I just played/read the first three acts and I really enjoyed it! I read a few comments so I had an idea something would happen at the end of the third act and by' did it — That was totally unexpected! Dumbass should have listened to Avalon. LOL But glad the trip to the Dentist Office will be removed or reworked because it had some scary implications as it stood.
On to the good stuff... Love the character designs, especially Avalon and Dallas! Byron needs a shave or at-least a trim. Penny... Well, I have no words for her other than — Damn! She could be a lot of fun with her peculiar personality.
Other than the Dentist office scene, I loved what I read and can't wait to read more.
PS: I wouldn't mind seeing more of B spanking Dallas. Hey, perhaps Avalon needs some as well. LOL