VN Ren'Py World's Crossing Academy [v1.2.2.2] [TeamEmberWings]

[VictorSeven]

Depending on how long River is going to prefer phonetexts to normal talking, the old texts system would have really been poison for the interaction. I expect no troubles with that when the texting system is improved.

Welp, I may simply be getting on in age and misremember which game/green short-stack qt had what scenes then.
I was so damn sure that I remember some guntoting wildwest-dressed goblin dance animation, and that one at least didn't play. Sorry in case that is just my mental mix-up, I blame too much VN consumption.


Guess the only "solutions" to not getting overwhelmed with that are keeping a spreadsheet with prior decisions, use of emergency fallbacks and developing good variable-naming habits.

Besides, keeping it kinetic does not have to be anything bad.
IMO just work as you feel comfortable, but also do not worry too much about simply giving smaller branching a bit of a shot.

Honestly I just have to get better at coding. I hate to say it but I'm still very much an amateur at Ren'py as a whole. I do have a meaningful, outcome-changing choice in the next patch, and ideas for a few more once the Security arc starts. Just gotta Git Gud and I SUCK at coding more than basic stuff.

I think once I have the Optional Stories system in place, I'll feel more comfortable, because that's when you'll get to interact with the T5 Creator Patreon girls, and their stories will be much shorter than the girls in the main game. That'll make their branches much easier to manage and might be a good solution to this feeling of a player's choices not mattering.

 

[cavebear]

I WANT MY NOOKIE, NOOKIE BACK.

sorry to hear about the last year my man, hopefully you and the rest of your family are doing good despite all the bad. i missed this game and am happy with what you were able to get us in this update.
take the time you need to grieve your losses and we, your fans will be here waiting for you to get back into the grove of things.

 

[jhustrue]

Oof, placeholders... I don't think I've ever seen that in a honey select visual novel... Maybe a heads up in the changelog or something?

 

[Wafflewaffuru]

Also make sure you play all the way through and do the user survey!

 

[BFC 78]

VictorSeven my heart goes out to you and your family and take all the time that you need it understandable and right now being with your family is more important and I say to you they still live on in your heart and they will always be a part of you and so on a lighter note you are one hell of a writer I'm actually worried about poor Nook and oh shit it dawned on me if Nook has the a magic equivalent of a key to princess Tilai pocket dimension oh no is princess Tilai trapped in there? I'm worried about those two and they're not even real that's why I think you are one hell of a writer and I'm so emotionally attached to all the girls in world's crossing academy and yes also BatShit crazy stalker I mean Cecillia she just needs a little bit of therapy okay okay a lot of therapy keep and her away from large sharp objects

 

[VictorSeven]

Oof, placeholders... I don't think I've ever seen that in a honey select visual novel... Maybe a heads up in the changelog or something?

I made several posts about family tragedies and the suicide in my community posts before I released the update, both on Itch and here in this forum. I used placeholders because these poor people have been waiting since November for an update and I couldn't bring myself to make H-scenes. I will be filling those in soon. I appreciate your patience and understanding. I know it's not a standard thing.

VictorSeven my heart goes out to you and your family and take all the time that you need it understandable and right now being with your family is more important and I say to you they still live on in your heart and they will always be a part of you and so on a lighter note you are one hell of a writer I'm actually worried about poor Nook and oh shit it dawned on me if Nook has the a magic equivalent of a key to princess Tilai pocket dimension oh no is princess Tilai trapped in there? I'm worried about those two and they're not even real that's why I think you are one hell of a writer and I'm so emotionally attached to all the girls in world's crossing academy and yes also BatShit crazy stalker I mean Cecillia she just needs a little bit of therapy okay okay a lot of therapy keep and her away from large sharp objects

Hey, thank you so much for your kind words. Don't worry. We'll be getting back to the goblins soon (next content update)

 

[bobdillan]

Oh, no my friend. NEVER NTR. Never. I don't want to doom my game lol

This makes me quite happy.

 

[HeavenKim]

aww~ No H-scene? guess I'll continue playing my heavily adult modded FO4 till next update then, keep up the great work Dev, take great care and stay healthy!

