VN Ren'Py A Father's Sins [Ch. 35+36] [Pixieblink]

[Pixieblink]

Not cool Mr. Pixieblink! Totally not cool at all.

I think I don't like you for for killing off poor Jennifer!
That poor character faced enough hardship.

Apart from that it would have been a great update.
Really liked the fighting scene. And the story progression
and ramping up the drama but the Jennifer thing...?

The "Jennifer thing" is a HUGE part of the plot.

And it IS a horror game.
Horror as in real horror, where bad things happen. Even to good people.

Though I guess I did a pretty good job if you were already vested in her with that little screen time.

At least her daughter Sadie survived.
Gee, I hope she's going to be alright...

 

[faradhii]

First of all, I enjoy the writing, the premise is interesting and there's enough tension to keep me coming back! My one question.... Is MC EVER going to get laid??? You have 3 (possibly 4) (IMO) cuties who need loving!!! (the 2 young nuns and the virgin, plus the barrista). Make with sexy time already

 

[junior366]

Patience Grasshopper, Pixieblink is going for the slow burn. I don't think it will be too much longer. At least I hope not!!!

 

[Kitchentable]

The "Jennifer thing" is a HUGE part of the plot.



Though I guess I did a pretty good job if you were already vested in her with that little screen time.

Plot...yeah. There are memes about "plot", you know?
Or Michael Bay. The guy thinks that special effects are plot.

But that's beside the point! The point is
the 16th commandment: Thou shall not kill (my) milfs!

Repeat after me! You. Do. NOT. Kill. Milfs. !!!!


Well, I gotta agree though that the story and writing are rather engaging
yet still come with the Pixieblink humour.

 

[c3p0]

At least her daughter Sadie survived.
Gee, I hope she's going to be alright..

You know, I've treaten other devs over more minor things. Just sayingNow I have preparation work to do; see that all the tools are ready and so.

 

[Sadowdark]

I see that the

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[Kitchentable]

You know, I've treaten other devs over more minor things. Just sayingNow I have preparation work to do; see that all the tools are ready and so.

If you need an alibi, I already know now that we were drinking beer and watching the game
together around the estimated time of Pixieblink's tragic freak accident.

 

[Pixieblink]

First of all, I enjoy the writing, the premise is interesting and there's enough tension to keep me coming back! My one question.... Is MC EVER going to get laid??? You have 3 (possibly 4) (IMO) cuties who need loving!!! (the 2 young nuns and the virgin, plus the barrista). Make with sexy time already

Ah yes, the MC's love life.

Yes, there is going to be some action in the next release Chapter 13 Jan 2.
Lucky 13 - for the MC.

Lookin back at the game so far, do you have any suggestions where I could have added some fap material without cheapening the story?

 

[Pixieblink]

Short as always, but even if you would have 4h story per update, I think I would say the same. So I tip my hat again to you for the update.
Also a little dark if we "can't" rescue even one of them, I know we already have saved Saddy and Mady. But the other two
I was also hopping the serious firepower was a little bit more than an automatic pistol...

Thanks for playing, glad to have you aboard as a fan.

Huh. And I thought the pistols were cool ?!?!?
But yeah, they're going to have a discussion about firepower down in the bunker.

 

[c3p0]

Lookin back at the game so far, do you have any suggestions where I could have added some fap material without cheapening the story?

Only thing that comes to my mind is the scene with Francine that could escalate farther. Don't know how how farther until its cheapening the story.
Other possible thing would be some flashbacks with other womens. That although has the potential that all of us would scream "Pixi bring female a back".

 

[c3p0]

Huh. And I thought the pistols were cool ?!?!?

Automatic pistols are cool, but automatic rifles are cooler.

 

[Pixieblink]

If you need an alibi, I already know now that we were drinking beer and watching the game
together around the estimated time of Pixieblink's tragic freak accident.

I live in fear.

 

[Kitchentable]

Automatic pistols are cool, but automatic rifles are cooler.

