Dear Mando, you forgot one essential detail!
Give it to the public immediately!Max is doing it on purpose, its all a setup to show the girls the true face of Victor. Max is being so insidiously sneaky in this storyline, he actually almost makes Eric look like a good person haha its greatDear Bruno, you surprised me with that scene (Eric\Max).
At this point, Max must be 19.5 years old and his body is undergoing the most intense changes, in terms of increased strength and endurance. Max, was incarcerated for 2 years, where he spent a VERY long time building up his strength and endurance with daily training, which he no doubt did, judging by his changed appearance.
Eric (Victor), during those two years, the only thing he did was to fuck himself to death, losing his health and strength completely.
So, what have you shown us?
Max, without much trouble, can impose on Eric (Victor) so that he will piss blood for six months!
And what do we see? A strange scene!
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Bonjour à tout les deux.
Dear Bruno, of course the concept of first strike is clear and undeniable
. But more importantly, what happens next in your story, what Max's plan is. So far, Max is acting, surprisingly, quite sensibly.
Je pense que tu peu trouver une partie de la réponse pages 436Dear Bruno, of course the concept of first strike is clear and undeniable
For myself, I took for myself the most correct explanation that Falco described.
Looking forward to the rest of the story to learn about the concept of Bruno's plan.
Dear Friend Bruno
Ornella : Ce n’est pas en frappant Max que ça va vous empêcher de sombrer vous savez ? Alice c’est rendu compte de l’ordure que vous êtes, elle en parlera à sa mère et à sa sœur…
Ornella : It's not by hitting Max that it will stop you from sinking, you know ? Alice is aware of what a scumbag you are, she'll tell her mother and her sister...
Victor : Ne compte pas là-dessus, j’ai dis à cette salope que si elle parlait, j’enverrai sa sœur travailler dans tous les pires bars à pute de la ville…
Victor : Don't count on it, I told that bitch that if she talks, I'll send her sister to work in every worst whore bar in town…
Anne / Lisa : *Voix étouffée* Ah !
Anne / Lisa : *Muffled voice* Ah !
Annicka : *chuchotement* Silence ! *voix compatissante* je suis désolé Anne…
Annicka : *whispering* Quiet ! *(sympathetic voice) I'm sorry, Anne...
Victor : …En suite je l’ai plaqué sur son lit et je l’ai baiser en lui faisant comprendre que j’avais des tonnes d’amis qui serait très intéressé pour baiser sa mère pendant qu’elle est ligotée et bâillonnée !
Victor : …Then I put him on his bed and fucked him, making him understand that I have tons of friends who would be very interested in fucking his mother while she is tied up and gagged!
Annicka : *chuchotement* Tenez bon Anne, c’est bientôt terminé.
Annicka : *whispering* Hold on Anne, it's almost over.
Anne : *murmure plaintif* Non, non, non !
Anne : *whimpering plaintively* No, no, no!
Lisa : (Alice ! Vite je dois aller la voir !)
Lisa : (Alice ! Hurry I have to go see her !)
Ornella : Ça y est Max, tes soucis sont terminés, ta mère viens enfin de voir le vrai visage de l’homme qu’elle aimait… Aller relève-toi, ta mère te regarde, montre-lui ce qu’il en coûte à ceux qui lui font du mal !
Ornella : That's it Max, your worries are over, your mother has finally seen the true face of the man she loved... Come on, get up, your mother is watching you, show her what it costs to those who hurt her!
Max : … ??? … maman ?
Max : … ??? … mom?
Victor : Anne !? Non attends je vais t’expli…
Victor : Anne !? No wait, I'll explain...
Anne : Ferme ta putain de gueule espèce de sous merde répugnante. Tu me donne envie de vomir !
Anne : Shut the fuck up you disgusting piece of shit. You make me want to vomit !
Ornella : échec et mat Victor !
Ornella : Checkmate Victor !
Max : Je n’ai pas tout compris à ce qui viens de se passer mais le résulta me va quand-même…
Max : I didn't understand everything that just happened but I'm ok with the result...
, this:
I expected it a little differently, but considering all the circumstances your solution is even better.
Ornella : Ce n’est pas en frappant Max que ça va vous empêcher de sombrer vous savez ? Alice c’est rendu compte de l’ordure que vous êtes, elle en parlera à sa mère et à sa sœur…
Ornella : It's not by hitting Max that it will stop you from sinking, you know ? Alice is aware of what a scumbag you are, she'll tell her mother and her sister...
Victor : Ne compte pas là-dessus, j’ai dis à cette salope que si elle parlait, j’enverrai sa sœur travailler dans tous les pires bars à pute de la ville…
Victor : Don't count on it, I told that bitch that if she talks, I'll send her sister to work in every worst whore bar in town…
Anne / Lisa : *Voix étouffée* Ah !
