- Nov 24, 2019
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Note Dev never addresses the fact that the characters call you gay for not wanting to see it.
Note Dev never addresses the fact that the characters call you gay for not wanting to see it.
So I'm playing the game for the first time, and it's well written. But I give writer's credits when out of the blue there's an unanticipated involuntary reaction to a line in the script. Of the couple hundred games I've played or am following, Maybe 18-20 have produced that reaction. IMHO - that is one of the key things that sets a VN apart from the herd.
Here's yours Heidi says "Are you really complaining about me swallowing something whole?" While eating pizza in their living room.
I nearly pissed myself laughing so hard. Damn devs. Excellent writing! Thanks so much for creating this VN.
Here's yours Heidi says "Are you really complaining about me swallowing something whole?" While eating pizza in their living room.
I nearly pissed myself laughing so hard. Damn devs. Excellent writing! Thanks so much for creating this VN.
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The problem with the Dev changing the words of the characters is that it can quickly become an issue of censorship.
- Dec 14, 2018
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In the midst of playing this update (have a feeling I am almost at the end of it judging by the content) but I have now passed spending time with Zenda twice. I guess I just like Heidi, 'Thena and Mora too much at the moment. Probably going to need a few saves. I know it's not a true harem, but I hope there is a few interesting in sharing. Oh and Val... the MILF/Cougar is amazing, love her.
So far, very much enjoying this Slockie, thanks for a wonderful story here so far.
Edit: Did not mean to leave Storm out either, my only excuse is that it is half past 2am lol
So far, very much enjoying this Slockie, thanks for a wonderful story here so far.
Edit: Did not mean to leave Storm out either, my only excuse is that it is half past 2am lol
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The BAD thing about this VN is the wait for the next update! I'm pretty unforgiving about VNs early in their development. I've only one thing to say to the devs: measured by any metric you've a winner here I sincerely hope you take this story to its ultimate conclusion. Seriously - the sky's the limit on this one, and I can think of maybe 4 other games in development that I'd say that about.
Plus Heidi, besides being unique, is one of the most desirable girls/women I've seen on the games of this site for a very very long time.
Hat's off to the devs! Awesome job.
Plus Heidi, besides being unique, is one of the most desirable girls/women I've seen on the games of this site for a very very long time.
Hat's off to the devs! Awesome job.
The story is all Storm, I'll thank him for you though!
- May 14, 2020
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Is that guy dabbing in the pic ??
I'll give the Game a try but I am going in to it with negative bias now lol
I'll give the Game a try but I am going in to it with negative bias now
lol
- Dec 14, 2018
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My bad, I didn't mean to leave out Storm. My only excuse is it's half past 2 in the morning here lolThe story is all Storm, I'll thank him for you though!
But seriously, now that I have finished this new chapter...
This is fantastic, and your artwork is great... Near the end of this chapter, 2 scenes really caught my eye...
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- Nov 20, 2018
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In fairness, Zenda gives the MC a negative reaction as a consequence. But it's not enough to outweigh all of the positives, so it's all good.Is that guy dabbing in the pic ??
I'll give the Game a try but I am going in to it with negative bias now
- Nov 20, 2018
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Out of curiosity, ⚡Storm⚡ and Slockie, is there a reason save names can't include common non-alphanumeric characters? I've seen other games where this was more or less unrestricted, and the reasoning for it made me curious. I was going to mark a save as "D&D with Mora", but I can't even use the ampersand. Other nice-to-haves would include apostrophes, commas, and periods ("Dexter at Sadie's dorm", "Athena, Heidi, and MC stay in", etc.).
Other nice-to-haves would include apostrophes, commas, and periods ("Dexter at Sadie's dorm", "Athena, Heidi, and MC stay in", etc.).
- Jul 25, 2017
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So I just finished this up until the update.
Wanted to give a couple of comments and thoughts to the Dev.
Firstly Story; What there is seems pretty good, I do think the Mc's reasons for being where he is (in terms of new location, school, ect) is actually pretty good. I am interested to see where the story goes.
The characters are each pretty interesting (or have so little dialogue that its hard to from an opinion, but this could be a early version 0.02a kind of problem).
