- Aug 19, 2018
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got me curious now about this other game if your interested in it lol. ah well just have to wait and see
- Mar 13, 2018
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It's not abandoned, not onhold. It's under development. But I don't want to release without proofread this time.
- Apr 5, 2018
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There's a whole lot of text to be proofread. And when I say "a whole lot", I mean there is enough for at least 3 versions
So, hold on for a bit. This is going to be a long ride...
-S
I did a mistake I hope you are talking about the PREVIEW version and that's how I read it. If it is then the Spoiler tag mostly not true what I feel right now.
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WoW lesbian and incest in one game... With female protagonist and no man.
That is something new here I will wait for the updates till there is more content. But I wish you good luck.
Will watch this thread
That is something new here
I will wait for the updates till there is more content. But I wish you good luck. Will watch this thread
- Sep 27, 2018
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The Dev needs to learn to use their Software ->
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If no game development experience is required for proofreading, then I could help proofread. In other words, if it is just reviewing text and suggesting changes to improve this game. My native language is English (US); however, I have worked all over the world. I'm a retired Engineer so I'm used to proofreading email, memos, and even technical reports which were written by others. Many of those were written by people for whom English was not their native language. I've even had to translate lengthy reports (hundreds of pages) from other languages into English even though I did not speak the language myself.
I REALLY like you game and the genre is perfect for me! Therefore, I hope that you can continue the development and that is why I would like to help. Also, your English is not all that bad. However, some language problems can be distracting to those of us who are trying to play the game.
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Got an error
Code:
I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred.
While loading <'Image' u'Characters/Chapter 01/melissa_write_diary_melroom.png'>:
IOError: Couldn't find file 'Characters/Chapter 01/melissa_write_diary_melroom.png'.
-- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------
Full traceback:
File "melissa_ch01.rpyc", line 1178, in script
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\ast.py", line 1357, in execute
renpy.exports.with_statement(trans, paired)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\exports.py", line 1455, in with_statement
return renpy.game.interface.do_with(trans, paired, clear=clear)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\core.py", line 2217, in do_with
clear=clear)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\core.py", line 2662, in interact
repeat, rv = self.interact_core(preloads=preloads, trans_pause=trans_pause, **kwargs)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\core.py", line 3148, in interact_core
self.draw_screen(root_widget, fullscreen_video, (not fullscreen_video) or video_frame_drawn)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\core.py", line 2065, in draw_screen
renpy.config.screen_height,
File "render.pyx", line 487, in renpy.display.render.render_screen
File "render.pyx", line 235, in renpy.display.render.render
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\layout.py", line 719, in render
surf = render(child, width, height, cst, cat)
File "render.pyx", line 147, in renpy.display.render.render
File "render.pyx", line 235, in renpy.display.render.render
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\transition.py", line 361, in render
top = render(self.new_widget, width, height, st, at)
File "render.pyx", line 147, in renpy.display.render.render
File "render.pyx", line 235, in renpy.display.render.render
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\layout.py", line 719, in render
surf = render(child, width, height, cst, cat)
File "render.pyx", line 147, in renpy.display.render.render
File "render.pyx", line 235, in renpy.display.render.render
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\layout.py", line 719, in render
surf = render(child, width, height, cst, cat)
File "render.pyx", line 147, in renpy.display.render.render
File "render.pyx", line 235, in renpy.display.render.render
File "accelerator.pyx", line 110, in renpy.display.accelerator.transform_render
File "render.pyx", line 235, in renpy.display.render.render
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\image.py", line 497, in render
return wrap_render(self.target, width, height, st, at)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\image.py", line 306, in wrap_render
rend = render(child, w, h, st, at)
File "render.pyx", line 147, in renpy.display.render.render
File "render.pyx", line 235, in renpy.display.render.render
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\im.py", line 580, in render
return cache.get(self, render=True)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\im.py", line 266, in get
surf = image.load()
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\display\im.py", line 625, in load
surf = renpy.display.pgrender.load_image(renpy.loader.load(self.filename), self.filename)
File "C:\Users\chuck\Desktop\Decisions Made\Decisions_Made_01a-0.1a-pc\renpy\loader.py", line 576, in load
raise IOError("Couldn't find file '%s'." % name)
IOError: Couldn't find file 'Characters/Chapter 01/melissa_write_diary_melroom.png'.
