VN Ren'Py Completed Avalon [v8.2] [Lockheart]

[a1fox3]

I agree. And I don't know where my head was at when I diverted from my original idea and added that in but I'm in the process of reworking the end of Act 3. We'll see about 6 new scenes, some minor sexual content and remove the Dentist trip altogether. And I've already redone Penny's personality. Improvements are coming! Thank you for enjoying the story!

I almost dropped this VN because of the ending but now I will give it another go.
The story was going great until that ending.

 

[Lockheart]

I almost dropped this VN because of the ending but now I will give it another go.
The story was going great until that ending.

I'm shooting for the end of the week to get it reworked and out. But all the new scenes might set me back a week. We'll see!

 

[a1fox3]

I'm shooting for the end of the week to get it reworked and out. But all the new scenes might set me back a week. We'll see!

Take your time I'm sure it will work out.

Dallas would be a good one to bring some minor sex scenes with MC after that spanking event.
It already shows she has some interest in MC.

 

[Paitryn]

I'm shooting for the end of the week to get it reworked and out. But all the new scenes might set me back a week. We'll see!

Your doing good stuff so just keep at it. And don't let mistakes drag you down. It's ongoing development for a reason

 

[Lockheart]

Take your time I'm sure it will work out.

Dallas would be a good one to bring some minor sex scenes with MC after that spanking event.
It already shows she has some interest in MC.

Yeah, we'll see some raunchy bits with Dallas for sure.

Your doing good stuff so just keep at it. And don't let mistakes drag you down. It's ongoing development for a reason

Thank you! I posted the game specifically to get feedback. Everyone has been so helpful. With this kind of support, I'm sure this is going to be an exceptional game! And it's thanks to the community here at F95.

 

[ontach]

And I've already redone Penny's personality.

I kind of liked her crazy psycho bitch persona. She's the ideal person to get the MC out of the mess with the dentist, and to give the dentist what he deserves.

 

[Lockheart]

I kind of liked her crazy psycho bitch persona. She's the ideal person to get the MC out of the mess with the dentist, and to give the dentist what he deserves.

And that was mostly my thought process. Send a psychopath after a psychopath. New Penny is going to be great though, you'll love her.

 

[Paitryn]

I kind of liked her crazy psycho bitch persona. She's the ideal person to get the MC out of the mess with the dentist, and to give the dentist what he deserves.

Well parts I did and did not like. Can't put my finger on it, but she could use some refinement as a character. I did like how she introduces herself, takes his wallet and more or less puts a perspective to the MC that his world isn't as fair and just as he believes it is or could be. The crazy part was kinda all over the place in the conversation so I could give that one a no thanks. But her actions and decision making I think are good.

 

[Ray1021]

it was good until that ending. Now it looks like someone is going to die in a house fire, no thanks, been there. MC became a total ass in the end!

 

[ontach]

it was good until that ending. Now it looks like someone is going to die in a house fire, no thanks, been there. MC became a total ass in the end!

Yeah. The dev has said he's going to rewrite that bit.

 

[SvenVlad]

Somewhere, in a parallel universe

 

[Watcher X]

I'm shooting for the end of the week to get it reworked and out. But all the new scenes might set me back a week. We'll see!

I agree with everyone that the ending seemed a bit off. I'm looking forward to the re-write, I enjoyed the story so far.

 

[DarkP]

I just played/read the first three acts and I really enjoyed it! I read a few comments so I had an idea something would happen at the end of the third act and by' did it — That was totally unexpected! Dumbass should have listened to Avalon. LOL But glad the trip to the Dentist Office will be removed or reworked because it had some scary implications as it stood.

On to the good stuff... Love the character designs, especially Avalon and Dallas! Byron needs a shave or at-least a trim. Penny... Well, I have no words for her other than — Damn! She could be a lot of fun with her peculiar personality.

Other than the Dentist office scene, I loved what I read and can't wait to read more.

PS: I wouldn't mind seeing more of B spanking Dallas. Hey, perhaps Avalon needs some as well. LOL

 

[SecretDesire]

Avalon and Dallas fooled around and MC said you can fool around with other girls soo it's going to be a lesbian scenes i gues it's a big no for me ... let's see where the road goes i hope there is a choice to allow it or not ..

 

[EvilChef]

Avalon and Dallas fooled around and MC said you can fool around with other girls soo it's going to be a lesbian scenes i gues it's a big no for me ... let's see where the road goes i hope there is a choice to allow it or not ..

Well i chose the cute "Librarian" Octavia myself. No Lesbian action in that one.
I have yet to try Dallas path, guess i'll play that this evening.

 

[SecretDesire]

Well i chose the cute "Librarian" Octavia myself. No Lesbian action in that one.
I have yet to try Dallas path, guess i'll play that this evening.

if lesbian path not avoidable i chose librarian tho but he said you can fool around with girls in librarian path too

 

[Lockheart]

if lesbian path not avoidable i chose librarian tho but he said you can fool around with girls in librarian path too

I didn't have any plans to make it avoidable. It's something you'd be that displeased to see? I'm asking genuinely.

 

[SecretDesire]

I didn't have any plans to make it avoidable. It's something you'd be that displeased to see? I'm asking genuinely.

it's kinda big no for me you know i don't want to see someone i like or love with someone else girl or men don't important

 

[Watcher X]

I didn't have any plans to make it avoidable. It's something you'd be that displeased to see? I'm asking genuinely.

No offense to lesbians out there, but I find girl on girl action pretty boring (unless I'm involved ). I don't find it offensive, but I'm not going to go out of my way to see it either.

 

[Lockheart]

it's kinda big no for me you know i don't want to see someone i like or love with someone else girl or men don't important

Oh! I understand. I hadn't thought about it that way. My brain doesn't make that connection when it comes to lesbian interactions. It's.. like it doesn't count. And I know that's silly. Obviously, it totally does count.

Damn, I know exactly what you're saying though. I hate to do this to you but the plan is for them to have a relatively open relationship between themselves and the side character (Dallas or Octavia). I don't approve of cheating and you won't see cheating between the main characters. But they may swing with each others consent.

I completely understand what you mean now. And I'll consider adding in an option to skip interactions between the side character and the main characters.

Thanks for playing!