 

[VictorSeven]

aww~ No H-scene? guess I'll continue playing my heavily adult modded FO4 till next update then, keep up the great work Dev, take great care and stay healthy!

Yes, sorry, I had some severe IRL stuff going on and I couldn't bring myself to do the scenes. I pushed the update out because the fans of the game have been waiting nearly half a year for more story. I'll have them done relatively soon. Thank you for your patience. The build with the H-scenes and the sped-up text system will be 0.1.5.6, so look for that number when the update comes out.

 

[VictorSeven]

I do have a question. I keep seeing remarks about how the "visual quality isn't the best." I'd like to know what perspective this is coming from, 'cause I did my best to use advanced skin textures and work on my lighting and renders. Are those that say this partial to DAZ-made games rather than Ai Shoujo/Honey Select games? What games do you prefer, and what visual style do you find more attractive? What can I do to improve the visual quality of this game? Or am I kind of stuck due to the engine I chose to use? Really interested in this as it seems to be a weakness of the game despite the effort I've put into it.

Could it be the compression? To keep the file size down, I convert all images to .webp with a 90% quality retention using a Google extension, then rename them with a bulk renamer into .png files again. I still have all of the original png files; is there a better way to compress them and save space without sacrificing quality? Reconverting and replacing all the images in the game would probably only take me about a week, so if that's an option and it makes the game better, I could absolutely do that.

Or perhaps it's because I'm using GraphicsMod for the scene renders, whereas I normally use DHH lighting for my Pinups, which looks much better but can't be used on some maps because of a render path glitch. Any thoughts or insight on this would be most helpful.

 

[archdude]

Just completed all available content and wanna share my thoughts. These will be mostly focusing on negatives, not because i didn't like the game, but because I'm ok with good parts.

First things that I wanna mention is font. I don't know why you chose font you did, but it is very ill suited for reading: its too narrow, strains my eyes and doesn't even look good at all. Had to force dejavu sans and resize it a little in menu to make things readable.

Then there is brightness problem, game's average brightness is way too low, I wish there would be gamma slider in main menu, because I adjusted my monitor settings once and don't wanna change them ever. Some scenes are so dark that I have trouble telling what's going on, like that h-scene in pocket dimension.

Orc lady doesn't look orc at all to me. She looks like oversized green asian girl. I believe it is too late to do something with her look, just wanted to share this impression. First i thought that this Honey Select engine is too limiting, so i shouldn't even pay attention to drawbacks like that, but you actually managed to impress me with it: you made headmistresses face look actually old (props with that, other game devs just stick default babyfaces on characters that are supposed to look old and it looks uncanny), elf girl and goblins also looks interesting and not so human, goliath girl also looks fine, and Jade genuinely impressed me with muscle definition on her body. So orc lady stands out in a bad way comparing to them all.

Writing is fantastic in this game, and I actually read it instead of skimming which rarely happens in porn games, but I wanna bring your attention to 2 details:
1. Giant space frogs kidnap your goblin gf right in a middle of beach episode (w8 what?), then you wake up and continue living as usual, like it never happened right up until it is casually mentioned in dialogue that those frogs were actually apocalyptic threat and will bring doom upon this world (w8 what again?) but no one gives two f*cks about this new information including MC who keeps being occupied with getting phone numbers from his new monster girl friends. Whole this spacefrog thing is so out of place, so comical, leads to such plot inconsistency that it completely baffled me with how much it sticks out like a sore thumb, just like worst cases of "deus ex machina" plot devices. I still fail to see a purpose for it, is it cause previous drama with stalker girl and 10 y.o. unsolved case wears thin, and you need new threat to keep things going, or you just needed to shift focus from overwhelmingly popular (according to polls) goblin girls to give other cast some screen time, idk, but it definitely could be done much better.

2. Plot loses its sharpness overtime. It isn't immediately noticeable, but i remember like at the beginning there was intense plot tension with stalker affair and unsolved crime case, but overtime attention shits to run-of-a-mill harem simulator, where MC desperately struggles to be nicest person possible to everyone and solve everyone's problems so his harem could expand with new chicks. Even when MC wakes up and plans what he has to do over a day, intense investigation stuff is not even on agenda anymore, he literally plans how to hook up more girls by being nice to them, and that's all.
I'd say you need to bring some plot tension back on track, and I sure hope this won't be space frogs...

