Ok...
I played the game. I think it's a good game?
Why the question mark, well it's bc I got the strangest feeling while reading it.
Let me explain, the renders are great. The story isn't original but it's good if you like this kind of tropes. Albeit a bit too... how do I say basic? No it's not the word, Idk... The game just doesn't excite me. The author obviously wants to make more than just a porn game. That's why I'm saying this. While playing it, I didn't feel any thrill or excitement as I would with titles like rebirth or The bite.
1st thing that bothered me is the writing.
It can be considered great given the fact that it doesn't blind you with orthographic mistakes like some other games. But, it's not this side of wrting I want to talk abt. I'm talking abt the one that makes the story smooth, understandable, likeable and appealing, the one that makes you want more.
I don't rly know how to explain it.
The way dialogues were written just seemed a bit off (at least to me).
Like the feeling you get when you watch a movie with bad acting and poor lines or when you see the a youtuber's debut (yeah that exemple just popped in my head lol). That kinda feeling.
I didn't finish the game, I stopped b4 finishing the last challenge.
Second, and it can be linked with the 1st. It's the images (I'm just not sure, do we call those imgs renders? kinda guessed so).
Like I said the renders are great, but like the dialogue they seem off.
Maybe plain is the word, I don't rly know if it's the emotions? the pacing between them (renders) and the dialogue?
Smn pls help me convey what I'm feeling lol.
What my humble self would advise is to try and make scenes in between scenes to make things smoother. Don't cut scenes abruptly if you do it has to make sense with the pace of the story. Avoid "cringey", "useless" or "obvious" inner dialogue... (I don't have an exemple sry, if smn wants to supply me with one, I'll gratefully accept it lol).
Try and add smt that's your own. I have nothing against starting from a general trope but you have to take it and mold it into smt of your own. The chosen one, the vampires powers, the settings of that world... If you have read some similar novels it all seem a bit dull. So yeah try and make it unique. I'm not saying you have to come with smt never seen. You could just for exemple couple that trope with another one. Make a twist in the story...
Wait b4 I explain what I mean by that, you should understand what are the 2 main variables that makes me want to see more of a story.
The 1st one is the mysteries veiled by the plot and the second one is the action.
In some games/stories... action suffice like opm and many others.
Sometimes even when the action in nonexistant, if the plot is great and there are mysteries to unveil. (don't call the scooby gang on me lol) It makes you want to see more, it keeps the appeal alive.
Well, I prefer when one is playing on both sides. I can think of some AVNs that plays rly well on both sides. There is one in particular that I can think of, Idk if it's the fact that the author has been rly steady with his update releases but I found myself addicted to it lol. It's called Superhuman, if you want to give it a try and inspire yourself from it. If you can get past the goth vibe it has (you'll forget all abt it after 30 mins of gameplay) Go for it! At this point I'm not even playing for the porn part. I'm just playing for the amazing plot and the epic battle scenes.
I'm sry if sometimes I sound non-understandable, I'm kinda tired and I'm too lazy to reread and correct potential mistakes.
Anyways, I'm just saying all that and maybe it's just me spouting nonsense.
I know it's your first game, I hope you'll get better. I'll try and keep track of this game's evolution.
THX
