VN Ren'Py Being a DIK [v0.10.1] [DrPinkCake]

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ChipLecsap

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SpearOfReigns said:
I agree. DPC smut-writing skill during sex scenes has been lacking in my opinion which is funny because I think He is a great writer in term of dialogues in normal scenes
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I didn't play to many of porn game, aside from some of the more know game. And I personally prefer his writing style over everyone else. And that goes to the Sex scenes too. I prefer his approach of : I Show you, rather than describing to you what is happening . There is nothing more Cringe, than reading as someone try to write a tolkien novel, under a porn image. :rolleyes: - " As you penetrate inside of her, she lets out a moan as her pussy tightening around your cock " - :ROFLMAO:.
and other similar masterpiece writing :ROFLMAO:.

HE did it once with the Jill masturbation scene, and yeah ..... . But the difference was that it was at least a character inner monologue, rather than the author try to talk to the Player.
And DPC usually drop this , you have the first or second encounter, where the characters, or more specifically the girls have inner monologue during sex, but in the second or third time, once he shown this , HE drop this. MC may or may not still have a couple of inner thought, but usually it is a back and forth conversation between the characters, what is makes it more "real". - it is end up as a conversation about what they like or don't like, is this feels good or not. "dirty Talk " or "role play talk" - etc.

I might be alone but I prefer this over, the other writers :)
 
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DogWagger89 said:
Jill is popular because she has the best model, but her story is awful. It has to integrated into the wider story with the rest of the cast instead of just Bella. I get that she could be shy due to past experiences but the idea that she's a junior in college who has no friends but the librarian is moronic.



It would be much better if Jill had bad sexual experiences in the past, not rape or anything just shitty boyfriends, that make her weary of getting into another relationship. Instead they went with the idea that she is a socially stunted virgin who doesn't know how to flirt (but actually knows how to expertly tease you with the way she dresses because this is still a porn game). The blackmail storyline is dumb, there is no defining it. I could buy that Jill is forced to deal with Tybalt due to social obligations foisted onto her by her parents, but date him or he'll tattle on this guy she has a crush on is dumb. Speaking of Tybalt, he is a idiotic character who is even more socially stunted than Jill. It's not even fun to get one over on him because he's so pathetic. He's not a good foil for the MC, he's just a punching bag. It would make more sense for Jill, who we're supposed to believe is from a rich and affluent family, presumably old money, would know how to socially interact with people and pick up on social cues like Tybalt being a doofy creep. The fact that Jill lives in the frat with them is dumb too, but that was done for whatever reason.



Pretty much. Even Maya has a less than stellar storyline because DPC either doesn't know you don't need a cosigner for most student loans or chose to ignore that for dramatic reasons. Maya seems smart, she'd probably get some scholarship money for college anyway. But Maya being a virgin at 18 is much more believable than Jill. Maya sorta likes girls maybe for one so no dudes.
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I've really struggled to define why I don't like Jill, and this helped organize my thoughts. I don't feel any chemistry between my MC and Jill, instead I think she would piss him off. I had my MC get upset with her when she involves herself in the Chad situation because it wasn't her place to say anything. In general she treats the MC like a child and all I can think is how much any guy would hate it if I did that. She's sweet and naive to the point of being boring. Simultaneously I feel like she is so socially stunted that my MC would want nothing to do with her.

After the picnic in episode 6 I decided to go back and not go out with her. As cute as that scene is, it was a deal breaker how concerned she was about Tybalt and the blackmail. My MC has avoided characters like Quinn precisely because of the drama around her, why would the same MC tolerate Jill?

Nope, my MC is just going to keep sleeping with Nicole and Jade, Bella, and maybe Sage. He's going to keep hanging out with his bros, and keep up his grades. Jill is a nice girl, but she isn't the right fit for my freewheeler MC.
 
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I actually agree in some way with BorgiaBou because DPC has no incentive to speed up the process. There are suckers out there shelling out 100$ a month on this game. That's a lot of money for one game. That's more than the price of any AAA game out there. He can easily hire just one person to help out, but he refuses to do so .... ego? greed? At this rate, the game is most likely going to finish in maybe 2025 .... if we are lucky. I have no issues with buying a complete product on Steam. I do it all the time, my steam list is growing endlessly. It's absolutely insane to drop that amount money per month and for how many years?
 
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JETracktor said:
I think the best punishment for him would be the realization of MC's relationship with Jade.
Going to his daddy to tell the news and Burke be like "I know". Pretty sure he's gonna lose it :KEK:
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Man, there really is no coming back from your enemy fucking your mom. What's the rebuttal to that? Like how do you respond to the guy who stole your obsession away also deep cleaning your mom's vaginal interior and shooting the club up afterwards?

Tybalt would have to kill MC. It's the only response.
 
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zajaz said:
Damn, I actually hope those rumours are not true. I mean, I'm sort of a (pretty crappy) amateur writer myself, and I get how crushing hearing criticism is (specially after working your ass off all night on a story), but you must also keep in mind that chances are... you are not the best writer there ever was. You must try to be objective when it comes to the way other people look at your work (although good luck with that, trust me; if you think that sounds really hard... let me tell you it's way harder than that).
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I have no talent for writing fiction myself but at the same time I don't think this should disqualify me from having opinions about things I see and read. Beyond really basic academic stuff I'm useless, thank God I don't have to do that anymore, but Jill is the weakest point of the story, which is serviceable and campy, not a work of genius. Even beyond her being poorly integrated with the rest of the cast, she's unbelievably naive. It's absurd, but I think DPC has the all the major story points mapped out beforehand so there's no turning back now.
 
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seniorboop said:
Man, there really is no coming back from your enemy fucking your mom. What's the rebuttal to that? Like how do you respond to the guy who stole your obsession away also deep cleaning your mom's vaginal interior and shooting the club up afterwards?

Tybalt would have to kill MC. It's the only response.
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Or he might play the card to finally get in Jill's underwear.
 
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Machete said:
Or he might play the card to finally get in Jill's underwear.
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I support this just to witness the fallout. Jill fans would ship themselves via FedEx overnight shipping to Sweden or wherever DPC is from just to protest and it would be glorious.
 
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It's kinda sad that Jills face turned out the way it did. I'm not sure what came first but her 2D gallery makes her look gorgeous. Still I get this weird urge to pursue her further, if not for me then for the future of my family. I mean, girls marry rich all the time. I can do that too and be a trophy husband that just smiles and nods.
 
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