Automatic rifles...pff that's for kids!

Remember those mini nuke launchers in the Fall Out games?
Now those with a full automatic mode!! That would be cool.

What they really need though is the Holy Hand Grenade of Antioch!

 

[c3p0]

Remember those mini nuke launchers in the Fall Out games?

You mean this one?
https://f95zone.to/threads/a-fathers-sins-ch-12-pixieblink.106180/post-9549720

 

[Pixieblink]

Plot...yeah. There are memes about "plot", you know?
Or Michael Bay. The guy thinks that special effects are plot.

But that's beside the point! The point is
the 16th commandment: Thou shall not kill (my) milfs!

Repeat after me! You. Do. NOT. Kill. Milfs. !!!!


Well, I gotta agree though that the story and writing are rather engaging
yet still come with the Pixieblink humour.

I am WIDE OPEN to any suggestions you may have concerning the game. Look back at what's happened so far, if you can figure out a way to add some fap or nudity without screwing up the story, I will probably add it to the game.

Because honestly I know that it needs a little booty, but for the life of my can't figure out WHERE I could have inserted into the game up to this point. Though it will happen in the next release (chapter 13)

But that's beside the point! The point is
the 16th commandment: Thou shall not kill (my) milfs!

16th? Your religion is really complicated!


Okay, I want to make one thing perfectly clear.
SHIT IS GOING TO HAPPEN IN THIS GAME.




I love a good zombie movie. But get annoyed by the fact that they always follow the same predictable basic story.

1. You meet a clueless guy. Check.
2. Who meets a woman. Check. ( Actually, 10-1(died)=9. Because why limit yourself to only ONE? )
3. They have to go through a town full of zombies. Check. (Actually, I made the zombies come to them.)

4. The zombies were created by toxic waste from some secret lab...
Fuck all that noise. Come on, really? I've met 5 year olds with better imaginations than that!


5. As they run through the town, zombies slaughter the entire population. EXCEPT for our heroes, who somehow are ONLY noticed by the really stupid or slow ones.

Lucky our heroes only got chased by zombies that are too dumb to catch their own lunch.


6. They eventually get cornered, but nobody really worries about it too much because you KNOW the dude is going to somehow fight them off.

Oh yeah. Of course. EVERYONE else in the town got slaughtered by bad ass killer zombies, except for our doofus hero. Who fights them off. Unlike the cops, the gym rats and the Vets who did 3 combat tours in the middle east... who were easy prey.


7. And runs away with the hot chick so they can find a secure building to discuss their situation, eat a can of dog food and rest.
Uh, I'm actually okay with this part. They should go take a shower together to clean off all the zombie brains they got splattered with.


6. Before repeating #5 & #6 over a few times...
Because most Hollywood writers are about as smart as an old woman's spoiled pint sized yappy little dog and couldn't think of anything better.


7. They find a sanctuary. The end.

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They lose me after 4.
Honestly, I feel like I can do better than that.

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[moskyx]

Plus that annoying categorization of zombies: zombies who just walk slowly VS zombies who can run fast. Here we have zombies who can teleport! How cool is that?

 

[c3p0]

I am WIDE OPEN to any suggestions you may have concerning the game. Look back at what's happened so far, if you can figure out a way to add some fap or nudity without screwing up the story, I will probably add it to the game.

Because honestly I know that it needs a little booty, but for the life of my can't figure out WHERE I could have inserted into the game up to this point. Though it will happen in the next release (chapter 13)






16th? Your religion is really complicated!


Okay, I want to make one thing perfectly clear.
SHIT IS GOING TO HAPPEN IN THIS GAME.




I love a good zombie movie. But get annoyed by the fact that they always follow the same predictable basic story.

1. You meet a clueless guy. Check.
2. Who meets a woman. Check. ( Actually, 10-1(died)=9. Because why limit yourself to only ONE? )
3. They have to go through a town full of zombies. Check. (Actually, I made the zombies come to them.)

