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- The bikini show should have been followed up with a bra and panties show which may or may not include Zach. I don't think so. Zac is the most innocent of the three and he ought to have his own special go at Sophia
- birthday party for Dylan, Sophia comes out with the cake, her top pops open and she not wearing a bra So how plausible would something like that occur?
- Julia catches Sophia and Sam who is naked and having sex with her because there is no way Sam does not try to have sex with her. Julia tells Ellie, which then leads to heaven or hell. I would think a Ellie/Julia scene be better for Ellie's first lesbian experience and maybe for Julia as well. If Sam and Sophia get caught like that, the whole plot is destroyed
- The task in the classroom is for Sophia to not wear a bra or panties, she has to prove at the back of the class she not wearing panties by showing Aiden. then she has to show the whole class she not wearing panties. Isn't that pretty much how the tasks have gone save for the really stupid ones? It would have been better if the tasks were narrow and more corrupting of Sophia with Aiden getting most of the benefit
- Julia stays over and joins Ellie and Sophia in the shower...sure that one works
- Sophia learns from Dylan the tutoring boys are tricking her but she plays along. Ummm No. Sophia doesn't share any of her misadventures with anyone. Plus that is the send worst plot ridden disaster of the whole story. If anything the last tutoring session was when she was on the phone and getting groped that could have been plausible if somehow Sophia enjoyed it too much
- The tutoring boy's mum has been recording the lessons the whole time and the woman their mum introduced Sophia to knows is aware as well. best use of the mom would be on a tutoring day something serious comes up and the mom asks Sophia to babysit for a few hours and things go very bad or naughty and the end of the whole tutoring job. But I think that part of the story is dead anyhow so... it is what it is or wasn't
- Dylan knows his mum is wanted by all his friends, something Sophia doesn't believe. Dylan dares her to recreate the swimming lesson scene with his friends but this time Sophia is not to wear a bra, Dylan states his friend's reaction will tell her how wrong she is. Sophia learns she was tricked by Dylan and Sam in the swimming event but agrees to do it as she is curious. that tuns afoul of Sam's real feelings for Sophia and Dylan for that matter
- Sophia tries Antonia again when it's only Alyssa around, this leads to more with Alyssa, Zach may or may not walk in on them. that makes sense and is plausible as far as having a Antonia in the first place
- A scene with Sam and Sophia + Dylan with Amber... actually that SHOULD be in the mix. With Sam and Sophia its in the cards already. But there is no closure with Amber/Dylan in the offering, nor a plot device to further educate Dylan when is his turn with Sophia
off the top of my head, that is 10 ideas I have but I'm too busy with my own visual novel, maybe someone else has the time to do them.
The problem with a lot of stories in porn games, plausibility, timing, subject and just an over all rush to get to the good bits ruin the whole game. "Aiden's Revenge" which I stumbled across "HAD" a good potential and could have gotten off to a fast start with the juicy bits, but in rushing things and forgetting the character makeup of the individuals, dooms the game to bottom feeder status of most H-games