 

[VictorSeven]

Just completed all available content and wanna share my thoughts. These will be mostly focusing on negatives, not because i didn't like the game, but because I'm ok with good parts.

First things that I wanna mention is font. I don't know why you chose font you did, but it is very ill suited for reading: its too narrow, strains my eyes and doesn't even look good at all. Had to force dejavu sans and resize it a little in menu to make things readable.

Then there is brightness problem, game's average brightness is way too low, I wish there would be gamma slider in main menu, because I adjusted my monitor settings once and don't wanna change them ever. Some scenes are so dark that I have trouble telling what's going on, like that h-scene in pocket dimension.

Orc lady doesn't look orc at all to me. She looks like oversized green asian girl. I believe it is too late to do something with her look, just wanted to share this impression. First i thought that this Honey Select engine is too limiting, so i shouldn't even pay attention to drawbacks like that, but you actually managed to impress me with it: you made headmistresses face look actually old (props with that, other game devs just stick default babyfaces on characters that are supposed to look old and it looks uncanny), elf girl and goblins also looks interesting and not so human, goliath girl also looks fine, and Jade genuinely impressed me with muscle definition on her body. So orc lady stands out in a bad way comparing to them all.

Writing is fantastic in this game, and I actually read it instead of skimming which rarely happens in porn games, but I wanna bring your attention to 2 details:
1. Giant space frogs kidnap your goblin gf right in a middle of beach episode (w8 what?), then you wake up and continue living as usual, like it never happened right up until it is casually mentioned in dialogue that those frogs were actually apocalyptic threat and will bring doom upon this world (w8 what again?) but no one gives two f*cks about this new information including MC who keeps being occupied with getting phone numbers from his new monster girl friends. Whole this spacefrog thing is so out of place, so comical, leads to such plot inconsistency that it completely baffled me with how much it sticks out like a sore thumb, just like worst cases of "deus ex machina" plot devices. I still fail to see a purpose for it, is it cause previous drama with stalker girl and 10 y.o. unsolved case wears thin, and you need new threat to keep things going, or you just needed to shift focus from overwhelmingly popular (according to polls) goblin girls to give other cast some screen time, idk, but it definitely could be done much better.

2. Plot loses its sharpness overtime. It isn't immediately noticeable, but i remember like at the beginning there was intense plot tension with stalker affair and unsolved crime case, but overtime attention shits to run-of-a-mill harem simulator, where MC desperately struggles to be nicest person possible to everyone and solve everyone's problems so his harem could expand with new chicks. Even when MC wakes up and plans what he has to do over a day, intense investigation stuff is not even on agenda anymore, he literally plans how to hook up more girls by being nice to them, and that's all.
I'd say you need to bring some plot tension back on track, and I sure hope this won't be space frogs...

Hmm. You make good points. A lot of the stuff I've been putting in is supposed to lead up to a climactic event in the next patch, which sets up the reason for the transition to the Security Arc. I thought I was referencing Nook's disappearance enough in the mornings, but maybe I wasn't showcasing it well enough? Aurum cares intensely about this issue, but also knows there's nothing he can do about it at present. This surfaces in the conversation with Jade in the newest update.

The issue with the Marbog (your aforementioned "space frogs") was designed to create questions and that WTF feeling, and I was going to answer some of those questions in the next update. It has a lot to do with that sand-covered hatch Aurum found and reported to Ember, and many of the answers to this lie down there.

This is honestly an interesting take on the story as a whole, and I'd like to know what you would suggest that would keep the narrative tension going a little bit better. Obviously I failed to convey the import of the story events (Nook's disappearance, the investigation of Ms. Clements' family, the Marbog threat) well enough to keep that going if you're feeling the way you do about it. Perhaps I could add a scene after each Evening scene where, after checking his phone, he goes out to the beach to look for her. Every single night. Maybe add some non-Aurum scenes where Ember is researching Ms.Clements' case and making notes. I'd love to know what you would suggest, because the LAST thing I want this to be is anything "run-of-the-mill." I want this project to stand out and shine. Looking forward to your feedback, and anyone else's for that matter.

