VN Ren'Py Because I Love Her [Ep.1 P1] [The Typist]

[LordofEntropy]

It was a bit sudden admittedly. Even though you were starting to push her that way with some of the stuff you're saying. But given how uptight she is, even if she was a bit curious and some thoughts had started, I agree that she would've flipped out with a naked dude just rolling into the shower and saying "look at my cawk. Now let me rub it against you while your fiance is right outside." The progression should be a bit slower I would think. Like at first her liking the guy checking her out makes sense. I could see her teasing a bit, more exhibitionist as she gets more comfortable. But jumping right to the shower scene as next step was pretty abrupt. Doesn't mean it has to take 20 updates or a year to get to the good stuff, just a bit more build up would make it a bit more exciting. Either that or make her a bit more loose in the beginning, she just seems a bit too uptight to move so fast.

That being said, I like the game so far and it has potential and I look forward to see where it goes.

 

[Deleted member 468469]

Good game for now, maybe too fast like somebody said here. I would like a path, where there is a chance to avoid her from doing another guy, although shes into this kind of lifestyle. But, its just Chapter One and for that, im excited about whats coming up next. Great work, nice renders - im looking forward to your progress.

 

[TheTypist]

It was a bit sudden admittedly. Even though you were starting to push her that way with some of the stuff you're saying. But given how uptight she is, even if she was a bit curious and some thoughts had started, I agree that she would've flipped out with a naked dude just rolling into the shower and saying "look at my cawk. Now let me rub it against you while your fiance is right outside." The progression should be a bit slower I would think. Like at first her liking the guy checking her out makes sense. I could see her teasing a bit, more exhibitionist as she gets more comfortable. But jumping right to the shower scene as next step was pretty abrupt. Doesn't mean it has to take 20 updates or a year to get to the good stuff, just a bit more build up would make it a bit more exciting. Either that or make her a bit more loose in the beginning, she just seems a bit too uptight to move so fast.

That being said, I like the game so far and it has potential and I look forward to see where it goes.

If I can get more legitimate anylizations like this, it’ll definitely help me as I go on from here. Being a first time dev and coding as I go, I can see why the story moves much faster than intended. You’re right about that. Now that I’ll have more time to work on it, I hope to eliminate any chances that events seem to happen too suddenly.
The whole “I hate ntr so blah” type of comments don’t really help me much in terms of evaluating the game. Thank you for your feedback, I hope to work on that aspect of the script writing now.

 

[LordofEntropy]

If I can get more legitimate anylizations like this, it’ll definitely help me as I go on from here. Being a first time dev and coding as I go, I can see why the story moves much faster than intended. You’re right about that. Now that I’ll have more time to work on it, I hope to eliminate any chances that events seem to happen too suddenly.
The whole “I hate ntr so blah” type of comments don’t really help me much in terms of evaluating the game. Thank you for your feedback, I hope to work on that aspect of the script writing now.

More than happy to give feedback, anything to encourage another good game Pacing is always a tricky thing, but it'll come as the story develops. Also we don't know the entire story either. It's completely possible that the fiance maybe has a bit of wild in her past, that she's suppressed in her current relationship and her fiance doesn't know about, which explains why she moves quicker than one might think once the door has been opened a bit Just another possible tool to use in figuring out her progression.

And yeah you'll have to ignore the "I hate NTR" comments, obviously they aren't going to be pleased no matter what since sharing the fiance is obviously a big part of the game.

 

[FaiRTaiL]

This game needs animations.. everything else just perfect

 

[TheTypist]

This game needs animations.. everything else just perfect

I hope to get there, right now im taking the necessary steps to learn it properly, and implement it well
Thank you for the compliment

 

[Amanda Carter]

If I can get more legitimate anylizations like this, it’ll definitely help me as I go on from here. Being a first time dev and coding as I go, I can see why the story moves much faster than intended. You’re right about that. Now that I’ll have more time to work on it, I hope to eliminate any chances that events seem to happen too suddenly.
The whole “I hate ntr so blah” type of comments don’t really help me much in terms of evaluating the game. Thank you for your feedback, I hope to work on that aspect of the script writing now.

If you really love her, let her fly solo. If she really loves you back, she'll find a bull and allow you to watch. penedeyewink:

Seriously though, like Ionascu said, for a good NTR, it is better to show at the start the love between husband&wife. Let them have some private moments (for example a romantic dinner, loving sex, watching TV together.) Then, when the wife is starting to get corrupted, the impact will be much higher.

