VN Ren'Py Abandoned Connected [v0.2.5] [ChainZero]

[Deleted member 444674]

Great game so far. Nice renders and I really like Ayana.

The only criticism I have is that I am not a fan of the MC because he feels like a bit of a doormat. It seemed to me like he was far too dependent on Ayana and could not stand up for himself and the choices he made. The sex scene was nice but it felt extremely out of place. Why would Ayana have a boyfriend if she was having sexual relationship with the MC? Their relationship at least the way the MC describes it does not make any sense. Does she love him? Or is she just using him when she is bored? Does she even see him as a friend (since she had no problem cutting contact with him because of her ex)?

But other than that it was fun and I cant wait to see what this game will look like after a few more months.

Edit:

Just saw your other responses and here is what I have to say - them being so close and caring about each other so much and yet just being fuckbuddies feels really off. I personally think it would have been a lot better if you either 1) Let them be as close as you describe in the game but take the romance slow or 2) Let them be fuckbuddies but dont make them as close as you describe in the game - just let them have a casual friendship instead. A combination of the two feels a bit weird to me.

It’s meant to be weird. It’s not supposed to make that much sense. The general confusion about their relationship is due to my lack of proper explanation. Things were either understated or overstated so it became a bit jumbled. If possible, I’d like to go back in the text and revise some things but them being as close while also having a sexual relationship is meant to be something that’s weird and you’ll see characters express the weirdness of it.

That’s all I can say about that without giving away too much, but there is an arc here. The start of it just wasn’t as well thought out as it should’ve been, especially for a first release.

Thanks for the feedback though. I’m glad you enjoyed it otherwise.

 

[TiffanyMonroe]

So basically she was cheating on her boyfriend with the mc and then was sad when her bf cheated on her and then dumped her? lol Thot logic. Also is the mc mixed race? Some renders of his face and the thot almost calling him the n-word makes me think he is. His mom putting him up for adoption to hide that she got blacked makes sense. Don't feel like reading 10 pages so all of this is probably already brought up.
As long as we can keep Ayana as a side chick this game should be pretty good.

 

[VDawe]

So basically she was cheating on her boyfriend with the mc and then was sad when her bf cheated on her and then dumped her? lol Thot logic. Also is the mc mixed race? Some renders of his face and the thot almost calling him the n-word makes me think he is. His mom putting him up for adoption to hide that she got blacked makes sense. Don't feel like reading 10 pages so all of this is probably already brought up.
As long as we can keep Ayana as a side chick this game should be pretty good.

Yes mc and his twinsister (middle girl on banner) are mixed race, Zero said he will work on the mc more in the future

 

[Deleted member 444674]

So basically she was cheating on her boyfriend with the mc and then was sad when her bf cheated on her and then dumped her? lol Thot logic. Also is the mc mixed race? Some renders of his face and the thot almost calling him the n-word makes me think he is. His mom putting him up for adoption to hide that she got blacked makes sense. Don't feel like reading 10 pages so all of this is probably already brought up.
As long as we can keep Ayana as a side chick this game should be pretty good.

No, she stopped everything with the MC to give her other relationship a chance, but she knew it was a losing battle anyway. They never did anything while Ayana was in her other relationship. They actually cut most things off for the short months that Ayana was taken, only really talking at work. It only pissed her off because she knew that they never did anything but her ex still cheated anyway. That was the thing I failed to make clear.

 

[Deleted member 444674]

I also see my Twitter was linked to the OP. Don’t mind that everyone. It is official but it’s not really OFFICIAL.

I won’t be posting news/announcements there. Not now anyway. It’s mostly there just for my own entertainment at this point in time.

 

[TiffanyMonroe]

Yes mc and his twinsister (middle girl on banner) are mixed race, Zero said he will work on the mc more in the future

Finally some originality. At first I thought she was just a white girl with a tan lol but I like the "twinsister" angle better.

No, she stopped everything with the MC to give her other relationship a chance, but she knew it was a losing battle anyway. They never did anything while Ayana was in her other relationship. They actually cut most things off for the short months that Ayana was taken, only really talking at work. It only pissed her off because she knew that they never did anything but her ex still cheated anyway. That was the thing I failed to make clear.

Well alright. We have ourselves a game.

 

[AM97]

I'm having a hard time imagining how one of the other girls could surpass Anaya, because she's more or less perfect in my book

 

[Lordsky4ever]

Will there be an android version coming

 

[vir_cotto]

I didn't post anything for probably around ten days and I didn't feel like posting anyway... And playing 0.1? I'm not doing that for quite some time. I'm glad, though, I believed in my intuition and tried this 0.1.

I'm telling this because this game made me post - that's how great it is so far. Really believable life situation turned into an interesting story, likeable characters and realistic emotions...

