that that's the case. And if Guo was Gao's father, then I am surprised that they had modern signs that many decades ago or that they kept the name despite the changes in generations.

I think they misspelled Gao's name, though I have no proof, but if they really did, then I feel really sorry for Grampa here.
His grandson scares away any customer that enters the shop, the people perceive him as a scammer because a product as good as his cannot be real, and they even have his name misspelled in the sign of his store. Luckily for him, he just hired the right underage 40-something-year-old teenager to fix it all :LOL:. (I never thought that sentence to be possible, but I guess that's the magic of this game).
Why, Gao is Guo's son, they worked together on this shop, and when Guo died of natural causes, and Gao's son (if he has a son at all!) did not want to do his father's business - Gao left the name as a tribute to tradition and preservation of a recognisable brand. Moreover, changing the name of a legal entity is such a bureaucratic and costly endeavour. So there's nothing surprising. And to renew the signboard is a simple matter (with the preservation of the name).
But if it is a typo, I am surprised that BaiBai missed it in many places, because he is so pedantic (like all Germans).
 

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I hope there is more content about the other girls, for example Abigail and Catherine, if not, when will there be more content? Above all, every year there are two days that the story advances a little more or that there are events at school. Professor Clements is not a main character and has more content than a main character.
 

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will the next update involve Cathrine?
I hope there is more content about the other girls, for example Abigail and Catherine, if not, when will there be more content? Above all, every year there are two days that the story advances a little more or that there are events at school. Professor Clements is not a main character and has more content than a main character.
if you follow what Baibai says every week or what he gave in previews then yes there are moments planned with abigail and cathrine. Will there be sex? With abigail I don't think it will be the second meeting, unless she decides to annoy her mother, for cathrine, things have already progressed a bit (especially in the corruption path) so it's quite possible (but not sure) that something lewd is planned.
 
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if you follow what Baibai says every week or what he gave in previews then yes there are moments planned with abigail and cathrine. Will there be sex? With abigail I don't think it will be the second meeting, unless she decides to annoy her mother, for cathrine, things have already progressed a bit (especially in the corruption path) so it's quite possible (but not sure) that something lewd is planned.
Yeah, baibai also said that this update will have a lot of lewd content, so I would bet something happens with corruption cathrine. She's probably gonna make progress on the seduction route too, but I don't think it'll turn sexual yet. She's going to be very impressed that mcs relationship with viki just did a u-turn over the weekend. I think her big moment in seduction route will be when they're all baking together for the festival.
Who knows what will happen with abigail, mc sure knows how to push things pretty far pretty fast with clemens women.
 
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Yeah, baibai also said that this update will have a lot of lewd content, so I would bet something happens with corruption cathrine. She's probably gonna make progress on the seduction route too, but I don't think it'll turn sexual yet. She's going to be very impressed that mcs relationship with viki just did a u-turn over the weekend. I think her big moment in seduction route will be when they're all baking together for the festival.
Who knows what will happen with abigail, mc sure knows how to push things pretty far pretty fast with clemens women.
Yes broder I understand the game is very good it has animations and moments what I'm getting at is that there should be content at night for example going to the park going to the movies it only focuses on school and home I don't ask for it to be sandboxed and to detonate Catherine well you're going to have to wait 2 to 3 years how is the update going on Saturday I think it was for MC and Sthepy to make cakes with Catherine at Aiden's house and that's why I said that Baibai should bring the game a year to have 4 days in the game so the story progresses and for subscribers you should upload renders and previews of how the day will be
 
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Updated 'proofread' with day 3 & 4 at Original post
SERIOUSLY???, ¿Why didn't anyone here told me that there was someone already doing this even after I posted multiple times about it? ¿and why couldn't I find you when I look for proofreading in the search bar? What have I been changing the text for...

