i like the idea of this, although some of the inner monologue isn't quite what i'd want in a confident and dominant mc like others have stated. he says things like "well it's my fault for being a dumb dumbface and i can't really blame melissa for being a backstabbing whore cos that's how bitniss works" a couple of times too often.
I'd like him to show more resolve in the dialogue, give me confidence that he will truly make them pay. I want to think "ooooh shiet, bitches, you done fucked up now! MC gonna ruin all yall!". Right now, i'm not really getting it. seems like the wife is there more resourceful and strong of the two, while he is more lost and easier to take advantage of. i feel like i, as the mc, will stumble through the plot instead of taking charge while my capable wife takes care of everything.
don't get me wrong; a sexy, strong and loyal female partner that you build an enterprise or conquer the world (and bitchez) with is awesomesauce BUT i feel like the mc is the junior in this partnership. it doesn't really rhyme with the maledom thing which is what interests most of us in a game like this i think.
the breaking of melissa scene was rather underwhelming too unfortunately... i'm not saying cast her out like people seem to be advocating in the thread (he's stuck with her and she might come to be useful...), but damn, i wanted to see her punished
even him giving her a ride back from that office was a bit weird.
there was a bit of light bondage (bordering on romantic with the strawberries
) but then she had her freedom right away, lounging on the couch in her own clothes. how about securing her to a sybian and make her cum her brains out for 3 hours? or training her to be completely unable to cum without permission, so that when you do let her have the d she'll actually have to beg? or fucking the wife in front of her, only allowing her to watch and then clean dominique up afterward, turning her into a literal cumrag? no? just sex and no indication that she's submitted? eh... (to be fair, i got the feeling you were also a bit limited by the 3d assets you had access to)
having said all that, this shows a lot of promise and i'll definitely keep an eye on it
despite the above i do like your writing and ability to communicate a character. we barely had any interaction with the wife but she still oozes confidence and strength^^