 

[VictorSeven]

Orc lady doesn't look orc at all to me.

As far as Rukah goes, I'm on the fence about her. I design a lot of my characters to be Against-Type, which is to say atypical if you're not familiar with the term. Rukah is SUPPOSED to be an unnaturally fair orc. She's used to being by far the most attractive of her kind, none of which look anything like her. But now that she's in a world with all these, to her standards, gorgeous-looking humans and elves, she's begun to feel a bit manly and brutish in comparison, and that's where I kind of painted her story arc.

There are a lot of people who like Rukah, but from a design standpoint, she's the character I get the most complaints about visually. I wonder if creating another, more typical Orc girl might solve the issue with comparison (if I can find a Tusks mod within Ai Shoujo to really give her that Orc look), or if Rukah just needs a redesign. I'd have to reshoot all of her scenes again, but I don't think that would be too terrible, as she hasn't had a ton of screentime yet.

I'll probably try both. A new Orc girl that's a bit more typical (like below, if I can manage it) AND a redesign of Rukah, and put it to a vote. Any thoughts on this are welcome.

 

[Kuranai]

Hmm. You make good points. A lot of the stuff I've been putting in is supposed to lead up to a climactic event in the next patch, which sets up the reason for the transition to the Security Arc. I thought I was referencing Nook's disappearance enough in the mornings, but maybe I wasn't showcasing it well enough? Aurum cares intensely about this issue, but also knows there's nothing he can do about it at present. This surfaces in the conversation with Jade in the newest update.

The issue with the Marbog (your aforementioned "space frogs") was designed to create questions and that WTF feeling, and I was going to answer some of those questions in the next update. It has a lot to do with that sand-covered hatch Aurum found and reported to Ember, and many of the answers to this lie down there.

This is honestly an interesting take on the story as a whole, and I'd like to know what you would suggest that would keep the narrative tension going a little bit better. Obviously I failed to convey the import of the story events (Nook's disappearance, the investigation of Ms. Clements' family, the Marbog threat) well enough to keep that going if you're feeling the way you do about it. Perhaps I could add a scene after each Evening scene where, after checking his phone, he goes out to the beach to look for her. Every single night. Maybe add some non-Aurum scenes where Ember is researching Ms.Clements' case and making notes. I'd love to know what you would suggest, because the LAST thing I want this to be is anything "run-of-the-mill." I want this project to stand out and shine. Looking forward to your feedback, and anyone else's for that matter.

He could've gone to investigate the door right after they took her, iirc from last update he didn't get to fight one of them to see how he would fare against their numbers, then, after exhausting the possible approaches, assemble a search party immediately with the team and go after them, if they're a world level threat that would involve counter measures that would be way above what mc and the team he's with would be able to handle, that can be an issue for the scale of the plot.
Way to avoid this would be turning the pepes into a sort of small scale plague or something, they do affect some areas, but when that happens, it's open season on their population, or something like that.

I would prefer that and assembling a search and rescue team immediately after the fact, gotta strike while the iron is hot, good opportunity to impress the girls with some of MC's fighting skills, kill some froggos and whatnot, martial arts are for that imo.

 

[archdude]

Hmm. You make good points. A lot of the stuff I've been putting in is supposed to lead up to a climactic event in the next patch, which sets up the reason for the transition to the Security Arc. I thought I was referencing Nook's disappearance enough in the mornings, but maybe I wasn't showcasing it well enough? Aurum cares intensely about this issue, but also knows there's nothing he can do about it at present. This surfaces in the conversation with Jade in the newest update.

The issue with the Marbog (your aforementioned "space frogs") was designed to create questions and that WTF feeling, and I was going to answer some of those questions in the next update. It has a lot to do with that sand-covered hatch Aurum found and reported to Ember, and many of the answers to this lie down there.

