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I am going to try to be objective here because I honestly would like to see the story progress. That being said, I don't pull my punches or sugar coat things. If I offend you, simply DM me and say so and I will apologize and possibly change or redact whatever I said. Having said that. Here we go.
I am sorry but doing this is just a band-aid for poor writing. The best thing you could do is shorten some of the conversations and be more to the point. Some of the characters simply drone on and on (Especially the Doc!!). Adding a skip feature will cause readers to miss potentially important information, so do a better job of writing and give your fans a story that doesn't bore them to tears. Why spend the time on a "skip" mod or speed text mod when going back, taking a real look at your script and making changes to improve its content and flow would make your fans infinitely happier.
Choices... You need about half as many as you are giving us. It is monotonous, annoying and simply complicates the story by forcing your fans to continuously save. Some fans have as many as 15 pages of saves and you aren't even done with chapter 2. This is simply too much. The constant stop, save, stop save again, over and over is hurting the flow of the story. You can limit your choices to more important points and not hurt it.
Points System... Does a player need 45 like points halfway into chapter 2? As I stated above. Too many choices. You implemented the like points but I haven't seen anything that would make you lose points. If you do not have the checks and balances in place, why have the like points at all? All you are doing is directing your fans down certain paths because invariably they will choose a response that ends in a "She likes that" It is almost a walkthrough to be honest. If you are to entice your fans to get the girls to pursue the MC, the MC should also be able to push them away with negative responses that take away likes. Like I said... Checks and balances.
Natalie... PLEASE give her a personality. You have a shy, inexperienced teenager that is in trouble (because I don't know how to code the spoiler) . She should be hysterical, frightened and badly shook up, especially after the second time we see her when, well you know what happened. Right now Natalie is a straight up Lifeless Christen Stewart, Twilight movie clone. This comes back to the writing. You go into painfully long detail with the MC's Doctors visit yet you do nothing for Natalie's scenes. Those two short scenes are vitally important and you have Natalie evaluating her situation in the same way Spock would evaluate a space amoeba on Star Trek.
I am sorry and yes everyone has an opinion, but you have the potential for a fantastic story here. You are hurting it though and if you don't make big changes soon you will go from seeing 4-5 star ratings to 1-2 star ratings. We fans see it all of the time....