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Destroyed?? You mean, utterly and completely??
I was honestly worried that people wouldn't HATE him ENOUGH when I created him; all of my usual "bad guy" characters (like DeSole in my Ebon Knight's novel) are usually characters that people can sort of identify with or, at least, under the thought processes that drive them to do the things that they do.
It would seem that I was, apparently, worrying for nothing... because everyone seems to want to see the little bastard skinned alive and castrated!! x'D
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Can't identify with DeSole either He's a prick! And I always knocked the shit out of guys like that
He's a prick! And I always knocked the shit out of guys like that 
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Thanks for the heads up everyone! Glad to hear this dev team have their act together. It's such a refreshing change of pace from a lot of the other teams on here who release updates that love to break saves and have new things tossed in all over the game that cause you to have to go back over old stuff again before you often really want to.
Yeah, well, I can't disagree with you there...Can't identify with DeSole either
A lot of that is thanks to the skills of @Palanto Games and our dedication to testing our stuff, @uradamus, rather than relying on our patrons who pay good hard earned cash for the game to test it for us.
An occasional screw up still happens now and then, but we are quick to fix and are attentive to our product and the people who support us. 
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Yeah you were very lucky ASLPRO, Palanto liked your project and game after seeing the start. Just ask Veqvil from Love and Submission penedeyewink:.
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And we don't forget his mother too
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Just wait till I had a little very rough fun with Mommy Uncle, no fun when she has no skin left and so messy. :biggrin: After that she is all yours. :evilsmile:
Destroyed?? You mean, utterly and completely??
I was honestly worried that people wouldn't HATE him ENOUGH when I created him; all of my usual "bad guy" characters (like DeSole in my Ebon Knight's novel) are usually characters that people can sort of identify with or, at least, under the thought processes that drive them to do the things that they do.
It would seem that I was, apparently, worrying for nothing... because everyone seems to want to see the little bastard skinned alive and castrated!! x'D
I mean like I want to kill him slowly over the course of a week. While having a horse rape him daily.
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We at least try, well stuff like that can happen in a game that's being worked on
But yeah we try to do it so it doesn't happen, or so it can be fixed in the savegames before they get loaded. A lot of that is thanks to the skills of @Palanto Games and our dedication to testing our stuff, @uradamus, rather than relying on our patrons who pay good hard earned cash for the game to test it for us.
Yep like the screw up where everyone had to begin a new game because I defined all variables wrong from the first day I started to program for you :-\ Weeeelll won't happen again... at least not that particular problem
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Just finished the prologue. It's a good start; I really enjoyed Claire. The ending got me excited to see what is going on with the parallel fantasy world and who was filming and what their intentions are. There are however a few areas I think could use some work.
While the renders are quite nice over all, one big flaw is that you went a bit overboard with the SSS (subsurface scattering). MC's penis looks rather waxy, as it is letting entirely too much light pass through. Something else I think might be related to this is that Claire's mouth looked like it was glowing from the inside, probably because the SSS was letting too much light right through her cheeks and likely the roof of her mouth. Also probably related to this - the parts of their skin that should have been in pretty deep shadow were often still way brighter than their surrounding. For example, when Claire was laying on the table with her back arched the table top below her is near black, but her back was way brighter despite being only inches away. This tells me that a lot of light was managing to penetrate through her body in an unnatural way.
The story was good, it kept me interested and was well paced, but there was plenty of awkward wording. It is far from the worst I've seen, but it could really do with an additional editing pass. There were no obvious spelling mistakes and the grammar was technically correct for the most part - it mostly came down to a few archaic word choices and some odd sentence structuring that would break the flow that caused me to stop and reread sections a few times to make sure I was understanding it properly.
There were only two real errors in the text that I found:
- Or finding moments to causually lean against me, like she was departing some deep dark secret to me...
* "Departing" should probably be "imparting."
- Claire - "Mmmm... it much bigger than I imagined!"
* "It" should be "it's."
Overall though, this was a fairly high quality offering for an indie eroge. I'm really enjoying it so far and looking forward to continuing with the story.
