VN Ren'Py Abandoned Chrome Lifelines-Chapter 1 [Ch 1 Part 2] [zTi Creations]

4.70 star(s) 13 Votes

DetroitAfterDark

Well-Known Member
Jun 11, 2021
1,189
2,258
it's only kinetic for the prologue. so choices will come soon.

Not entirely sure it deserves the Kinetic tag since the game plans to give choices at some point. but atm it is kinetic so eh.
Well in that case the kinetic novel tag should be removed, alot of people will pass on this game thinking its a kinetic novel but ehh I'm glad to hear that it's not.
 
  • Like
Reactions: desmosome

DetroitAfterDark

Well-Known Member
Jun 11, 2021
1,189
2,258
MAJOR story spoilers ahead:
You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.

Also only the prologue has no choices. Future updates will have them.
I knew the hunter was someone from MCs past, judging by the way the first prologue ended with a certain ex. Also you say MC and Elle "were" involved, they pretty much still seem "involved" or maybe they just like napping together.
Also I'm glad we can name the driod now, wasn't a fan of Red tbh and her model looks better now.
 

Look-see

Engaged Member
Aug 19, 2018
2,913
5,298
I don't know why but this made me chuckle lol. But no not Elle, spoilers ahead again:

You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.
i know this is a cyberpunk theme game. but in this particular picture. the character looks something closer to a victorian doll.

...nice
 
  • Haha
Reactions: zTi

zTi

Newbie
Game Developer
Oct 3, 2020
44
314
i know this is a cyberpunk theme game. but in this particular picture. the character looks something closer to a victorian doll.

...nice
I have a thing for eastern asians so... yeah... lol. :whistle:
 

DetroitAfterDark

Well-Known Member
Jun 11, 2021
1,189
2,258
I don't know why but this made me chuckle lol. But no not Elle, spoilers ahead again:

You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.
Ohhhhh I see that's the girl from the bar right? honestly had no idea she and MC were involved, guess this one is a spoiler lol, tho At first I thought he might have had history with the two girls who tried to attack him.
 

jufot

Well-Known Member
May 15, 2021
1,442
3,092
I loved the prologue. Very immersive world with some serious Ghost in the Shell vibes, which is always a good thing. Your environment design, posing, lighting, shadows and reflections are simply excellent! Doxy's place had so many beautiful renders, I just had to stop and appreciate the details. These were my favourites:

1644697211126.png 1644697230375.png 1644697243285.png

Look at those reflections on the counter top, the beer tap, and on Cara's jacket! It's amazingly well done!

Lovely work on the ambient music as well. You can see the jukebox in the back, and the music is actually ambient - it's not like MC is listening with headphones, which is what most games do.

Writing is also quite good. No SPaG issues, and the dialogue flows well. I can see myself becoming a Patreon, depending on how chapter 1 goes :)

I do have one concern, though:
It's a bit hard for me to go into details about a harem due to me not writing/planning that far ahead yet.
So far, you have a well grounded, internally consistent story that makes sense within the universe. I would urge you not to ruin it with copious porn logic. It's damn near impossible to write a realistic harem (Why are all these women a-OK not only with just the MC, but also sharing him with many others, in this world of free-flowing sexuality? Why would they devalue themselves like that?). In 99% of harem games (if not 100%) all choices boil down to "do you want to have sex with this character? yes/no". That means there are no stakes, no threats, no consequences. Good guy kills all the bad guys and gets all the girls. That's just... boring, really.

Obviously, it's your game, and it's fine if that's the way you'd like to go. You'll have many fans if you do. But if that's the case, I'd appreciate a heads-up to dampen my expectations :)

Good luck with your game!
 

desmosome

Conversation Conqueror
Sep 5, 2018
6,002
13,865
I loved the prologue. Very immersive world with some serious Ghost in the Shell vibes, which is always a good thing. Your environment design, posing, lighting, shadows and reflections are simply excellent! Doxy's place had so many beautiful renders, I just had to stop and appreciate the details. These were my favourites:

View attachment 1649760 View attachment 1649762 View attachment 1649765

Look at those reflections on the counter top, the beer tap, and on Cara's jacket! It's amazingly well done!

Lovely work on the ambient music as well. You can see the jukebox in the back, and the music is actually ambient - it's not like MC is listening with headphones, which is what most games do.

