Usually (and by that I mean this the first time) I don't complain about mishaps in the language/script; I understand English isn't everyone's first language (yours truly included) and even fluent speakers/linguists dun goof every now and then. But this... boy, is this a hot mess. Grammar, syntax, punctuation, tenses, identity crisis (with wrong names popping up) and so on; it hurts bro. It really hurts. Feel my brain cells burning and being sent to oblivion's embrace.
Maybe I'm making too much of a deal out of this, but I've seen similar comments and reviews. It wouldn't matter that much methinks if story didn't play as big of a part as it is doing apparently (which I really like) but, as structured, it's extremely hard to ignore, if even possible. I can volunteer to do proofreading if need be, I got time, lol. With those beautiful, stunningly amazing visuals, talk about making the hard things easy and vice versa.
Anyways, this is my only moot point. Loving this one. Sorry for Trump's Great Wall of txt
P.S. The girls are all so precious...