- Jun 10, 2017
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Nice story. Its definitely engaging, even if it does feel a bit rushed sometimes. I would recommend getting a script proofreader for some of the errors like messed up pronouns and stuff. Over all I liked it a lot. Still I can't help but feel a little bad for Maya, she seemed to genuinely like Ethan, and she never got the opportunity to learn the truth. So her response to finding out about his betrayal was kind of justified without knowing what Hera did. I get that Ethan is super protective, but of all the slaves I feel like she didn't deserve it.
Also I hope everyone gets their memories back. Monica especially would be interesting to see struggling with her current love and past hate
Also I hope everyone gets their memories back. Monica especially would be interesting to see struggling with her current love and past hate