This is honestly an interesting take on the story as a whole, and I'd like to know what you would suggest that would keep the narrative tension going a little bit better. Obviously I failed to convey the import of the story events (Nook's disappearance, the investigation of Ms. Clements' family, the Marbog threat) well enough to keep that going if you're feeling the way you do about it. Perhaps I could add a scene after each Evening scene where, after checking his phone, he goes out to the beach to look for her. Every single night. Maybe add some non-Aurum scenes where Ember is researching Ms.Clements' case and making notes. I'd love to know what you would suggest, because the LAST thing I want this to be is anything "run-of-the-mill." I want this project to stand out and shine. Looking forward to your feedback, and anyone else's for that matter.

I'm not sure you should be asking players advices how to build a plot, if you do that, you'll find that majority of players just wants more h-scenes, and then your game would swiftly deteriorate into smut fest like Trials in Tainted and such, where plot is there just for decency and all focus is on smut alone. You're a writer, you should know best how to build a proper story, and you probably do know, cause i sensed a lot of deliberate and preplanned events that should lead into further developments from the first half of story or so. But then it went out of focus little bit with all the girl branches that you need to maintain, all of them kinda overshadowed main story. How to help maintain tension you ask? I'm not a writer myself, but I'd imagine that you need to keep MC's intentions mainly on solving most important tasks at hand, while other, less important stuff happens meanwhile, like you go to do your investigation talks with Amber, and then remember: "oh, yeah, that girl also wanted me to do this and that, i can do that meanwhile", instead of just letting these events steal the spotlight.
My main gripe with Marbog thing is probably how it came out of nowhere, and after 3 seconds of screen time disappeared into nowhere again, while previous story branches that I thought were main story wasn't nearly concluded yet. If you'd ask me I'd much prefer if you stick with stalker branch and detective branch. But if you needed some mystical overwhelming story development, you could just advance with that book that you found in library and whole lost temple setup, or that cryptic mirror lady, cause there is already build up to this, just use it, it doesn't look out of place as much to me. Also level of stakes with Marbogs, oh man, you can't even fend off girl stalker, but here you need to be saving whole universe, what's up with that?

 

[Tavi13]

I do have a question. I keep seeing remarks about how the "visual quality isn't the best." I'd like to know what perspective this is coming from, 'cause I did my best to use advanced skin textures and work on my lighting and renders. Are those that say this partial to DAZ-made games rather than Ai Shoujo/Honey Select games? What games do you prefer..../snip....Any thoughts or insight on this would be most helpful.

I normally wouldn't go near this/these question(s) simply because I didn't understand 90% of what you said, but you did say any thoughts so.....
At a guess I would say a lot of the feedback regarding visual quality have to do with personal style preference. While I could point to a handful of HS games that I find visually stunning, I do tend to prefer Daz-types. I also have meet a lot of people here that feel the exact opposite.
I also wonder if it has to do with the graphic settings on whatever people are using to play on. For obvious reasons; I notice a huge visual differences when I am on my gaming rig, vs. when I am on my decrepit laptop.
Some of the lighting could be a bit better on the darker scenes, but again that might just be personal device settings.

No idea if that will help you in the slightest or not; it doesn't seem particularly helpful to me, but those are my (non-tech related) thoughts.

As far as Rukah goes, I'm on the fence about her. I design a lot of my characters to be Against-Type, which is to say atypical if you're not familiar with the term. Rukah is SUPPOSED to be an unnaturally fair orc. She's used to being by far the most attractive of her kind, none of which look anything like her. But now that she's in a world with all these, to her standards, gorgeous-looking humans and elves, she's begun to feel a bit manly and brutish in comparison, and that's where I kind of painted her story arc.

I like her design and think you did a good job of portraying her the way you intended, but a more "typical" orc-girl for comparison might be a good idea. Especially if it was one that knows her from home and can either tease, or comfort her, about not not being the most beautiful woman around anymore. That could help really hammer-home where you were going with her designs, even to the skim-readers.

 

[archdude]

As far as Rukah goes, I'm on the fence about her. I design a lot of my characters to be Against-Type, which is to say atypical if you're not familiar with the term. Rukah is SUPPOSED to be an unnaturally fair orc. She's used to being by far the most attractive of her kind, none of which look anything like her. But now that she's in a world with all these, to her standards, gorgeous-looking humans and elves, she's begun to feel a bit manly and brutish in comparison, and that's where I kind of painted her story arc.

