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not all stories are told in order.
I thought that gut shot scene was supposed to be a flashback, The PTSD of this event is the reason why you are talking to a shrink in the opening scene.
Just how I see it, I don't have any kind of inside knowledge,
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The reason why the mc is seeing a therapist is because of the incident with the student that killed herself. It doesn't even make sense for the gunshot scene to be a flashback. The whole Luna story with the mafia happens after the mc starts teaching again.
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I don't know what kind of crowd would be appeased by a blink and miss it update.
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How the fuck would someone be able to shoot him when you can't even see him?
Flashbacks happen whenever they want that's why they are flashbacks
but yeah I'm not arguing with you, I never read the story too closely, that is just the assumption I jumped too, as you said recovering from a near death injury in such a short time is just silly (unless he has supernatural abilities),
are we sure he isn't in a coma and this story is just a dream?
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Oh god... please don't even give the dev any more bad ideas.Flashbacks happen whenever they want that's why they are flashbacks
but yeah I'm not arguing with you, I never read the story too closely, that is just the assumption I jumped too, as you said recovering from a near death injury in such a short time is just silly (unless he has supernatural abilities),
are we sure he isn't in a coma and this story is just a dream?
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Luck. Or a load of guns.
But all jokes about John Cena's teacher doppelganger/clone aside:
I feel like the Dev needs someone to help him with the plot and also tell him sometimes when ideas aren't working. Or alternatively, a big whiteboard with thumbtacks and strings connecting the slips of paper (that have notes on events).
What about spelling in the 0.4 version? Is it still improvable?
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Yeah the spelling and the grammar could still be improved. I think the main issue with some of these games is that devs, for some reason, overcomplicate and add too much drama way too soon.
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At least the other game with a father deliver pretty damn good update.I am not talking about DMD.
At this point im just ashamed of myself for still downloading it and fapping to it... The conservations and inner monologues are outright dumb and just one scene after another to show off the girls.
The game had such a good start but with the rework after the "dream" the story got absolute bad...
It feels like dev is pissed that the community didnt like the vision. Its like "Yeah!? You hate my plans for the game/story?! OK then, here is the most basic fap material you can get! Have fun with it but dont ever bother me with a new/good story again!"
The game had such a good start but with the rework after the "dream" the story got absolute bad...
It feels like dev is pissed that the community didnt like the vision. Its like "Yeah!? You hate my plans for the game/story?! OK then, here is the most basic fap material you can get! Have fun with it but dont ever bother me with a new/good story again!"
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This kind of implies that the mafia storyline was good, which it was not.
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What? No! In the first couple of versions there was nothing like that and the game was just a corruption/school game and THAT was great!
The mafia part just came with the update with Luna and THAT was the only one. Then came massive community backlash and it was changes to "just a dream" There was a whole text about the matter from dev on the discord server.
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This is where I left off. Was enjoying up to that point.
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Out of interest, blacklash on the dev's discord by paying customers or
the usual entitled outcry of non-backers complaining about stuff they pirate
on THIS VERY pirate site?
A lot of folks tend to ignore the fact that this a pirate board and
NOT the offical renpy / DAZ3D AVN community.
Also a lot of devs that have been active on this board have been driven
away by...lets just say overly entitled kiddy bullcrap as I don't want
to offend those faint-hearted little flowers or they might give me
a facepalm emote and thus ruin my day!
Anywho I find it sad that parts of the community drive creators away with their behavior.
I rarely comment on stuff that I do not like about a VN as I go by
"if you do not have anything meaningful to say don't bother saying anything at all".
Saying that one personally does not like a certain thing for personal preferences
is not meaning full or constructive critisim.
But in this case I gotta openly admit that I am a bit confused about the latest update.
I am so because of the story progression. To me the MC having intercourse with Luna
seems premature or rather out of place at this early point in the story.
To me there was no built up. If one wanted to add sex scenes early in the story
the wife is the most logic partner for doing that. And / or the sister as the MC
and her seem to have past relationship in that direction.
And for me that would be a part of the story that I would have liked to been advanced
and also everything revolving around the school and the class.
Conquering the "tenants" and "best friend's tenants" usually is the price or goal at the end
and thus the Luna scene at this time of the story felt out of place for me.
Also I admit having skipped some dialogue but wasn't there earlier on talk about the sister
moving in with the MC because of her divorce? So why did the MC drive over to their house?
So I have to agree with some folk here saying that the story seems a bit all over the place.
But it could also be because we don't have the full story yet.
It could all make sense in 5 or 6 updates time.