Well, whatever. I'm sure you must have made a better job that I'm doing anyway since I'm not native english speaker and was just changing the most glaring typos while trying to touch the structure of the sentences as little as possible. I even looked up at google forums and AI and if they said "the sentence is correct grammatically but could be improve" or something like that I left it unchange since I didn't want to mess with baibai's style of writting and "grammatically correct" was enough for me. I also tried not to touch punctuation.

The only difference is that I am keeping track of every change I made in a notepad, so I do have a changelog. But it was more of a list with the before and after in case I regretted any changes, so I knew exactly what to look for, or in case I lost the modified files and needed to redo the changes.

Since you exist, I don't have to care much anymore, I'll just keep doing my changes at my peace without having to worry to much about if I am making things better or worse, I'm not uploading it here anyways since someone else already is.

Although I have to say, if you compare my posts with yours, it's terrifying how similar we seem to think. ¿Do doppelgangers really exist?

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P.S, I'll check your changes to compare them with mine, if you also make the changes like me, then you'll save me some trouble. If not, then I'll just keep going my own way.

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Edit: Only played a little bit of your proofread but you did a metric shit ton more changes than I did. You definitely did better than me, but some of your changes I don't really know why you made them.

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And I think I found in 10 minutes a couple of typos of your own.

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But what do I know, you're clearly better than me at this.

Although You really seem to hate non abbreviated words since you changed every single instance of things like "I will" to "I'll", or "You have", to "you've".
 
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Yes broder I understand the game is very good it has animations and moments what I'm getting at is that there should be content at night for example going to the park going to the movies it only focuses on school and home I don't ask for it to be sandboxed and to detonate Catherine well you're going to have to wait 2 to 3 years how is the update going on Saturday I think it was for MC and Sthepy to make cakes with Catherine at Aiden's house and that's why I said that Baibai should bring the game a year to have 4 days in the game so the story progresses and for subscribers you should upload renders and previews of how the day will be
So you want each day to have more content with the mc also doing more stuff at night, but you also want the dev to crank out days twice as fast as the current pace. I do not think that will work.
Personally I am fine with waiting. I'm not chomping at the bits to get to any particular point as fast as possible. What makes this game special imo, are the interesting and varied characters that go through character development at satisfying pace. Rushing out more content would just ruin that.
 

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My posts come up on the first page when I search, but I don't know if those results are skewed cus they're my posts. (I just noticed that you typed 'proofreadING' so that might be why) I'm just posting these since I'm doing them anyway, pretty cool though if ppl enjoy them. I completely abandoned doing a change list cus it took too long. I'm already going through everything in the text file and then another time in-game. Whether my changes are good or not is up to you, but if you find anything wrong feel free to say so. The game's great, and going through it again while really paying attention to the text and renders (uh-oh) has been really enjoyable.

Edit: To answer your examples:
Everything will be different -> Everything changes (I've been taught that English is an 'economical' language. If you can say something with two words, why say it with four? Baibai made no mistakes here, I'm simply cutting down on words)

Case 1: I removed the 'are' here because this sentence reads better (in my head) if it's a continuation of the previous one. I probably should've removed the 'And' as well. You can easily keep both 'are' & 'and', they aren't mistakes.

Case 2: Nice catch. I wanted to add a dot to split up a very long sentence, but probably didn't read it through after I had done so. I've added 'and' & removed the comma in its place. (also removed the 'And' at the start)

The reason why I'm contracting a lot of words is because it 'flows' better when reading. When I read I read aloud in my head, and contractions help make things smoother. The difference between "I've done it" & "I have done it" is that, when I read it, I place stress on the "have". Like " I HAVE done it, you just didn't notice". I try to contract most words to make sentences shorter or keep a nice pace of reading. The fact you're taking time to go through the text and asking about it is awesome, and thanks for catching my mistake. I know a lot of the changes are unnecessary, but as I said in my original post, I'm just doing this for my own sake. I find it very difficult to keep myself in check, so if some of the changes are too much please tell me. Thanks again.
 
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