VN Ren'Py Abandoned Corrupted Island [v0.02a] [Jon95]

[Azraelith]

Will keep an eye out for how this game continues.

 

[Hantersob]

really good, pls continue

 

[batman666]

Awesome game so far. Bit on the short side, but very nice. I'm a sucker for HS models and the ones here are nice.

 

[Baharomont]

Attention people!!!
Thanks to gigan Corrupted Island now has Incest patch.
Please give a big THANKS to gigan .​

I have only one ask... Why you not do it from start? O_O

 

[Faptime]

Will there be an Android port?

 

[jon95]

Will there be an Android port?

At least not now, maybe latter

 

[jon95]

I have just read a review about the game.
First, I want thank everyone who tried the game and gave me his opinion about the game. This can help me make the game better.
But I still have something to say about some points:

• "The sex happens fast and with very little set-up" Man have you ever heard about someone who needs a set-up to fuck his wife or lovers. This game starts with the MC having a wife and 2 lovers. The set-up will be with other characters.

• "Docking someone a year and a half of salary for a lab accident? " Believe me, I know very well about different Rewards and Punishment systems for different organizations in different countries(I did my research when I started looking for a job. I even studied about that in the university) But man this game is in fictional world where people could live for about 200-300 years or even more. Do you think they have the same concept of time as us!!!? In one of the shows I watched before someone got more than 100 years of imprisonment because of illegal gambling!!! Do you think that the writer is ignorant to that point!? This was done intentionally to remind the people that this is a different world and has no relations with ours( I wrote about that in the WARNING, the 8th line. If you played the game then you should have agreed to it)

• "The script needs a major rewrite" I totally agree with that!!! But I can't do anything about it for now unless you Know a good writer who can write the script for me for free. I'll be very grateful if you introduced one to me.

( My first language isn't English and I tried my best to make the phrasing and dialogue as simple and as easy to understand as possible but ended with "Lots of awkward phrasing and dialogue that seems like it was written by a kid" so sorry for that.)

(For those who played the game and think that it's worth continuing, if you liked this game, I hope you can consider giving me your support so that I can improve it for everyone to have more fun)​

 

[Deleted member 997153]

I have just read a review about the game.
First, I want thank everyone who tried the game and gave me his opinion about the game. This can help me make the game better.
But I still have something to say about some points:

• "The sex happens fast and with very little set-up" Man have you ever heard about someone who needs a set-up to fuck his wife or lovers. This game starts with the MC having a wife and 2 lovers. The set-up will be with other characters.

• "Docking someone a year and a half of salary for a lab accident? " Believe me, I know very well about different Rewards and Punishment systems for different organizations in different countries(I did my research when I started looking for a job. I even studied about that in the university) But man this game is in fictional world where people could live for about 200-300 years or even more. Do you think they have the same concept of time as us!!!? In one of the shows I watched before someone gut a more than 100 years of imprisonment because of illegal gambling!!! Do you think that the writer is ignorant to that point!? This was done intentionally to remind the people that this is a different world and has no relations with ours( I wrote about that in the WARNING, the 8th line. If you played the game then you should have agreed to it)

• "The script needs a major rewrite" I totally agree with that!!! But I can't do anything about it for now unless you Know a good writer who can write the script for me for free. I'll be very grateful if you introduced one to me.

( My first language isn't English and I tried my best to make the phrasing and dialogue as simple and as easy to understand as possible but ended with "Lots of awkward phrasing and dialogue that seems like it was written by a kid" so sorry for that.)

(For those who played the game and think that it's worth continuing, if you liked this game, I hope you can consider giving me your support so that I can improve it for everyone to have more fun)​

If you have feedback about my review, then you're free to tag me in the post. No reason to be scared.

As to your points, I agree you don't need to set up sex with the MC's wife. However, most people don't fuck their secretaries and maids. So yeah, you do need to set up that. Make it clear through the dialogue that they are already lovers.

