Hey Dev,
some constructive criticism ... you should stop using so many panning shots of the girls. It is frustrating since it disrupts the flow of the game, having to wait several seconds as the camera slowly tracks upwards was annoying to me. More so since you used it so often.
Also, why do you have a navigation system? It does not seem to add anything, only serves as an unnecessary stopgap in the gameplay. You could take it out of the game and nothing would be different, in my experience.
Lastly I can see that English is not your native language, so you should really get a proofreader. Some of the dialog made little to no sense.
Please keep in mind that these are simply my thoughts and opinions on the game so far.