And that's exaclty what I will do, sitting out a couple of updates.
Btw. the earlier Luna / Motel arc was not that bad. And I can understand that in the early parts
creation of their VN the dev had tons of different ideas and those changing as the VN started to
take shape and sometimes it's difficult to let go of a particular idea that you are really fond of.
I do not understand the outcry about it when it happend.
ANd it's not like everyone is happy now anyway, right?
Lesson in life: One can never ever please freaking everone.
Yup, more than 2 lines of text and thus impossible to handle for lot of folks nowadays.
Kinda sad too. Humanity is on the decline.
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It depends on how the criticism is communicated. Yes, there was some destructive criticism, but some people, including myself, tried to criticize constructively.
The problems that many had with the motel update:
1. the protagonist was established as more or less faithful (depending on the player's choices). In the Mafia update, he then jumped everything female that wasn't on the trees, namely a stranger in a restroom at a rest stop or gas station and a runaway on a drug trip.
2. the protagonist said about himself that he could handle small monsters. That was in the first version. In the Mafia update, he then punched his niece in the face with his clenched fist, if I'm not mistaken, after he could no longer stand her taunting (she was also on a bad drug trip).
3. the lack of decisions. In the entire update, there was no decision that mattered in any way. There were a few dialogue options, but they had no impact. Also, the events from points 1 and 2 happen regardless of what you choose. In the end, this update could have been a video clip and it wouldn't have made a difference.
4. the shot in the stomach: as already mentioned, assuming he survives this at all, would entail a rehabilitation period of a few months. From the psychological consequences that could take years to the end of his life (which in the worst case would be just a few minutes if our John Cena is unlucky) serious consequences (PTSD) and ensure that he can never do his job again. As I said, if he survives at all. In short, the dev has thereby taken his own protagonist out of the story. Without the chance that you as a reader and viewer can somehow act to avoid this.
5. If this mafia story was planned from the beginning, then it was simply poorly communicated. The rascal in me would call that misleading advertising, so to speak. In general, this mafia story was more irritating than anything else. If the dev wanted to make a mafia story, then he should have communicated it directly that way. Then everyone would have known what to expect and there would have been less scolding. In short, we have either a story that is not what it was advertised as or a dev who doesn't know where he wants to go with his story. Where I come from we have a saying: too many cooks spoil the broth. Especially since the advertised premise of this VN, as already listed by me before would have provided enough ideas for the plot without having to come up with a rather forced Mafia plot.
Imagine watching Lord of the Rings on blueray, for example, and in the middle of the film it's no longer Lord of the Rings but a Rosamunde Pilcher love story.
The problems that many had with the motel update:
1. the protagonist was established as more or less faithful (depending on the player's choices). In the Mafia update, he then jumped everything female that wasn't on the trees, namely a stranger in a restroom at a rest stop or gas station and a runaway on a drug trip.
2. the protagonist said about himself that he could handle small monsters. That was in the first version. In the Mafia update, he then punched his niece in the face with his clenched fist, if I'm not mistaken, after he could no longer stand her taunting (she was also on a bad drug trip).
3. the lack of decisions. In the entire update, there was no decision that mattered in any way. There were a few dialogue options, but they had no impact. Also, the events from points 1 and 2 happen regardless of what you choose. In the end, this update could have been a video clip and it wouldn't have made a difference.
4. the shot in the stomach: as already mentioned, assuming he survives this at all, would entail a rehabilitation period of a few months. From the psychological consequences that could take years to the end of his life (which in the worst case would be just a few minutes if our John Cena is unlucky) serious consequences (PTSD) and ensure that he can never do his job again. As I said, if he survives at all. In short, the dev has thereby taken his own protagonist out of the story. Without the chance that you as a reader and viewer can somehow act to avoid this.
5. If this mafia story was planned from the beginning, then it was simply poorly communicated. The rascal in me would call that misleading advertising, so to speak. In general, this mafia story was more irritating than anything else. If the dev wanted to make a mafia story, then he should have communicated it directly that way. Then everyone would have known what to expect and there would have been less scolding. In short, we have either a story that is not what it was advertised as or a dev who doesn't know where he wants to go with his story. Where I come from we have a saying: too many cooks spoil the broth. Especially since the advertised premise of this VN, as already listed by me before would have provided enough ideas for the plot without having to come up with a rather forced Mafia plot.
Imagine watching Lord of the Rings on blueray, for example, and in the middle of the film it's no longer Lord of the Rings but a Rosamunde Pilcher love story.