Graphically; The game is very well done, the characters are well designed and have a good level of detail... I do kind of wonder at what age a 20-21 year old girl would have had to start getting tattoo's and piercings to have amassed so many already.. but thats probably too '4th wall breaking' of a line of thought.
The Choices; are decent enough, I tried the game without walkthrough and it seemed like I was forced to decide how MC spent his time, which inferred a selection regarding the romantic interests.
Criticism:
Overall I found the story good and the graphics very well done. I will likely continue to follow the game and keep playing it (at least for the next update or two).
My recommendation to the Dev (because criticism without recommendation is just bitching), is to maybe be a bit clearer with the dialogue (English is not my first language, so part of this may be my misunderstanding). By clearer what I mean is this. Right now the story comes acroos as a 'free love' kind of game where everyone is just having sex 'in the now'. If that is your intent, I would say your doing very well, but please let players know this.
If your trying to make a deeper story that has some level or romance to it, I think you might want to consider and put more attention towards explaining what/why the characters are choosing for their relationships in the dialogue.
That said,
Thanks for sharing your game.
Best of luck in the future.
P.S
I am a firm supporter of the Dev making their game, their way, my comments/criticism/observations are made to (hopefully) help them with that process.
Wanted to give a couple of comments and thoughts to the Dev.
Firstly Story; What there is seems pretty good, I do think the Mc's reasons for being where he is (in terms of new location, school, ect) is actually pretty good. I am interested to see where the story goes.
The characters are each pretty interesting (or have so little dialogue that its hard to from an opinion, but this could be a early version 0.02a kind of problem).
Graphically; The game is very well done, the characters are well designed and have a good level of detail... I do kind of wonder at what age a 20-21 year old girl would have had to start getting tattoo's and piercings to have amassed so many already.. but thats probably too '4th wall breaking' of a line of thought.
The Choices; are decent enough, I tried the game without walkthrough and it seemed like I was forced to decide how MC spent his time, which inferred a selection regarding the romantic interests.
Criticism:
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Overall I found the story good and the graphics very well done. I will likely continue to follow the game and keep playing it (at least for the next update or two).
My recommendation to the Dev (because criticism without recommendation is just bitching), is to maybe be a bit clearer with the dialogue (English is not my first language, so part of this may be my misunderstanding). By clearer what I mean is this. Right now the story comes acroos as a 'free love' kind of game where everyone is just having sex 'in the now'. If that is your intent, I would say your doing very well, but please let players know this.
If your trying to make a deeper story that has some level or romance to it, I think you might want to consider and put more attention towards explaining what/why the characters are choosing for their relationships in the dialogue.
That said,
Thanks for sharing your game.
Best of luck in the future.
P.S
I am a firm supporter of the Dev making their game, their way, my comments/criticism/observations are made to (hopefully) help them with that process.
Thanks for the honest feedback. We've stated that this game is only going to be 5 chapters long, which means we're almost halfway done. And with 5 LIs, it becomes a tight fit, especially when you factor in poly relationships. We could technically make the game longer and have more relationship building, but in all honesty, this game for us is like a test run to see if we can actually pull game development off. Having said that, we're both putting 110% into this game, and we both seriously enjoy making it. This game will hopefully allows us to gain some experience so we can make our next game that much better (which is planned to be much longer.) Totally fair criticisms on your end, because I personally like games that have fantastic relationship building, which our next game will have.
Thanks for trying it out
- Nov 20, 2018
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During movie night, an image is missing apparently (q77likebothB). Just an FYI. I searched the thread and didn't find a report on this; sorry if I'm duplicating what you already know.
Yup, we got this. We're probably going to release a bugfix patch tomorrow to fix that and some other minor stuff.
Could I get a source/artist for the image used in s4.webp, please?
The forest with the red gate?
The forest with the red gate?
- Oct 8, 2019
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Pretty cool game overall, hot girls, beautiful scenes, intriguing story
It's not perfect but for a first game it's promising
Liked and watch-listed because I'm looking forward for the next update
It's not perfect but for a first game it's promising
Liked and watch-listed because I'm looking forward for the next update