Anne / Lisa : *Muffled voice* Ah !
Annicka : *chuchotement* Silence ! *voix compatissante* je suis désolé Anne…
Annicka : *whispering* Quiet ! *(sympathetic voice) I'm sorry, Anne...
Victor : …En suite je l’ai plaqué sur son lit et je l’ai baiser en lui faisant comprendre que j’avais des tonnes d’amis qui serait très intéressé pour baiser sa mère pendant qu’elle est ligotée et bâillonnée !
Victor : …Then I put him on his bed and fucked him, making him understand that I have tons of friends who would be very interested in fucking his mother while she is tied up and gagged!
Annicka : *chuchotement* Tenez bon Anne, c’est bientôt terminé.
Annicka : *whispering* Hold on Anne, it's almost over.
Anne : *murmure plaintif* Non, non, non !
Anne : *whimpering plaintively* No, no, no!
Lisa : (Alice ! Vite je dois aller la voir !)
Lisa : (Alice ! Hurry I have to go see her !)
Ornella : Ça y est Max, tes soucis sont terminés, ta mère viens enfin de voir le vrai visage de l’homme qu’elle aimait… Aller relève-toi, ta mère te regarde, montre-lui ce qu’il en coûte à ceux qui lui font du mal !
Ornella : That's it Max, your worries are over, your mother has finally seen the true face of the man she loved... Come on, get up, your mother is watching you, show her what it costs to those who hurt her!
Max : … ??? … maman ?
Max : … ??? … mom?
Victor : Anne !? Non attends je vais t’expli…
Victor : Anne !? No wait, I'll explain...
Anne : Ferme ta putain de gueule espèce de sous merde répugnante. Tu me donne envie de vomir !
Anne : Shut the fuck up you disgusting piece of shit. You make me want to vomit !
Ornella : échec et mat Victor !
Ornella : Checkmate Victor !
Max : Je n’ai pas tout compris à ce qui viens de se passer mais le résulta me va quand-même…
Max : I didn't understand everything that just happened but I'm ok with the result...
). I would have left these three traitorous horny whores they call them self family, even if the story of the engagement to Ornella was a lie.) . The idea of sending someone from the family there and thinking that the person will return to you like better person, as if nothing had happened, is really ridiculous.Lofi, you're right about a lot of things.I expected it a little differently, but considering all the circumstances your solution is even better.
Still after revenge on Eric (because it would be probably the only goal and reason to come back
(Only naive Lisa looks pretty innocent about it in your story.
A family that would falsely accuse me and send me to prison with an army program for two years. Because they were convinced of that by my mother's boyfriend. Whom they know for a few months and not me, the family member. There are things that are not so easy to forgive and therefore i would never want to see them again.
Perhaps I have a bad idea of what a military camp is. In my country such a thing does not exist, but from my point of view, if you don't want to join the army. It's just a prison with an army regime, which is even worse than the prison itself
Please don't get me wrong i think it is great story and i love it, pretty please continue i have to see your grand finale.
, as outlined, does not exist in the American penitentiary system in principle.Well, that makes a lot more sense. So if it's only a military camp for three months and let's say Eric was able to block the mail and tell the girls he just didn't want to come back, for example. ok ok much more sense.Lofi, you're right about a lot of things.
In Bruno's concept of storytelling, there was an initial error. That form of content
A version of where Max was, optimally, might have looked like this. Under the influence of Eric's lies, Ann sends Max to a summer scout camp, with a military bias (for 3 summer months), from her point of view, there is nothing particularly objectionable about it. But! Eric falsifies Max's prosecution, incognito, several times by sending drugs in the mail. The camp management (bribed by Eric) initiates the case, referring it to the regular (civilian investigation. The judge, in spite of insufficient evidence (without a jury trial) imposes a sentence of TWO years in prison, with minimum security confinement (this type of confinement does exist). Next, the letters (from family members) are perforated and eliminated.
Max feels betrayed and abandoned.
The family feels that Max is offended (it is not clear why) and does not want to communicate.
This, a sensible preamble. Next, other considerations in the development of the plot.
In the end, Max served 2 years in prison for 3 months in a camp, abandoned and betrayed, from his point of view, by his family, which is, in fact, relative - the truth.
And so on.
I apologize for my Google English.
P.S. By the way, Lisa, exactly in the interpretation of this story, is still a little whore, not only that she, after two years of maneuvering, put her little cunt under Eric's dick, she also in the last sentence, after sex with Max, in fact said - Oh, see how I learned to suck dicks from Uncle Eric, what a master, I probably should continue and learn other skills to become a real whore bitch. That's about it - innocence. Sad and unfair.