4. The zombies were created by toxic waste from some secret lab...
Fuck all that noise. Come on, really? I've met 5 year olds with better imaginations than that!


5. As they run through the town, zombies slaughter the entire population. EXCEPT for our heroes, who somehow are ONLY noticed by the really stupid or slow ones.

Lucky our heroes only got chased by zombies that are too dumb to catch their own lunch.


6. They eventually get cornered, but nobody really worries about it too much because you KNOW the dude is going to somehow fight them off.

Oh yeah. Of course. EVERYONE else in the town got slaughtered by bad ass killer zombies, except for our doofus hero. Who fights them off. Unlike the cops, the gym rats and the Vets who did 3 combat tours in the middle east... who were easy prey.


7. And runs away with the hot chick so they can find a secure building to discuss their situation, eat a can of dog food and rest.
Uh, I'm actually okay with this part. They should go take a shower together to clean off all the zombie brains they got splattered with.


6. Before repeating #5 & #6 over a few times...
Because most Hollywood writers are about as smart as an old woman's spoiled pint sized yappy little dog and couldn't think of anything better.


7. They find a sanctuary. The end.

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They lose me after 4.

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Well, 7 could also be:

• They find a cure
• They beat the zombies to a bloody slobber
• They find evil master mind #43 and beat him, after the normale evil master mind storyline the all must go through:
  1. The capture our (super-) hero
  2. The put him in some kind of evil genious death trap/machine
  3. The tell him, in all detail over 15 mins, what is their plan, what all things they were doing, why they can't be stopped and so on.
  4. They (super-) hero overcomes the death trap/machine either because of:
     1. The evil master mind left the room, because the (super-) hero will be death in about 2 mins, regardless what they would do
     2. Some sidekick of the (super-)hero comes to rescue
     3. The (super-)hero with his insane will, hidden tools or simple beacuse he had faked the whole evil master mind capture (super-)hero at all
  5. The evil master mind will be killed by the (super-)hero in either a very big explosion that destroy all or a mayor part of evil master mind base or they fight in a epic fight over 20 min movie time and again evil master mind have some scene where he is 200% sure that he has (super-) hero where he want him to have
  6. The (super-)hero and his sidekick, where some sidekicks have died in the overall process, stops the evil master mind plan at the last possible time before it is too late
  7. Somehow evil master mind or one of his minions lifes and make plans to have revenge on (super-)hero and the whole world
  8. (super-)Hero completely clueless about 7. enjoy his victory with his female sidekick number 1.
  9. The story end when (super-)hero want to fuck get romanticly involed with his female sidekick number 1 and another thread from previous evil master mind, his minions (see 7.) or something completly new arise that is an even greater threat to the (super-)hero, his sidekicks or the world.

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Usually they lose me with the evil master mind story after 2.
Why giving the hero an earbashing? You have him helpless, so just kill him and make sure you've killed him and be finished with it.

 

[Pixieblink]

Well, 7 could also be:

• They find a cure
• They beat the zombies to a bloody slobber
• They find evil master mind #43 and bet him, after the normale evil master mind storyline the all must go through:
  1. The capture our (super-) hero

You've just described over half the movies I've watched!

You would think that with a $150 Million budget
they could have chipped in a little extra for a writer with some imagination.

 

[WaltS]

You've just described over half the movies I've watched!

You would think that with a $150 Million budget
they could have chipped in a little extra for a writer with some imagination.

My personal favorite "NOT-#3":
Gert Frobe (sp?) vs. James Bond

Bond: "What do you want me to do?"
Frobe: "I want you to die, Mr. Bond."

Ofc then the rest unashamedly follows the list cited above but well, that was the 60s…

 

[faradhii]

Hmm.... Honestly I'm forgetting my own commandment, "though shalt not forget only a short time has passed in game". You've been writing, and we've been playing for months so it seems like a lack of progress with the girls. In game, MC is doing just fine. None of the girls are sexually aggressive. Also, nicely done with the "healer" who you REALLY don't want to piss off!!!!