Writing is also quite good. No SPaG issues, and the dialogue flows well. I can see myself becoming a Patreon, depending on how chapter 1 goes :)

I do have one concern, though:

So far, you have a well grounded, internally consistent story that makes sense within the universe. I would urge you not to ruin it with copious porn logic. It's damn near impossible to write a realistic harem (Why are all these women a-OK not only with just the MC, but also sharing him with many others, in this world of free-flowing sexuality? Why would they devalue themselves like that?). In 99% of harem games (if not 100%) all choices boil down to "do you want to have sex with this character? yes/no". That means there are no stakes, no threats, no consequences. Good guy kills all the bad guys and gets all the girls. That's just... boring, really.

Obviously, it's your game, and it's fine if that's the way you'd like to go. You'll have many fans if you do. But if that's the case, I'd appreciate a heads-up to dampen my expectations :)

Good luck with your game!
Don't forget the title. "Chrome Lifelines" has that Asimov vibe, kinda like "Caves of Steel" or something.
 

zTi

Newbie
Game Developer
Oct 3, 2020
44
314
I loved the prologue. Very immersive world with some serious Ghost in the Shell vibes, which is always a good thing. Your environment design, posing, lighting, shadows and reflections are simply excellent! Doxy's place had so many beautiful renders, I just had to stop and appreciate the details. These were my favourites:

View attachment 1649760 View attachment 1649762 View attachment 1649765

Look at those reflections on the counter top, the beer tap, and on Cara's jacket! It's amazingly well done!

Lovely work on the ambient music as well. You can see the jukebox in the back, and the music is actually ambient - it's not like MC is listening with headphones, which is what most games do.

Writing is also quite good. No SPaG issues, and the dialogue flows well. I can see myself becoming a Patreon, depending on how chapter 1 goes :)

I do have one concern, though:

So far, you have a well grounded, internally consistent story that makes sense within the universe. I would urge you not to ruin it with copious porn logic. It's damn near impossible to write a realistic harem (Why are all these women a-OK not only with just the MC, but also sharing him with many others, in this world of free-flowing sexuality? Why would they devalue themselves like that?). In 99% of harem games (if not 100%) all choices boil down to "do you want to have sex with this character? yes/no". That means there are no stakes, no threats, no consequences. Good guy kills all the bad guys and gets all the girls. That's just... boring, really.

Obviously, it's your game, and it's fine if that's the way you'd like to go. You'll have many fans if you do. But if that's the case, I'd appreciate a heads-up to dampen my expectations :)

Good luck with your game!
Many thanks for checking the prologue out! I always appreciate honest feedback!

And I completely understand the harem thing, writing and planning ahead was the biggest reason I decided to remake the prologue! Writing a harem that makes sense is incredibly difficult, I do tend to pull things out of my ass sometimes but I make sure every base is covered before I decide to implement it.

Planning ahead is what really scares me tho, specially when I realize how ambitious this is starting to become. I already have the endings in sight, the journey getting there is what really terrifies me. It's why I take so long with updates/releases. I sure do wish I had the powers of foresight.

Time will tell how I handle it since for now it's a solo project with a smidge of outside help. I look forward to seeing everyone's reaction to chapter 1.
 
  • Like
Reactions: Necronlord3

zTi

Newbie
Game Developer
Oct 3, 2020
44
314
Don't forget the title. "Chrome Lifelines" has that Asimov vibe, kinda like "Caves of Steel" or something.
Pure coincidence I assure you lol, thanks for bringing it up tho. Looks like something I could use for reference!
 

desmosome

Conversation Conqueror
Sep 5, 2018
6,002
13,865
Pure coincidence I assure you lol, thanks for bringing it up tho. Looks like something I could use for reference!
Oh yea. Asimov's Robot, Empire, and Foundation series are landmarks in science fiction. It's more hard sci-fi rather than cyberpunk, but it's absolutely worth a read for any fan of science fiction.
 
  • Like
Reactions: Necronlord3 and zTi

zTi

Newbie
Game Developer
Oct 3, 2020
44
314
Any word on this game?
If you haven't already checked my , just posted a mini devlog on what's happening at the moment. To save you the trouble I'll skip to the main point here:
You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.

Thanks for taking an interest in Chrome Lifelines!
 
