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Could I pretty please get a link: https://f95zone.to/threads/unexpected-v0-1-1-xpected.71602/post-6638748
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Since this project is still somewhat new and might improve I figured I'd rather give my 2(0000) cents here, than add a low review rating only for the game to improve in a couple updates:
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Hey i have not played the latest version, i have a question if you can answer (in spoiler tag of course like i will ask in spoiler tag too) about something that might push me to stop playing the game.
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Music and sound effects are very important to me. I try to place it as well as I can. At the same time, P spends a lot of time with scenes. He is always trying his best to do better. We will achieve great things together.
Frankly, we decided to change them.
Thank you very much for the opinions and explanations. I've worked on a few retrospective things. In this process, I have added most of the things you have already mentioned. And I'm adding more. We are at the very beginning of our game. And our training and warming process took a very long time. We wanted to release the game immediately. And got used to these during this training process and we became unable to see the mistakes. But your good and constructive comments are very important to us. We strive to do our best and we will continue to do so.
Your foresight looks really good...
This section has developed quite rapidly. I can say that I learned at the last moment that we had to do it. We will fix this. You can be sure.
Shay has a unique and reckless personality. We tried to make it look neither too careless nor too sweet. But I guess we didn't quite succeed. We will take a look at the dialogues on the scenes again.
Don't lose your feelings...
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Thinking about starting this game. I like aspects of the premise, and one of the girls is a favorite already..... so do you guys know if you can steal the stuff for yourself? Personally I wouldn't screw over dad from the looks of it but I am just curious if the rationale makes sense? I have started so many games just to delete them when the story is torqued.
Thanks in advance for advice on this game
Peace
Thanks in advance for advice on this game
Peace
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I'm so confused and my eyes hurt*.
Let's skip the part where something unclear in 2044 happens a day before 2022.
There's a scene with Sharon &/or Noora on an airplane that just keeps reusing the same images over and over, but one time it cuts to what appears to be the MC talking to some other character along a walking path near the water at night, but then it goes back to the airplane with Sharon/Noora who seems to be just walking to her seat before the earlier part of the scene where she was sitting down and by the time they get off the airplane and go for coffee (or not) I had lost any thread of what the plot was or who the characters are.
Which character was it that got serum-X and is insane, has supernatural powers, and is locked inside a house never able to get out again? That's what playing this game felt like.
*I don't mean the renders are ugly. They're quite pretty. I mean they literally hurt because of the sharp contrast between SUPER BRIGHT and incredibly dark and trying to read the text.
Let's skip the part where something unclear in 2044 happens a day before 2022.
There's a scene with Sharon &/or Noora on an airplane that just keeps reusing the same images over and over, but one time it cuts to what appears to be the MC talking to some other character along a walking path near the water at night, but then it goes back to the airplane with Sharon/Noora who seems to be just walking to her seat before the earlier part of the scene where she was sitting down and by the time they get off the airplane and go for coffee (or not) I had lost any thread of what the plot was or who the characters are.
Which character was it that got serum-X and is insane, has supernatural powers, and is locked inside a house never able to get out again? That's what playing this game felt like.
*I don't mean the renders are ugly. They're quite pretty. I mean they literally hurt because of the sharp contrast between SUPER BRIGHT and incredibly dark and trying to read the text.
I was thinking of leaving a big comment with some constructive criticisms, but you pretty much covered everything.
The first release absolutely left an impression on me. That's more than could be said about the vast majority of games that drop with essentially no plot hook to get players interested. So good job. Not everything is perfect. In fact, there is a lot that could be improved, mostly on the writing side. The English could really use a make over. That is the bare minimum though. I agree that the script and the narrative structure itself needs some work. I felt the same way about the intro. I think it could have been more focused, cutting out the sibling stuff. Maybe it's just me, but it was also a little bit confusing when it showed 2044. I have some guesses, but the significance of that 2044 scene is a bit unclear.
Some other things that I felt was a bit weak. Noora's Q&A session was rather boring and unnatural. Presumably, these 2 are quite close already. Close enough for the MC to reveal the entire plan and situation to. Having an interview style dialogue chain is kind of out of place. The relevant bits of information revealed through this exchange could happen in a more natural conversation.
