- Sep 24, 2017
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goodWhat I liked about this story was you had these three characters (MC, Megan, and Melissa) that were broken and unhappy at the start. The three of them come together to start to heal and find happiness. In a way they save each other. Liam's cancer adds some real life drama that shows the characters dealing with tragedy in the midst of their joy. It was a good balance. The story just goes completely off the rails. Megan is struggling to get supporting roles in off/off/off Broadway plays and suddenly she gets a part in a major motion picture. I think I'm right about this; didn't MC have to go through a window to get to the girls during the fire? I think he carried the girl out the door to save her, did he not have a key? The fire scene is too contrived, too unrealistic. The whole Leah story line is just a mess. It's almost like the first half and the second half of this story was written by two different people. Maybe he spent five chapters developing interesting characters and suddenly realized he had three chapters to end this, or maybe it was just a 1000 monkeys on a 1000 typewriters. There a lot of people creating these VN's. Was it just a matter of time until some one created something special? Perhaps the last half of the story is more indicative of the developer's ability and the first half was the fluke. I'll be sure of it if the whole thing turns out to be a dream, a play, an improv, a therapy session, or any thing else that turns the story into an unreality. How did Angela and Hedwig end up as the only happy ones?
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