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With her fucking Eric, it's a tax that he just wasn't there. Sure could be reason to hate her too. They are whores but after 2 years of influence of Eric....Max himself tried to make them before Eric.
Salut lofi.Well, that makes a lot more sense. So if it's only a military camp for three months and let's say Eric was able to block the mail and tell the girls he just didn't want to come back, for example. ok ok much more sense.
But then I miss the reason why he hated girls for leaving him when they thought he had left them.
however, thanks for the explanation i knew i got something wrong.
As for Lisa, I meant more innocence for sending him to military camp.
But after this explanation i don't see much more reason to max leave, after kill Eric of course.
Still thank you
et, en lisant vos commentaires, je m’aperçois qu'effectivement, j'ai oublié de préciser énormément de choses ! Oups... and, reading your comments, I realize that I forgot to specify a lot of things! Oops...Dear Lofi.Well, that makes a lot more sense. So if it's only a military camp for three months and let's say Eric was able to block the mail and tell the girls he just didn't want to come back, for example. ok ok much more sense.
But then I miss the reason why he hated girls for leaving him when they thought he had left them.
however, thanks for the explanation i knew i got something wrong.
As for Lisa, I meant more innocence for sending him to military camp.
But after this explanation i don't see much more reason to max leave, after kill Eric of course.
Still thank you
is deeply thankful, is about what happened AFTER those two years) disappears.Brother Bruno, you are my fair hero.
Ornella : On a changé le plan, tu es bien meilleur amant que comédien. Tu devais avoir l’air réellement désemparé…
Ornella : We changed the plan, you are a much better lover than actor. You must have looked really distraught...
Victor : Je le savais, c’était un coup-monté ! Toi, ta salope de copine et sa mè…
Victor : I knew it, it was a set-up! You, your slutty girlfriend and her mot...
Max : Je t’interdis de lui parler comme ça !!!
Max : Don't you dare talk to her like that !!!
Victor : Humpf !
Victor : Humpf !
Anne : houai, vas-y mon chéri, pète lui la gueule !!!
Anne : go ahead darling, break his face !!!
Max : Avec plaisir. Aller viens là espèce de détraqué, je vais te faire voir ce que j’ai appris en deux ans ! Et cette fois tu ne me prendras en traitre…
Max : With pleasure. Come here you crazy bastard, I'll show you what I've learned in two years ! And this time you won't take me as a traitor...
Victor : Enfin je vais pourvoir passer mes nerfs sur toi, ça faisait longtemps que j’attendais…
Victor : At last I'm going to be able to take my nerves out on you, I've been waiting a long time...
Victor : …ce moment !
Victor : …this moment !
Max : lent et grossier. Ton attaque ne valait même pas celle d’un enfant…
Max : Slow and rude. Your attack wasn't even worth a child's...
Victor : ARGH ??? Tu va me le payer petit merdeux…
Victor : ARGH ??? You're going to pay for this little shit...
! What an emotion, what a pose, well, just a masterpiece rendering!For me, it's easy to draw conclusions with a view of the whole situation, but I couldn't quite see the view and the reasons for the characters.Salut lofi.
Voici quelques éléments de réponses.
L'amour et la haine sont pratiquement indissociable... Max reproche aux filles de ne pas voir Eric comme lui le vois. Lorsqu'elles se sont rangées du côté d'Eric, Max s'est senti trahi et son amour s'est changé en haine. Il le dit à sa mère quand elle vient le voir le matin : "Je vous déteste à la hauteur de ma tristesse".
Max sait qu'Eric contrôle tout et tout le monde, et qu'il a également réussi à intercepté toutes ses tentatives de communication avec sa mère. A l'arrivée, Max est persuadé que sa propre famille le vois comme quelqu'un qui a mal tourné. De son point de vue, détesté et chassé par sa propre famille (les personnes qu'il aimait), il ne lui reste plus que la vengeance pour ne pas finir de perdre la raison.
Bon, après je ne suis pas scénariste
Hi lofi.
Here are some answers.
Love and hate are practically inseparable... Max blames the girls for not seeing Eric the way he does. When they sided with Eric, Max felt betrayed and his love turned to hate. He tells his mother when she comes to see him in the morning: "I hate you to the extent of my sadness".
Max knows that Eric controls everything and everyone, and that he has also managed to intercept all his attempts to communicate with his mother. In the end, Max is convinced that his own family sees him as someone who has gone wrong. From his point of view, hated and hunted by his own family (the people he loved), he is left with nothing but revenge to keep him from losing his mind.
Well, I'm not a scriptwriter
sorry I've seen too many moviesDear friend Rolmak
, this rendering is definitely one of your best works.