True, it is a fictional, fantasy world. However, when you are creating a fantasy world that bears a large resemblance to the real world, then you need to be specific about what rules have changed from the real world. You will create confusion if you change the rules without explaining the new rules and how they have changed.

There are many developers who are not native English speakers. You are not alone in that. However, you are releasing a game in English, so your game will be evaluated by the quality of your English. Pairing up with a native speaker would help with this. Ask for volunteers in the thread, you might be surprised how many people might want to help.

This might be the most important piece of feedback I can give you, so listen up. You come across as very defensive and you are taking criticism of your game personally. You need to chill out. If you want feedback, then you may get feedback that is critical of aspects of your game. If you can't handle negative feedback, then stop asking for feedback. If all you want is for someone to pat you on the head and tell you that you did a good job, then you are looking to be praised. Without feedback that may be negative or critical, your game will never get better. Do you want the game to get better or do you want to be praised?

I noticed that among all your excuses and reasons why I'm wrong about my criticism, you never acknowledged the praise and support that I did give your game:

This self-described demo is a rough cut to be sure, but it could improve with some hard work. The sex happens fast and with very little set-up. Hopefully, there will be a build-up in later versions. Teasing is being set-up with the step-daughters and works better.

Maybe this will go somewhere interesting. We'll see.

Renders are decent and I love Honey Select so no complaints there. One chick has orange nipples and I'm actually looking forward to more of her.

Not recommended at the moment, but I will check back on later versions.

This is what you wrote in your Developer's Note:

"This release is a demo to find the opinion of the users on the game and there will be some modifications accordingly in the next updates"

I gave you what you asked for - my opinion. Some of it was negative and some of it is positive. I think your game has potential. The problem is you asked for opinions, but you're too fragile to hear even mild criticism. That doesn't bode well for your ability to improve and produce a better game.

 

[jon95]

If you have feedback about my review, then you're free to tag me in the post. No reason to be scared.

As to your points, I agree you don't need to set up sex with the MC's wife. However, most people don't fuck their secretaries and maids. So yeah, you do need to set up that. Make it clear through the dialogue that they are already lovers.

True, it is a fictional, fantasy world. However, when you are creating a fantasy world that bears a large resemblance to the real world, then you need to be specific about what rules have changed from the real world. You will create confusion if you change the rules without explaining the new rules and how they have changed.

There are many developers who are not native English speakers. You are not alone in that. However, you are releasing a game in English, so your game will be evaluated by the quality of your English. Pairing up with a native speaker would help with this. Ask for volunteers in the thread, you might be surprised how many people might want to help.

This might be the most important piece of feedback I can give you, so listen up. You come across as very defensive and you are taking criticism of your game personally. You need to chill out. If you want feedback, then you may get feedback that is critical of aspects of your game. If you can't handle negative feedback, then stop asking for feedback. If all you want is for someone to pat you on the head and tell you that you did a good job, then you are looking to be praised. Without feedback that may be negative or critical, your game will never get better. Do you want the game to get better or do you want to be praised?

I noticed that among all your excuses and reasons why I'm wrong about my criticism, you never acknowledged the praise and support that I did give your game:

This self-described demo is a rough cut to be sure, but it could improve with some hard work. The sex happens fast and with very little set-up. Hopefully, there will be a build-up in later versions. Teasing is being set-up with the step-daughters and works better.

Maybe this will go somewhere interesting. We'll see.

Renders are decent and I love Honey Select so no complaints there. One chick has orange nipples and I'm actually looking forward to more of her.

Not recommended at the moment, but I will check back on later versions.

This is what you wrote in your Developer's Note:

"This release is a demo to find the opinion of the users on the game and there will be some modifications accordingly in the next updates"

I gave you what you asked for - my opinion. Some of it was negative and some of it is positive. I think your game has potential. The problem is you asked for opinions, but you're too fragile to hear even mild criticism. That doesn't bode well for your ability to improve and produce a better game.