If you didn't read, you can read "Himawari wa Yoru" from NTR sensei Takeda Hiromitsu. Look how he is structuring his story although he only has 45 pages to tell it; The wife prepares his husband to go to work, they kiss, they speak with children, think about having a kid and have sex. That is why when NTR hits, anyone who read the story becomes mad.

Keep it slow and sexy, the wife having sex with the others does not mean she doesn't have sex with his husband. But slowly, the wife must realise cheating is better and his husband can not satisfy it. She must keep being sorry until the end of story of cheating, NTR fans love seeing the wife saying she is sorry to his husband during sex. After the sex scenes (end of each update) you can write what the wifes thinking. Let the player see how her mindset is slowly changing, this will make the corruption better. Good Girl Gone Bad does that perfectly.

There is the hentai i mentioned;

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[trumpthatbitch]

This game is awful the reason why I hate NTR is it so often poorly done. For example the roommate who is in love with the MC supposedly forever gets irritated because a waitress hits on you then sucks a random dude in the washroom despite being a virgin.

How is that remotely believable? Not even in pornland does that make any logical sense. Then the GF gets excited because of a black man and instead of blushing acts like a slut and flashes him. Just awful like the game doesn't have to be shakespeare but don't insult my intelligence with this garbage.

Literally the MC is supposed to be surrounded by delicate flowers but instead they are just sluts. Like is the character supposed to even be upset? Plus there is zero non NTR content written it basically just skips to next scene.

 

[a55555]

dude amazing game...if you keep this up it will be the best h game

 

[Eye-switcher]

Really good game, thanks for doing this. Its so rare to see a true NTR game, really like it. I Think the Writing was alittle better in this update too, good job.

 

[TheTypist]

Really good game, thanks for doing this. Its so rare to see a true NTR game, really like it. I Think the Writing was alittle better in this update too, good job.

Thank you

 

[Tony_Stark]

before it's not too late, just drop the non ntr route :test:

 

[dunloprobert]

maybe change it to optional love route?

 

[XJ347]

Impressions on 0.1.0

• When players have to name their characters it's always a bad sign, since they end up generic.
• Renders are only stills, but they look good.
• Breaking the 4th wall toooo much in the intro IMO.
• Everyone is innocent... Very cliche.
• To much narration in the intro.
• Dialogue assumes the main character is a jealous asshat.
  
• You "Let her go"? Feels so old fashioned that it breaks immersion.
• Game makes you make decisions that aren't your character. This breaks immersion.
  
• Black guy to be the NTR rival. /sigh
• It's in English but doesn't always flow. Note it's slightly above average, but nothing outstanding.

Overall my gut says this is just average filler. There are soooo many cliches, and the author needs to spend more time writing and editing in the future. I hope this continues but the plot and writing need to improve if people are going to bond to this game.

 

[Bryan_Colt]

Nice game the title should be "Because i want to fuck her until she squirts" then ask her did your orgasm was fake (insert evil laugh).

 

[ustar]

I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred.

While running game code:
ScriptError: could not find label 'encch1'.

-- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------

Full traceback:
  File "script.rpyc", line 1713, in script
  File "Z:\BecauseILoveHer-Chapter1.1-pc\renpy\ast.py", line 1600, in execute
    rv = renpy.game.script.lookup(target)
  File "Z:\BecauseILoveHer-Chapter1.1-pc\renpy\script.py", line 873, in lookup
    raise ScriptError("could not find label '%s'." % str(original))
ScriptError: could not find label 'encch1'.

Ren'Py 7.0.0.196
Because I Love Her Chapter1.1

 

[Fred Flintstone]

If you had too many lust points, it does lead to it. The only way to get those points is through making those choices. I’ll have to look into this, I’m sorry if that happened incorrectly. I’ll be reading over the script and playing through to find a mistake somewhere.

If it was due to lust points, why didn't she just do the thing she was talking about the night before with her fiance instead of just turning her back and going to sleep?

 

[Reese286]

Nope, not for me, Oh well. In life you learn the lesson or embrace the definition of insanity. Once she cheats, kick her ass to the curb... FIN. If you have so little self respect you allow it then you get what you deserve, because she does not love you.

 

[Faining]

Just milk the NTR fetish no matter how good or bad the game really is they will say its good just add cuckold into the game and they will blow a load all over there screens no matter how ridiculous the scenarios are just make sure the Mc never gets any and it will be relatively popular among the community your aiming for good luck not the you need it with what i have read above they already think its good have fun

 

[jojo84]

This was amazing, as it has been said before: "To quick in taking actions, like the shower scene and so on..." But other than that, really nice. Can't wait for a good developed story!!! Keep it up!