  • Like
Reactions: Necronlord3

Jaango

Member
Aug 15, 2021
163
1,965
scn1-4.png

scn1-0.png scn0-1.png scn0-5.png


Let's get the patron stuff out of the way first. I have decided to move to a charge upfront model for my patreon. With these changes, I have decided to remove the biweekly renders because often I rush those and spend too much time working on posts for them. So moving forward to incentivize patrons, releases from now on will be separated. Meaning that there will be a patron-exclusive version of the game. What do you get in the patron-exclusive version, you ask?
  • Jukebox to listen to some of the (unedited)tracks you hear in-game.
  • Gallery with sexy renders that you won't see anywhere else.
  • Replay gallery.
  • Side stories - New side stories that take place in Retropolis, with steamy scenes. May or may not include the cast from the original story.
Free versions will only have access to the main story with none of the features listed above.
With that out of the way, I'm pleased to say that this release will be out by April 8, maybe sooner, depending on my playtesters and proofreaders. Please keep in mind that the highest-tier patrons will be the first to have access to this new release. Stay tuned for the update! And thank you for your support after nearly a FREAKING YEAR! I LOVE YOU ALL!
 

jufot

Well-Known Member
May 15, 2021
1,442
3,092
So moving forward to incentivize patrons, releases from now on will be separated. Meaning that there will be a patron-exclusive version of the game. [...] Free versions will only have access to the main story with none of the features listed above.
I think that's an excellent approach! Good luck with the game zTi :)
 

zTi

Newbie
Game Developer
Oct 3, 2020
44
314
View attachment 1735864

View attachment 1735866 View attachment 1735867 View attachment 1735868


Let's get the patron stuff out of the way first. I have decided to move to a charge upfront model for my patreon. With these changes, I have decided to remove the biweekly renders because often I rush those and spend too much time working on posts for them. So moving forward to incentivize patrons, releases from now on will be separated. Meaning that there will be a patron-exclusive version of the game. What do you get in the patron-exclusive version, you ask?
  • Jukebox to listen to some of the (unedited)tracks you hear in-game.
  • Gallery with sexy renders that you won't see anywhere else.
  • Replay gallery.
  • Side stories - New side stories that take place in Retropolis, with steamy scenes. May or may not include the cast from the original story.
Free versions will only have access to the main story with none of the features listed above.
With that out of the way, I'm pleased to say that this release will be out by April 8, maybe sooner, depending on my playtesters and proofreaders. Please keep in mind that the highest-tier patrons will be the first to have access to this new release. Stay tuned for the update! And thank you for your support after nearly a FREAKING YEAR! I LOVE YOU ALL!

Demmit Jango you beat me to it lol. But thank you for formatting it like this.

I think that's an excellent approach! Good luck with the game @zTi :)
Thank you! I look forward to everyone's feedback on this. Took me way to long to get to this point lol.
 
  • Red Heart
Reactions: Jaango

Look-see

Engaged Member
Aug 19, 2018
2,913
5,298
although i understand dev's reasoning, putting things behind a paywall almost never works out. in my case for eample i can only hope the patreon version ends up here otherwise my desire to play the free version is pretty much out the window cause i know i'll be missing some stuff.

but once again i fully understand why dev is doing it. just never seen it work out unless dev is already successful which in the end wont matter because if the game is successful the "full" version ends up here anyway.

i'm honestly curious to see how this works out.
 

DetroitAfterDark

Well-Known Member
Jun 11, 2021
1,189
2,258
although i understand dev's reasoning, putting things behind a paywall almost never works out. in my case for eample i can only hope the patreon version ends up here otherwise my desire to play the free version is pretty much out the window cause i know i'll be missing some stuff.

but once again i fully understand why dev is doing it. just never seen it work out unless dev is already successful which in the end wont matter because if the game is successful the "full" version ends up here anyway.

i'm honestly curious to see how this works out.
I agree with you, it rarely works out when a dev starts out like that. well established games usually gets away with the paywall stuff but this game hasn't even had a first release yet other than the prologue so Im intrigued to see how that'll work out but I do understand why the dev is going with that approach. Making Money is still the primary goal for Dev's when making these games and alot of us don't pay a cent and rather get the game here for free. I don't think this approach is necessarily bad, we still get the important stuff with the free version which is the main story, if the side stuff are just for H scenes and doesn't tie in with the main story then it shouldn't be a big deal unless you only playing the game for the lewd stuff. The sound tho, if the free version have no sound that'll suck, especially for a cyberpunk like game, silence will just kill the whole mood,but hey if that's the case I'll just keep my Spotify running in the background with some cyberpunk music lol problem solved.
 
Last edited:
  • Like
Reactions: zTi and Look-see
4.70 star(s) 13 Votes