It's not that I can't accept the negative feedback or attacking your opinion (I'm very thankful for everyone gave their opinion on the game whether positive or negative) and you are not the first to give me a criticism about problems in the game(There is some in posts before). The v0.002 before this one, was modified according to the feedback I got.
I just gave my opinion on some points I didn't agree with.
The reason I didn't tag you in the post because I wasn't targeting you specially by that post. There must be some people who has the same doubt about these point as you so I made that post not for a person for himself.

I made an introduction at the beginning of the game(not that through but it gives the general idea of the game).
A place that is filled with corruption but still has some good in it with people and rules different from our world.
What road you (the player) will choose is entirely up to you to have relations with anyone you want.
It's right that most people don't fuck their secretaries and maids but there is people who did (She incited him and he has lust for her then they fucked. It's this simple and happens a lot in our world let alone already corrupted one.)
The story line starts with them being in relation if you don't like being in relation with someone, there is always another choice .

Thanks for the suggestion about Pairing up with a native speaker. I'll try it and hope that there is someone interested.

If you find any other problem in this release or in the future one feel free to mention it in a post. I always set some of my free time to check out the comments on the game and take the suggestions that can improve the game.
(And sorry if I rejected someone or you thought that my reply was somewhat hard but if I just took in every suggestion even if it was not this is the way I want the game to be then this game will loose its meaning)

 

[jon95]

Hi everyone,
As you know, English is not my best so I thought when The game gets enough support, I should ask a professional for help but unfortunately this didn't happen.
So I decided to take someone's suggestion and ask for volunteers in the thread.
If someone is interested please PM me.
(Requirement: Being a native English speaker and can write story and dialogues)​

 

[Dorn]

I really like what you've got here. The story is a little amusing. I like that everyone is so corrupted right off the bat. I hope that you can start using actual animations though. That's the real advantage of honey select.

 

[jon95]

I really like what you've got here. The story is a little amusing. I like that everyone is so corrupted right off the bat. I hope that you can start using actual animations though. That's the real advantage of honey select.

I try to do that as soon as possible. It's just that I'm a one man team now so It will be a little hard.
A friend of mine said that he will help in the story and dialogues so things should get better in the near future

 

[JustNotFatal]

My suggestions:

1. Try to improve your renders as much as possible. Everything is far more blurry than it should be.
2. I hope your friend will help you out, the errors negatively impact my willingness to read your story dramatically.

 

[Bahamut Zero]

Hi guys just find this game right now i see the incest patch and i download it
Can someone tell me how far the sex in game are? I see that the game is just at 0.02 but perhaps there are some sex scene already in. If someone can confirm this i try it. If not i wait a little bit, because i think this game have a huge potential

 

[jon95]

Hi guys just find this game right now i see the incest patch and i download it
Can someone tell me how far the sex in game are? I see that the game is just at 0.02 but perhaps there are some sex scene already in. If someone can confirm this i try it. If not i wait a little bit, because i think this game have a huge potential

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PS: the English of the dialogues in this build is not the best.

 

[Hones]

How I wish that not every single girl had massive tits
The smaller one would look so much better if her boobs size was at least realistic
Apart from that the game looks good but no I'm not gonna play anymore of this the boobs are just .... yeah nope
Honestly it's a shame not every adult woman needs massive tits to be an adult there are smaller sizes.

 

[Rei0949]

Game still alive?

 

[jon95]

Game still alive?

Yes, I just got a little busy but the next update will be finished soon

 

[Darth Sidious]

Models look really good, too bad it's an incestish story that's not incest.
With a patch de-stepping the girls I'll try this for sure. I just hate censorship.

'de-stepping' the sisters? That's some creative wordplay right there

 

[Look-see]

was wondering what happened to this game. glad its still not dead but hope for a release soon. i miss it