I personally like male dom in scenes. In fact, I kinda need some male dom vibes to even fap lol. That said, it was really sudden and unexpected when he started the male dom talks because the MC acted like a typical hero complex guy so far. A generally good person could be dominating in bed, sure, but it will certainly feel a bit out of place if this aspect of MC's personality is never addressed.
One thing I felt while playing this was that the MC was a bit out of his element. Sharon is the one running the whole thing. He just stole the most sensitive data, but he doesn't know what to do with this. He doesn't have connections of his own. He doesn't have a plan. He is sitting around for instructions from his mom. He seems way too loose with the fact that he betrayed his father, telling his secretary and driver pretty much everything without question. Perhaps this is intentional. It's still very early in the story, and maybe the intent is to show him growing into a more competent person at the center of a huge conspiracy or something.
If there is one advice I could give when writing a story with a serious and urgent subject matter at it's core, it would be to keep this core plot as the focus in which most other events revolve around.
Having an actual editor or writing consultant look over the script might help... but I suppose only the most serious devs even consider something like that. It's still interesting enough to play, but I think most of us giving criticism are considering the potential this game could reach if the script was handled with more finesse. Good luck.
edit: wait I did end up leaving a big comment lol.
By the way, this was something that confused me greatly as well. I don't know how many other people had the same impression as me and L7Bear, but it honestly looks like the MC is talking to Noora instead of talking on the phone with Sharon. I really thought that this was some kind of crazy sci-fi tech, where Sharon is wirelessly connected to Noora and is talking through her. My first read on the situation was that Noora was some type of sleeper agent who doesn't even know that she is being manipulated by Sharon and MC. She is moving her mouth and generally being animated during the scene like she was talking. Then we hear the click of the phone hanging up, but I mistook it to be like logging out of Noora's mind, because at that moment Noora is looking down and acting like she is "offline." Then she looks up again is confused what is going on. There is multiple zoom ins into her boobs for no apparent reason. I thought there must be a reason for these zoom ins other than just "boobs," so I focused on her red pendant. I thought this was some kind of device being used to hack into her mind... or something like that lol. I was waiting for this plot point to come up again, but it never did lol. I actually thought this was the case for the whole game, until I went back and reread some of the intro scenes when writing my earlier post.
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I appreciate you altering the sex scene but it was pretty rude of the mc to talk back to me when I told him to cum in her. 
Hi dev(s), you got a bug here:
you've mixed up boolean values with string
and vice versa
you've mixed up boolean values with string
and vice versa
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That whole thing was hilarious judging from Noora's facial expressions it looked she had a vibrator in her cooch and was trying to be as discreet as she could.
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Very average game so far. Story might be interesting, renders are surely good, the UI is very nice and also the sound department.
The writing though it's pretty bad, most of the times characters shout each other exposition, too much of it, that's overwhelming and boring, they often laugh like someone made a joke, except no one did, that's creepy.
There are a lot of useless transitions like "5 minutes later", "10 minutes later" when the time jump is so short I guess there's no really need to point it out, I guess this relate to how the dev deals with exposition..
The characters so far are not very interesting or well written, there's the caricatural Frankie, which I think is always a cheap and lazy choice. Another lazy choice is the fact that we can read the other characters thoughts, again see the laziest way to deal with exposition.
Lastly characters facial expressions really fail to deliver emotions, another thing that can improve.
Anyway I hope it gets better 'cause I think there's definitely potential in it, and the dev show passion and care.
The writing though it's pretty bad, most of the times characters shout each other exposition, too much of it, that's overwhelming and boring, they often laugh like someone made a joke, except no one did, that's creepy.
There are a lot of useless transitions like "5 minutes later", "10 minutes later" when the time jump is so short I guess there's no really need to point it out, I guess this relate to how the dev deals with exposition..
The characters so far are not very interesting or well written, there's the caricatural Frankie, which I think is always a cheap and lazy choice. Another lazy choice is the fact that we can read the other characters thoughts, again see the laziest way to deal with exposition.
Lastly characters facial expressions really fail to deliver emotions, another thing that can improve.
Anyway I hope it gets better 'cause I think there's definitely potential in it, and the dev show passion and care.
Something feels wrong with the Pacing and as people has said the writing needs a lot of work.
not only writing...demo was bad....redone domo alias " first update" was bad to, and now there will be redone of first update....at least they r advertising xera games so there is some good in this "game"
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THIS VN needs to be translated into English.
Enough said.
Enough said.
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