While the renders are quite nice over all, one big flaw is that you went a bit overboard with the SSS (subsurface scattering). MC's penis looks rather waxy, as it is letting entirely too much light pass through. Something else I think might be related to this is that Claire's mouth looked like it was glowing from the inside, probably because the SSS was letting too much light right through her cheeks and likely the roof of her mouth. Also probably related to this - the parts of their skin that should have been in pretty deep shadow were often still way brighter than their surrounding. For example, when Claire was laying on the table with her back arched the table top below her is near black, but her back was way brighter despite being only inches away. This tells me that a lot of light was managing to penetrate through her body in an unnatural way.
The story was good, it kept me interested and was well paced, but there was plenty of awkward wording. It is far from the worst I've seen, but it could really do with an additional editing pass. There were no obvious spelling mistakes and the grammar was technically correct for the most part - it mostly came down to a few archaic word choices and some odd sentence structuring that would break the flow that caused me to stop and reread sections a few times to make sure I was understanding it properly.
There were only two real errors in the text that I found:
- Or finding moments to causually lean against me, like she was departing some deep dark secret to me...
* "Departing" should probably be "imparting."
- Claire - "Mmmm... it much bigger than I imagined!"
* "It" should be "it's."
Overall though, this was a fairly high quality offering for an indie eroge. I'm really enjoying it so far and looking forward to continuing with the story.
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@ASLPro3D , my friend, have you renew your jurassic golden member card as i did lately...hahaha :evilsmile:
EDIT: quite a good post he made, btw !!! Constructive and positive !
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That is one of the problems when you get a bit less young, some of your word choices start to differ from the younger generations yeah. But Jurassic?, ASLPRO should have a few days left before he needs that. :biggrin:
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Working aside few youngster (barely 20y for the most), past 40 you are a grandpa to their eyes...almost if they ask me if i knew the time of the black and white tv !! technically yes, but wtf i was a baby..lol
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Guess how bad that is for people who do remember the time when color TV was invented We were no different though at that age, remember thinking some teachers in their early thirties were ancient at school ( I guess they were a bit stuffy though:evilsmile::evilsmile
We were no different though at that age, remember thinking some teachers in their early thirties were ancient at school ( I guess they were a bit stuffy though:evilsmile::evilsmile
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Heh, I'm not really a spring chicken anymore myself (late 30s here). I had a b&w TV that used twist knobs to change the channels when I was a kid, lol. Anyhow, one example of what I was talking about was the use of the word traverse in its noun form. You really don't ever see anyone using that, outside of maybe mountaineers or perhaps lawyers on rare occasions. It isn't technically wrong the way it was used, it just made me do a double take and think there were plenty of better ways of wording it.
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No worries, we are not attacking your observations. They are worthwhile feedback I would think for Jack, just it is something we all run across, as we get older we sometimes use words in a meaning younger people are not always used to hearing or reading anymore. :biggrin:
Edit: Besides we do like to tease ASLPRO sometimes a bit in return for all the teasing he does of us when gets the chance. :angel:
Edit: Besides we do like to tease ASLPRO sometimes a bit in return for all the teasing he does of us when gets the chance. :angel:
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Hehe, don't worry i just "jumped" on the topic to make jokes and mock friends about aging, subject i know well
.About the writing, i won't coz i can't say a word (not my native language, no need to say..) and i'm sure it will be interesting to follow your exchange with the author, you seems to have some valid points and a trully sincere constructive/positive attitude so...critics with solid arguments are always a good thing !
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Yep, can't say much about the art or writing...
But I'll fix the "it's" and wait for @ASLPro3D about the departing / imparting thing. Anyways, I'm trying to proofread everything @ASLPro3D hands me, but I'm just a german so I won't find everything. I try but sometimes the mistakes just slip me by when I'm reading the whole script for each chapter in one go. So we already got a friendly fan who is helping in that part, but even two people can't find every little thing! What I really want to say is, it's always good if you find something and report it, this way we can fix it. Thanks for that!!