Also, I don't really care about animations in the games but those I found here made me stop for a moment in awe. I was absolutely mesmerized by lights travelling along Ayane's arm. I don't remember when was the last time I was so thrilled with animation - maybe never. Amazing!

And about girls - I saw others on the starting screen but, personally, I'm already in love with Ayane. Again, I don't remember when was the last time I saw such a lovely personality in AVN.

Really great stuff. Congrats to dev.

 

[Deleted member 59977]

No, she stopped everything with the MC to give her other relationship a chance, but she knew it was a losing battle anyway. They never did anything while Ayana was in her other relationship. They actually cut most things off for the short months that Ayana was taken, only really talking at work. It only pissed her off because she knew that they never did anything but her ex still cheated anyway. That was the thing I failed to make clear.

I think that part was pretty clear (to me at least). If there is anything you should have made a bit more clear I think you should have elaborated a little more about the MC's thoughts on the whole thing. You have a girl he clearly cares about more than anyone else. They even have an intimate sexual relationship. But she suddenly ditches him to fuck another guy cutting all contact with him in the process (maybe this is an exaggeration but you get what I mean). In cases like this one would normally feel something be it anger or feelings of hurt or loneliness but we never get to see what he thinks of all this. His indifference to the whole thing was what made the sex scene seem so out of place to me - he had no opinion about all of this and when she broke up and came back to the MC they both acted like nothing happened and thats what felt really weird I guess what I am saying is that her actions deserve some sort of emotional reaction from the MC.

 

[WaerM]

Really love the game this far , Ayana is smoking hot , renders are crisp and the Dialogue is excellent...
One question though ChainZero what does the expression "kissing teeth" mean ? (not an english native speaking) so to me it sounds wierd)...
Keep up the good work and looking forward to see where this goes

 

[Deleted member 444674]

I think that part was pretty clear (to me at least). If there is anything you should have made a bit more clear I think you should have elaborated a little more about the MC's thoughts on the whole thing. You have a girl he clearly cares about more than anyone else. They even have an intimate sexual relationship. But she suddenly ditches him to fuck another guy cutting all contact with him in the process (maybe this is an exaggeration but you get what I mean). In cases like this one would normally feel something be it anger or feelings of hurt or loneliness but we never get to see what he thinks of all this. His indifference to the whole thing was what made the sex scene seem so out of place to me - he had no opinion about all of this and when she broke up and came back to the MC they both acted like nothing happened and thats what felt really weird I guess what I am saying is that her actions deserve some sort of emotional reaction from the MC.

That will be explained in 0.2. The biggest struggle here was finding a way to make this work because it's exposition and exposition can be very boring, but since it was an adult scene as well, I just went with a narration. The initial idea was to have the MC speak from his POV while we saw Ayana in the shower, but then there was this whole confusion on how I was gonna manage to narrate the scene while keeping the MC's POV when he doesn't know what she's doing. So I just went with the normal narration. But you will hear both of their feelings on the matter in 0.2.

I released a 0.1b on my patreon that was going to include a revision of the text for that, but decided against it since a couple of scenes are dedicated to that specific plot point.

 

[Deleted member 444674]

Really love the game this far , Ayana is smoking hot , renders are crisp and the Dialogue is excellent...
One question though ChainZero what does the expression "kissing teeth" mean ? (not an english native speaking) so to me it sounds wierd)...
Keep up the good work and looking forward to see where this goes

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[Ceesko]

The game is great, writing looks way above standard and the renders are gorgeous. However the game is not for me personally, I do not like mexican style melodramas in porn VNs, or Latin soap operas. I wish the dev all the best.

 

[WaerM]

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Thx Mate than I get it

 

[fauxplayer]

Updated OP with v0.1b

 

[eddiesays]

Silly question time but I am new to this. I played the first (0.1) but how to continue with this new version (0.1b). Do I move saves or ? A little confused with my first update.. I am assuming I do not have to re-start the entire game.. Thanks in advance.

 

[Deleted member 444674]

Silly question time but I am new to this. I played the first (0.1) but how to continue with this new version (0.1b). Do I move saves or ? A little confused with my first update.. I am assuming I do not have to re-start the entire game.. Thanks in advance.

0.1b is just a few fixes to the original, so you don't necessarily have to download it, but if you really want to, everything should already be there. All your saves should be there for you, so you don't have to transfer anything over.

 

[eddiesays]

Thank you ChainZero. I was trying to find an article on this site on how to do updates in general - I have a lot to learn. Thank you again.

 

[the66]

here is my unofficial android port of Connected v0.1b.

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from now on my android ports of Ren'Py games have a 2nd, persistent save location like windows. if you uninstall an app, the save files and persistent data remain intact.
therefore the app needs the permission to access the public external storage, because it has to read and write outside its own external storage directories.
you have to grant the permission or the app is shut down.

have fun and please report problems (you can reach me

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