So MC interned in hospital , then MC had an accident , and MC is killing /knocking people now after that there is MC as a cop. It seems like the events happen in different times like past , present stuff like that but there is nothing that gives the reader when the events happen. The renders are beautiful but it's a shame that the story is so confusing. This is my own personal opinion but to make the story better i think you could do the following things:
1- Remake the episode 1
2 - While Remaking the story do something that makes the readers know when those events are happening and don't put too many events in the game . I will give you an example the game have flashbacks of his memory, have the stuff at the hospital and the stuff outside the hospital. That is way too much and makes things confusing , MC left the hospital now he is in the hospital again , super confusing. So my advice is remake the story and only leave the hospital stuff and the memory stuff . When remembering something make sure readers can easily understand it's a memory MC recovered. With this tell the hospital story only and with memory flashbacks , MC remembers this name , he remembers the necklace now , and instead of after that jumping to MC outside the hospital instead of doing that continue the story in the hospital MC will interact with Cora and slowly getting his memories back he gets his memories back or some of those memories and the doctor for example thinks he is ready to leave the hospital so he leaves. After that you can put like something saying " Some years / months later " and continue with MC outside the hospital.
What i am saying is you need to make the story straightforward and easy to understand , if something is a memory make it in a way we know its a memory if the events that you show with MC pointing guns at everyone are after the hospital make that only after he is discharged from the hospital and don't go back to the past , if some events are before the hospital make the MC remember them instead of just inserting them there , if the police stuff and the going to other people houses are in different times don't put them together tell one story and only after that story is done you can tell the other . You can still have the flashbacks but is better if it is as a part of MC recovering his memory.
3 - If you don't decide to remake the first chapter and do this in episode 2 only ,the story will stay confusing you can do that but a lot of people won't be able to even finish first chapter unless you remake it .
I hope this helps because the story have potential it just needs to be told in a better way