Windows-8-6.2.9200
Ren'Py 7.1.0.882
Decisions Made 0.1a
Sat Sep 29 20:31:32 2018
- Aug 21, 2018
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First, in the in the first minutes I see the common problem of him/her mistakes. That destroys every text because it is essential to keep track of the persons involved - and there are missing words: "She wasn't well my father passed away..." -> "She wasn't well since my father passed away..."
The presentation is very static with the few poses and no full rendered pictures. This is a lot easier and I understand that it saves time.
And then the basic premise... there I have to agree to
It is not unusual that there are many elements in the stories that are unrealistic and unlikely, but the basis should be as plausible as possible. For me a basis à la "In a world where there are only women, only you, Tom, can populate the world again" would be extremely boring.
It should be possible to explain the situation for the main characters more logically, without changing more than the text.
Good example at the beginning:
"Oliver: I also need to go back to Liverpool, so I won't be joining for the first night... Long story, Anna knows why"
"Anna: I do and I still don't understand why."
"Oliver: Neither do I... But I guess we'll find out soon enough..."
Maybe that is intended to be some kind of 4th wall breaking, but that's not clear enough or works for me.
When he can't stay with them, then don't let him go with them - start the story earlier or make a flashback for Anna and Oliver to explain it.
This continues at the train station with the sister - why do you send her there? It's hard to believe that she meet them there by chance. Let Anna meet her later after meeting Lisa in the cafe or something like that, but not in a staion of a major city on minute 1. And just after that "The boys were chatting about sport..." what boys? This is directly after Hannah left the scene and there are only the girls and Oliver. I think this maybe a translation problem, but 1 guy and 1-2 girls are not "boys" ^^
That's just my first impression, but that already makes it a hard to sell game for me. In my opinion, the basic story and the introduction of the characters is extremely important. Later, you can get away with illogical actions etc. more easily, but in the beginning you have to sell yourself well.
I see the good intention and this is just critic to help and imho karnage3d is right with his posts and advisory to look into the games he mentioned. They all have likable and diverse characters and a solid foundation in their story. You can go nuts later on like Dream of Desire when you start good. (sure that is an extreme example^^)
You have to find a good catch because the story of "we start living in a new city" is maybe the most used cliché in this genre ^^ - or make this as plausible as possible.
I will continue to play and see where this is going to...
Edit: Aaand - i hugged Hannah only once, but my daughter said I hugged her twice - minor bug. ^^
The presentation is very static with the few poses and no full rendered pictures. This is a lot easier and I understand that it saves time.
And then the basic premise... there I have to agree to
You should rethink and rewrite that to make it more believable. I know thats not the most important thing in porn games, but for me (and a lot of other ppl) it can make a huge difference.
It is not unusual that there are many elements in the stories that are unrealistic and unlikely, but the basis should be as plausible as possible. For me a basis à la "In a world where there are only women, only you, Tom, can populate the world again" would be extremely boring.
It should be possible to explain the situation for the main characters more logically, without changing more than the text.
Good example at the beginning:
"Oliver: I also need to go back to Liverpool, so I won't be joining for the first night... Long story, Anna knows why"
"Anna: I do and I still don't understand why."
"Oliver: Neither do I... But I guess we'll find out soon enough..."
Maybe that is intended to be some kind of 4th wall breaking, but that's not clear enough or works for me.
When he can't stay with them, then don't let him go with them - start the story earlier or make a flashback for Anna and Oliver to explain it.
This continues at the train station with the sister - why do you send her there? It's hard to believe that she meet them there by chance. Let Anna meet her later after meeting Lisa in the cafe or something like that, but not in a staion of a major city on minute 1. And just after that "The boys were chatting about sport..." what boys? This is directly after Hannah left the scene and there are only the girls and Oliver. I think this maybe a translation problem, but 1 guy and 1-2 girls are not "boys" ^^
That's just my first impression, but that already makes it a hard to sell game for me. In my opinion, the basic story and the introduction of the characters is extremely important. Later, you can get away with illogical actions etc. more easily, but in the beginning you have to sell yourself well.