There are a lot of people who like Rukah, but from a design standpoint, she's the character I get the most complaints about visually. I wonder if creating another, more typical Orc girl might solve the issue with comparison (if I can find a Tusks mod within Ai Shoujo to really give her that Orc look), or if Rukah just needs a redesign. I'd have to reshoot all of her scenes again, but I don't think that would be too terrible, as she hasn't had a ton of screentime yet.

I'll probably try both. A new Orc girl that's a bit more typical (like below, if I can manage it) AND a redesign of Rukah, and put it to a vote. Any thoughts on this are welcome.
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If you'd ask me, the less girls are human the better. Put some monster part into monster girls already.
This typical anime cliche: "boo-hoo, i'm such a monster, nobody will ever love me. Everyone just spits and wipes the feet on me." All coming from 10/10 beautiful catgirl or such. And then MC be like: "No worries, i would always love you, don't believe anyone - you're beautiful as you are" and then they kiss. All of this is getting seriously tiring. Anyone would think that catgirl is pretty, show me that one guy that would be like: "nah, she's not human means she's disgusting".
If someone would actually make some monster girl that would be more monster than girl then this setup would work and i'd be impressed. But so far its usually catgirls, vampires, succubi or elves that you need to look very close to see how come its even monster girl in first place.
Granted my position isn't popular and i doubt that most players would like to court some unsettling looking insect girl in porn game just because she has big heart, but i would : D
P.S. now that I think of it, there was one in your game - dwarf girl was seriously unsettling for me, she impersonates thing i hate most in porn - oppai loli, i may try my resolve on her : P

 

[I_Love_Latex]

I'm not sure you should be asking players advices how to build a plot, if you do that, you'll find that majority of players just wants more h-scenes, and then your game would swiftly deteriorate into smut fest like Trials in Tainted and such, where plot is there just for decency and all focus is on smut alone. You're a writer, you should know best how to build a proper story, and you probably do know, cause i sensed a lot of deliberate and preplanned events that should lead into further developments from the first half of story or so. But then it went out of focus little bit with all the girl branches that you need to maintain, all of them kinda overshadowed main story. How to help maintain tension you ask? I'm not a writer myself, but I'd imagine that you need to keep MC's intentions mainly on solving most important tasks at hand, while other, less important stuff happens meanwhile, like you go to do your investigation talks with Amber, and then remember: "oh, yeah, that girl also wanted me to do this and that, i can do that meanwhile", instead of just letting these events steal the spotlight.
My main gripe with Marbog thing is probably how it came out of nowhere, and after 3 seconds of screen time disappeared into nowhere again, while previous story branches that I thought were main story wasn't nearly concluded yet. If you'd ask me I'd much prefer if you stick with stalker branch and detective branch. But if you needed some mystical overwhelming story development, you could just advance with that book that you found in library and whole lost temple setup, or that cryptic mirror lady, cause there is already build up to this, just use it, it doesn't look out of place as much to me. Also level of stakes with Marbogs, oh man, you can't even fend off girl stalker, but here you need to be saving whole universe, what's up with that?

Going to agree 100% with you here, the introduction of the Marbogs really doesn't fit in with the story at all. Going by the description of the Marbogs and their level of threat, you (the dev) have basically introduced an Extinction Level Event to the world you have built, however it is being treated as just a minor inconvenience and way down the list of "shit that matters". A threat this serious should result in all other worlds making sure it can't spread, closing the Academy, sending the entire world into isolation. From there you have two options - the world is on its own, best of luck, we'll check in a few thousand years to see if you are OK or - immediate response, send in the Rapid Magical Response Force and wipe them out before it can spread. Either way the rest of the story doesn't matter. "Her kids are missing - the world is going to end, who cares?" "I have a crazy stalker - the world is going to end, who cares, yadda yadda yadda."