I see the good intention and this is just critic to help and imho karnage3d is right with his posts and advisory to look into the games he mentioned. They all have likable and diverse characters and a solid foundation in their story. You can go nuts later on like Dream of Desire when you start good. (sure that is an extreme example^^)
You have to find a good catch because the story of "we start living in a new city" is maybe the most used cliché in this genre ^^ - or make this as plausible as possible.
I will continue to play and see where this is going to...
Edit: Aaand - i hugged Hannah only once, but my daughter said I hugged her twice - minor bug. ^^
@Jody Rufo
Female getting in one with a bunch of meatheads isn't always fun either. There was a son but I think they were changed to a female but there is that Oliver who you might be able to do stuff with unless they get the romance option removed for them as stated by the DEV in the first post. For me I usually ignore males in female protag games if it is possible.
@rebeldad
Did you start a new game or are you trying to use a old save? If you are using a old one try starting a new game.
Female getting in one with a bunch of meatheads isn't always fun either. There was a son but I think they were changed to a female but there is that Oliver who you might be able to do stuff with unless they get the romance option removed for them as stated by the DEV in the first post. For me I usually ignore males in female protag games if it is possible.
@rebeldad
Did you start a new game or are you trying to use a old save? If you are using a old one try starting a new game.
New save and get error when find Daughters diary as well as an error when you choose Hannah Romance at end of update during dialog scene with her.
and yeah need to do some proofreading imo. Many times Danielle is referred to as him, his etc in dialog.
and yeah need to do some proofreading imo. Many times Danielle is referred to as him, his etc in dialog.
Changed Danielle's name to Danielle Doyle and edited and changed it to where she's a daughter and that the mother and Doyle had 2 kids before he played tag with that none moving object that leapt out in front of him. Removed the send her away option and removed the Oliver points they could get since I'm never going to send her away so there is no point for me to have that option. I also removed his other options and points. Both girls seem pretty good so far. Many spots even though the son is now a daughter there are many spots in the script where it still lists them as he.
I put a patch later this day. I don't know why it is bugged out this hard since I did fix Melissa's Diary yesterday... Danielle should have been also. That's what you get for having two separate folders in game...
About English: This should be a proofread version by two fellow members. I can't proofread myself and that's why was a big delay since first preview version and first real version.
About the saves: I saw a post where they said how to use compatible. Problem is: there were changed in the game's structure. Many objects have been changed. For example: Quests were in the game in preview also many things but it was denied. Quests were a single, defined objects. They are now: default, queue objects.
Preview: define homeQuest = 1 (preview version)
Now: default homeQuest = [1] (0.1a and above)
Because of the keyword 'default' the quest wouldn't trigger up on load and cause game crashes ever time a quest triggered.
About prologue: I could do a better backstory for next release. Also will fix Hannah at station.
Still About Males: Sorry... But if you see my next game in future games remember that my games won't have any male routes. Also: I don't sorry. Last two weeks while 'proofreaders' worked I've played games with female prot tag which were utter catastrophe. It was like this: rape, gangbang rape and humility. I don't want to follow this line.
Many things were supposed to be fixed (some of them not by me like proofreading), I don't think the next real update will come soon enough.
About English: This should be a proofread version by two fellow members. I can't proofread myself and that's why was a big delay since first preview version and first real version.
About the saves: I saw a post where they said how to use compatible. Problem is: there were changed in the game's structure. Many objects have been changed. For example: Quests were in the game in preview also many things but it was denied. Quests were a single, defined objects. They are now: default, queue objects.
Preview: define homeQuest = 1 (preview version)
Now: default homeQuest = [1] (0.1a and above)
Because of the keyword 'default' the quest wouldn't trigger up on load and cause game crashes ever time a quest triggered.
About prologue: I could do a better backstory for next release. Also will fix Hannah at station.
Still About Males: Sorry... But if you see my next game in future games remember that my games won't have any male routes. Also: I don't sorry. Last two weeks while 'proofreaders' worked I've played games with female prot tag which were utter catastrophe. It was like this: rape, gangbang rape and humility. I don't want to follow this line.
Many things were supposed to be fixed (some of them not by me like proofreading), I don't think the next real update will come soon enough.