It is like after the Harpy incident - you wake up in the morning after being sucked unconscious by a cum-crazed harpy and you don't even take a moment to think "WTF has just happened, is my dick OK, what was that all about, is my dick OK, I have to tell someone, is my dick OK, I wonder if I can find her again, my dick is OK". No response to being kidnapped, sexually assaulted, rescued and dumped back in your bed. Even the goblin scene which hinted at something in the Harpy's saliva causing extended erections, no further mention of it.

Nook goes missing? "I hope she'll be OK, I mean I could go looking for her, I do know someone in security, I really like her, ach, I'm sure she will be fine. It's only the Marbog. Not as if THEY DESTROY FREAKING WORLDS!!!! Oh, a text. Must reply."

It just doesn't make sense, or fit in with the rest of your writing.

I'm really enjoying this AV, your writing is mainly on point, you have created some great characters, but personally I would go back and remove the fact the Marbog are world killers, make them magical mercenaries or something, they just don't fit as they are currently portrayed into what I would imagine you are trying to create with this world.

By the way, please feel free to completely ignore this, after all it is not my story to tell, it is yours, and end of the day that is all that matters

 

[TrapIsJustice]

Ey. No shaming. Only gaming. People like what they like and dislike what they dislike, and that's totally fine.


While I have the mods for it, I'm not sure how I'd work that into the story, nor how I would formulate which species are compatible with humans and which aren't. As the story is the main focus, I don't currently have any plans for pregnancy. That may change in the future, but for now, no.


I gotchu fam. Download the phone2.rpy file in the above post and slap it into game/phone (say Yes to the overwrite). Or edit the file yourself with the tutorial I provided above. Most likely gonna scrap this text system for another one.


Hey, thank you so much It's been rough, but the show must go on! I'm already balls-deep into the next update, and I'll be filling out the missing H-scenes soon as well. Y'all have been amazing and supportive.

First Based and red-pilled game dev in a while.
Loving the game and your responsiveness never stop <3

 

[archdude]

Going to agree 100% with you here, the introduction of the Marbogs really doesn't fit in with the story at all. Going by the description of the Marbogs and their level of threat, you (the dev) have basically introduced an Extinction Level Event to the world you have built, however it is being treated as just a minor inconvenience and way down the list of "shit that matters". A threat this serious should result in all other worlds making sure it can't spread, closing the Academy, sending the entire world into isolation. From there you have two options - the world is on its own, best of luck, we'll check in a few thousand years to see if you are OK or - immediate response, send in the Rapid Magical Response Force and wipe them out before it can spread. Either way the rest of the story doesn't matter. "Her kids are missing - the world is going to end, who cares?" "I have a crazy stalker - the world is going to end, who cares, yadda yadda yadda."

It is like after the Harpy incident - you wake up in the morning after being sucked unconscious by a cum-crazed harpy and you don't even take a moment to think "WTF has just happened, is my dick OK, what was that all about, is my dick OK, I have to tell someone, is my dick OK, I wonder if I can find her again, my dick is OK". No response to being kidnapped, sexually assaulted, rescued and dumped back in your bed. Even the goblin scene which hinted at something in the Harpy's saliva causing extended erections, no further mention of it.

Nook goes missing? "I hope she'll be OK, I mean I could go looking for her, I do know someone in security, I really like her, ach, I'm sure she will be fine. It's only the Marbog. Not as if THEY DESTROY FREAKING WORLDS!!!! Oh, a text. Must reply."

It just doesn't make sense, or fit in with the rest of your writing.

I'm really enjoying this AV, your writing is mainly on point, you have created some great characters, but personally I would go back and remove the fact the Marbog are world killers, make them magical mercenaries or something, they just don't fit as they are currently portrayed into what I would imagine you are trying to create with this world.

By the way, please feel free to completely ignore this, after all it is not my story to tell, it is yours, and end of the day that is all that matters

Oh, yeah that harpy incident, it wasn't handled smoothly too, when MC woke up next day and went doing his business, I was like "w8, what, is that all? Is there some stuff missing here or what?" I believe it was done in such a way to accommodate to possibility that you could completely skip all that sequence by choosing to not wait for Nook back then. But Marbogs took all of that and brought it to whole new level.